Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive. Try to be more concise and clear by directly answering the question first, then adding one or two supporting details. Also, avoid redundancy such as "I don't have a good voice so that's why I don't prefer to sing." Instead, say "I don't like singing because I think I don't have a good voice."

Exemplo: No, I don't like singing because I think I don't have a good voice. However, I sometimes sing alone in the bathroom to lift my mood when I feel down.

Sugestão: Your answer lacks clarity and has some grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'music' and 'she was', say 'I took music classes in 7th grade with a teacher who had a great voice. She helped me improve my singing, although I still don't sing well.'

Exemplo: Yes, I took music classes in 7th grade with a teacher who had a great voice. She helped me improve my singing skills, but I still don't consider myself a good singer.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and a bit unclear. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you want your boyfriend to sing a love song for you.

Exemplo: I would like my boyfriend to sing a love song for me because I want to feel his affection and emotions through the music.

Sugestão: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, say 'Absolutely, singing can relax people when they feel low because it helps them express their emotions. Therefore, I believe singing definitely brings happiness to people.'

Exemplo: Absolutely, singing can relax people when they feel low because it helps them express their emotions. Therefore, I believe singing definitely brings happiness to people.

× No, I don't like singing because I don't have a good voice so that's why I don't prefer to sing.

✓ No, I don't like singing because I don't have a good voice, so I don't prefer to sing.

The original sentence has a run-on structure with 'so that's why' which is redundant and awkward. Replacing it with a comma and 'so' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Sometimes I like to sing my own things just to vibe by myself when I feel low.

✓ Sometimes I like to sing my own songs just to vibe by myself when I feel low.

The phrase 'sing my own things' is incorrect; 'things' is too vague and not appropriate here. 'Songs' is the correct noun to use after 'sing'.

× I'm not interested in any type of thing so I like to enjoy my company.

✓ I'm not interested in any type of thing, so I like to enjoy my own company.

The phrase 'enjoy my company' is incorrect because it implies enjoying oneself as perceived by others. The correct expression is 'enjoy my own company' meaning enjoying being alone.

× Yes, I remember when I was in 7th grade there was a teacher in my school so she used to give classes of music.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was in 7th grade, there was a teacher in my school who used to give music classes.

The phrase 'give classes of music' is awkward; the correct collocation is 'give music classes'. Also, adding 'who' clarifies the relative clause.

× She was she was having a great voice.

✓ She had a great voice.

The phrase 'was having' is incorrect here because 'have' in this context is a stative verb and should be in simple past tense 'had'. Also, the repetition 'She was she was' is an error.

× She helps me to sing in a clear and beautiful voice, but I don't.

✓ She helped me to sing in a clear and beautiful voice, but I don't.

Since the context is past ('when I was in 7th grade'), 'helps' should be in past tense 'helped'. The phrase 'but I don't' is incomplete and unclear; it likely means 'but I don't sing well' or 'but I don't have a good voice' and should be clarified.

× I really like to my boyfriend to sing a song for me.

✓ I really like my boyfriend to sing a song for me.

The phrase 'like to my boyfriend to sing' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'like my boyfriend to sing'.

× I would say this thing should be a love song which in which I can feel the love from his side and.

✓ I would say it should be a love song in which I can feel the love from his side.

The phrase 'this thing' is vague; 'it' is better. Also, 'which in which' is redundant; only 'in which' is needed. The sentence was incomplete and is corrected for clarity.

× Absolutely, songs gives gives a relaxation whenever people feel low, the things in which they get emotions so it really uplift their mood.

✓ Absolutely, songs give relaxation whenever people feel low; these are things that evoke emotions and really uplift their mood.

The verb 'gives' does not agree with the plural subject 'songs'; it should be 'give'. The phrase 'a relaxation' is incorrect; 'relaxation' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I think sing songs can give happiness to the people definitely without any love.

✓ So I think singing songs can definitely give happiness to people without any love.

The phrase 'sing songs' is incorrect; the gerund 'singing songs' is appropriate here. Also, 'the people' is changed to 'people' for generalization. The adverb 'definitely' is repositioned for natural flow.