Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, làm cho ý không rõ ràng và tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy chú ý đến việc sử dụng thì và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: I don't usually sing because my voice is quite deep and I feel it doesn't suit most songs. Therefore, I prefer listening to music rather than singing. However, I enjoy singing occasionally with my friends just for fun.

Sugestão: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là thì và cấu trúc câu. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi sai như 'it's not takes' và dùng từ phù hợp hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: When I was a child, I attended a singing class, but I didn't continue for long because my deep voice didn't suit most songs. So, I decided to try playing other instruments instead.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng chưa chính xác như 'unconfident' nên dùng 'uncomfortable' hoặc 'nervous'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và giải thích rõ hơn bằng cách dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc.

Exemplo: I mostly sing with my friends because I feel comfortable around them. However, my parents sometimes comment on my singing.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời thiếu mạch lạc, có nhiều từ ngắt quãng và lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên tránh dùng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'umm' và 'uh', đồng thời hoàn chỉnh câu trả lời với cấu trúc rõ ràng và từ vựng phù hợp.

Exemplo: I think singing can bring happiness depending on the person's purpose. Some sing to earn money, while others sing for fun to reduce stress and relax. For me, singing helps me to relax more.

× Well, I don't usually sing because my voice is quite deep, but if and I feel it doesn't suit most songs, when I try to sing I think it sound unpleasant.

✓ Well, I don't usually sing because my voice is quite deep, and I feel it doesn't suit most songs. When I try to sing, I think it sounds unpleasant.

The original sentence has a conjunction error and a subject-verb agreement error. 'if and I feel' is incorrect; it should be 'and I feel'. Also, 'I think it sound unpleasant' should be 'I think it sounds unpleasant' because 'it' is third person singular and requires the verb to have an 's' ending in present tense.

× When I was a kid I used to attend a singing class, but it's not takes too long because I have a quite deep voice.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to attend a singing class, but it didn't take too long because I have quite a deep voice.

The phrase 'it's not takes too long' is grammatically incorrect. The correct past tense form is 'it didn't take too long' to match the past context. Also, 'a quite deep voice' should be 'quite a deep voice' for correct adjective order.

× I feel it doesn't suit the most song, so I try some another instrument.

✓ I feel it doesn't suit most songs, so I try some other instruments.

'the most song' is incorrect; it should be 'most songs' to indicate plural. Also, 'some another instrument' is incorrect; 'some other instruments' is the correct phrase to indicate trying different instruments.

× I mostly sing with my friends because I don't feel any unconfident when I'm along with my friend but my parents will talk about it.

✓ I mostly sing with my friends because I don't feel unconfident when I'm with my friends, but my parents will talk about it.

'any unconfident' is incorrect; 'unconfident' is an adjective and does not use 'any'. Also, 'when I'm along with my friend' is incorrect; it should be 'when I'm with my friends' for correct preposition and plural consistency.

× Well, it depends on their purpose. Some people seem to umm, earn monies. Some people sing for fun to uh, reduce stress and get relaxed. For me is relax more rather than.

✓ Well, it depends on their purpose. Some people seem to earn money. Some people sing for fun to reduce stress and relax. For me, it is more about relaxing.

'earn monies' is incorrect; 'money' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. 'get relaxed' should be 'relax' for correct verb usage. The last sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical; it should be rephrased to 'For me, it is more about relaxing.'