Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your response more concise and structured by directly answering the question, then providing clear supporting details. Avoid run-on sentences and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it brings me comfort and joy. When I was a child, I even considered a career in singing, but my family encouraged me to focus on my education instead.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but some phrases are unclear, such as 'automation and the tune and the vocals of your voice.' Try to use clearer vocabulary and link your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'really into the depth of its course.'

Exemplo: Yes, I took singing lessons as a child where I learned about vocal techniques and how to control my voice. However, I am not currently taking any classes.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it could be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, try to avoid redundancy and make your sentences more concise.

Exemplo: I usually sing for my friends and family during our weekend gatherings, which happen once or twice a month. We enjoy singing and dancing together to create a cheerful atmosphere.

Sugestão: Your answer conveys the idea well but contains some awkward phrasing and minor grammatical errors. Try to use more natural expressions and link your ideas smoothly for better coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. Singing can bring a lot of happiness because it helps people relax and feel better. It offers a break from daily stress and allows us to enjoy quality time with family and friends.

× I thought I might pursue my career in singing but since my father was more inclined towards me doing my graduation and doctorate so I had to pursue this If not, I'm a big.

✓ I thought I might pursue my career in singing, but since my father was more inclined towards me completing my graduation and doctorate, I had to pursue this. If not, I'm a big fan.

The original sentence has incorrect modal verb usage and unclear phrasing. 'Inclined towards me doing' should be 'inclined towards me completing' to correctly express the father's preference. Also, the phrase 'If not, I'm a big.' is incomplete and unclear; it likely intended to say 'If not, I'm a big fan.' or similar. The sentence was split for clarity and proper conjunction use.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing.

✓ Yes, I have learnt how to sing.

In Canadian English, 'learnt' is the preferred past participle form of 'learn' rather than 'learned'. Using 'have learnt' fits better in this context.

× I used to take special classes that revolved around the automation and the tune and the vocals of your voice.

✓ I used to take special classes that revolved around the automation, the tune, and the vocals of the voice.

The phrase 'revolved around the automation and the tune and the vocals of your voice' is awkward and unclear. 'Automation' is likely a misused word here; possibly 'intonation' was intended. Also, 'your voice' should be 'the voice' to maintain generality. Commas are added for clarity.

× I usually find myself singing for my friends and family often when we have a get together, maybe over the weekends or once or twice in a month.

✓ I usually find myself singing for my friends and family often when we have a get-together, maybe over the weekends or once or twice a month.

'Get together' should be hyphenated as 'get-together' when used as a noun. Also, 'in a month' is better expressed as 'a month' without 'in' for natural phrasing.

× We all tend to sing or dance and make the environment light hearted so we all enjoy.

✓ We all tend to sing or dance and make the environment light-hearted so we all enjoy ourselves.

'Light hearted' should be hyphenated as 'light-hearted' when used as an adjective. Also, adding 'ourselves' clarifies the reflexive action of enjoying.

× Singing can bring a great joy.

✓ Singing can bring great joy.

'Joy' is an uncountable noun and does not require the article 'a'. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× It is often encouraged to relax or to feel better.

✓ It is often encouraged as a way to relax or to feel better.

The original sentence lacks clarity. Adding 'as a way' clarifies that singing is encouraged for relaxation or feeling better.

× It is a great way of escaping from everyday's hustle and taking a little time off to feel refreshing and to have a pleasant full time with family and friends.

✓ It is a great way of escaping from everyday hustle and taking a little time off to feel refreshed and to have a pleasant time with family and friends.

'Everyday's hustle' is incorrect; 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace' and does not take a possessive. 'Everyday hustle' is correct. Also, 'feel refreshing' should be 'feel refreshed' to use the correct adjective form. 'Pleasant full time' is awkward; 'pleasant time' is better.