Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and repeated phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax. For example, I often sing in the shower, which makes me feel happy and refreshed.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to organize your ideas logically. Provide specific details about how you have learned singing through practice and listening.

Exemplo: I haven't had formal lessons, but I have learned to sing by practicing regularly and listening to famous singers. This self-study has helped me improve my skills over time.

Sugestão: Your answer is confusing and contains many hesitations and unclear phrases. Focus on giving a direct answer with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons or feelings about why you want to sing for those people. Avoid unnecessary filler words.

Exemplo: I want to sing for my parents and my boyfriend because it makes me happy to express my feelings through music. Singing for them also helps me feel more confident.

Sugestão: Your answer has good ideas but is affected by many hesitations and some awkward phrasing. Try to express your thoughts more clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

Exemplo: Absolutely, singing can refresh people's minds and improve their mood. When people sing, they often forget their problems and focus on the positive feelings that music brings.

× Yes, I'm I'm a big fan of singing because it's a really interesting activity that I like to do with and I actually do it when I'm taking a shower and I think that my favorite song in that time feels good.

✓ Yes, I'm a big fan of singing because it's a really interesting activity that I like to do, and I actually do it when I'm taking a shower. I think that singing my favorite song at that time feels good.

The original sentence has an incomplete conjunction 'to do with' which is incorrect and confusing. The conjunction 'and' should connect two complete ideas. Also, the sentence is long and run-on; splitting it improves clarity. The phrase 'my favorite song in that time' is awkward; 'singing my favorite song at that time' is clearer.

× Umm, actually I couldn't enough time to learn, uh, anything about it.

✓ Umm, actually I didn't have enough time to learn anything about it.

The phrase 'couldn't enough time' is grammatically incorrect. The correct past tense expression to indicate lack of time is 'didn't have enough time'. 'Could' is a modal verb and cannot be used directly with 'enough time' without 'have'.

× And everything that I know is, uh, I could achieve, uh, from, uh, only practice and uh, listening to different singers and different well known singers actually that are alive a light of my way in this way.

✓ Everything that I know, I have achieved only from practice and listening to different well-known singers who are alive and have been a light on my way.

The original sentence has awkward conjunctions and phrasing making it unclear. 'I could achieve' should be 'I have achieved' to indicate completed action. 'Different well known singers actually that are alive a light of my way in this way' is confusing; it should be 'well-known singers who are alive and have been a light on my way' for clarity and correctness.

× I want to sing to my, uh, for my parents, uh, or my boyfriend because I think that the thing that I'm, uh, so clever in this way and I can learn anything very well.

✓ I want to sing for my parents or my boyfriend because I think that I am very good at this and I can learn anything very well.

The phrase 'sing to my, uh, for my parents' mixes prepositions incorrectly; 'sing for' is the correct preposition. The phrase 'the thing that I'm so clever in this way' is awkward and unclear; it is better expressed as 'I am very good at this'.

× And I'm, uh, actually, uh, uh, acting well in singing when I sing for them.

✓ Actually, I perform well in singing when I sing for them.

The phrase 'acting well in singing' is incorrect; 'perform well in singing' or 'sing well' is appropriate. Also, removing unnecessary fillers and conjunctions improves clarity.

× Singing can refresh, uh, people's, uh, uh, people's, uh, mind and also lift their mood.

✓ Singing can refresh people's minds and also lift their mood.

The phrase 'people's mind' should be plural 'people's minds' because 'people' is plural. Also, removing repeated fillers improves clarity.

× And when they sing, uh, they can forget any, uh, disappointing, uh, happening in their life and will, uh, only focus on singing and not pay attention in different, uh, that's going wrong.

✓ And when they sing, they can forget any disappointing events in their life and will only focus on singing and not pay attention to things that are going wrong.

The phrase 'pay attention in different, uh, that's going wrong' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'pay attention to'. Also, 'disappointing happening' is better expressed as 'disappointing events' for naturalness.