Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и логичным. Следует избегать неясных выражений, таких как "First one is his". Используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями и конкретизируйте причины, почему пение нравится.

Exemplo: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and improve my mood. For example, when I feel tired, singing cheers me up. Also, I enjoy trying new songs just for fun.

Sugestão: Ответ нечеткий и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует прямо ответить на вопрос, использовать связующие слова и конкретизировать опыт обучения пению.

Exemplo: Yes, I have tried to learn singing. Two years ago, I practiced singing some songs because I had a competition. It helped me improve my skills.

Sugestão: Ответ неясен и повторяет одни и те же идеи. Следует четко сформулировать цель пения и использовать связующие слова для логичности.

Exemplo: I usually sing for myself because it makes me happy. However, sometimes I sing for my family or friends to entertain them.

Sugestão: Ответ содержит смысл, но выражен неестественно и с ошибками. Следует использовать более точные выражения и связующие слова для улучшения связности.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For instance, when people feel sad, singing can help them relax and feel better.

× First one is his.

✓ The first one is this.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrectly used here as it does not refer to anything previously mentioned. The correct demonstrative pronoun 'this' should be used to refer to the first reason mentioned.

× Maybe just for fun when I'm tired or maybe want to try to sing.

✓ Maybe just for fun when I'm tired or when I want to try singing.

The sentence lacks a subject in the second clause ('maybe want to try to sing'). Adding 'when I' clarifies the subject and verb, and changing 'to sing' to 'singing' fits better with 'try'.

× It's really helpful to make your mood better and also.

✓ It's really helpful to improve your mood as well.

The conjunction 'and also' is awkward and incomplete at the end of the sentence. Replacing it with 'as well' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× I think all people use it to learn some music.

✓ I think all people use it to learn some songs.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear here; 'it' presumably refers to singing, but 'learn some music' is awkward. 'Learn some songs' is more natural and clear.

× And then, yeah, it was also with me.

✓ And then, yeah, it was the same with me.

The phrase 'it was also with me' is awkward and unclear. 'It was the same with me' correctly expresses the intended meaning in past tense.

× I remembered that two years ago I tried to learn some words of music because I had some competition and I must.

✓ I remember that two years ago I tried to learn some song lyrics because I had a competition and I had to.

'Remembered' should be present tense 'remember' to match the context. 'Words of music' is better expressed as 'song lyrics'. 'Must' should be past tense 'had to' to match the past event.

× Actually there are no exactly aim.

✓ Actually, there is no exact aim.

'Aim' is singular, so 'there are' should be 'there is'. Also, 'no exactly aim' is incorrect; it should be 'no exact aim'.

× I think it's only for myself and there is no aim and I think it's not so necessary.

✓ I think it's only for myself, and there is no aim; I think it's not really necessary.

The sentence is run-on and unclear. Adding commas and semicolons improves clarity. 'Not so necessary' is better expressed as 'not really necessary'.

× I can just sing for myself and it is enough.

✓ I can just sing for myself, and that is enough.

Using 'it' is vague; 'that' clearly refers to singing for oneself.

× But sometimes I try.

✓ But sometimes I try to sing for others.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'to sing for others' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, absolutely, because it is really helpful and necessary hobby.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because it is a really helpful and necessary hobby.

The article 'a' is missing before 'really helpful and necessary hobby'.

× When you feel yourself very sad or disappointed after singing, you can feel yourself very good and have some relaxing.

✓ When you feel very sad or disappointed, after singing you can feel much better and relaxed.

'Feel yourself very sad' and 'feel yourself very good' are incorrect; 'feel very sad' and 'feel much better' are correct. 'Have some relaxing' is incorrect; 'feel relaxed' or 'feel relaxed' is better.