Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 답변이 자연스럽고 감정을 표현하는 이유를 잘 설명했으나, 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, "it makes me fun" 대신 "it makes me happy"를 사용하고, "make good memory" 대신 "create good memories"라고 표현하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 다듬고 연결어를 사용하여 답변을 더 논리적으로 만들면 좋겠습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it is a fantastic way to express my emotions and relieve stress. Moreover, singing with my friends helps me create good memories and have fun together.

Sugestão: 답변이 직접적이고 이유를 제시했으나, 문법과 어휘 사용에 개선이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, "singing Academy" 대신 "singing academy" 또는 "singing classes"를 사용하고, "there is no enough time" 대신 "there isn't enough time"이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 두 개로 나누어 명확하게 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

Exemplo: No, I've never learned how to sing because attending a singing academy is quite expensive. Also, I have to study hard at math and English academies, so I don't have enough time to learn singing.

Sugestão: 답변에 오타와 어색한 표현이 많아 이해하기 어렵습니다. "singing Kim"은 아마도 "singing"과 "him"의 오타로 보이며, "makes the situation more romantically"는 "makes the situation more romantic"으로 수정해야 합니다. 또한, "gesture gesture" 중복도 수정해야 합니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 다듬고, 연결어를 사용해 보세요.

Exemplo: I want to sing for my boyfriend on our anniversary because singing makes the moment more romantic. I really want to see him touched by my song. I think singing for someone I love is a very special and romantic gesture.

Sugestão: 답변이 주제에 잘 맞고 예시도 포함되어 있으나, "it makes feel"과 같은 문법 오류가 있습니다. "it makes me feel"로 수정하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하는 연결어를 사용하면 좋겠습니다. 또한, 어휘를 다양하게 사용하여 표현을 풍부하게 해보세요.

Exemplo: Yes, of course. I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and relax. For instance, when I feel stressed, I like to sing my favorite songs with my friends because it makes me feel happier and more positive.

× I can relax my stress.

✓ I can relieve my stress.

The phrase 'relax my stress' is incorrect because 'stress' is not something you can 'relax'. The correct verb is 'relieve' when talking about reducing stress. Therefore, 'relieve my stress' is the proper expression.

× it makes me fun

✓ it makes me happy

The word 'fun' is a noun or adjective describing something enjoyable, but it cannot be used to describe a person's feeling directly. The correct adjective to describe a feeling is 'happy'. Hence, 'it makes me happy' is correct.

× I can make good memory with my friends by singing together.

✓ I can make good memories with my friends by singing together.

The word 'memory' should be plural 'memories' when referring to multiple experiences. Therefore, 'good memories' is the correct form.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

Both 'learnt' and 'learned' are past tense forms of 'learn'. However, 'learned' is more common in American English, and since the rest of the transcript uses American English spelling (e.g., 'maths' is British but 'learned' is American), consistency is preferred. This correction is optional but recommended for consistency.

× it's really expensive to go singing Academy

✓ it's really expensive to go to a singing academy

The phrase 'go singing Academy' is missing the preposition 'to' and the article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'go to a singing academy'.

× I have to study hard in maths or English Academy

✓ I have to study hard at a maths or English academy

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate attending a place. Also, 'academy' should be preceded by an article 'a'.

× so there is no enough time to learn singing.

✓ so there is not enough time to learn singing.

The phrase 'no enough time' is incorrect. The correct form is 'not enough time' to express insufficient time.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I want to sing for my boyfriend in our anniversary because singing Kim makes the situation more romantically and I really want to see him touch it.

✓ I want to sing for my boyfriend on our anniversary because singing makes the situation more romantic and I really want to see him touched.

Several issues: 'in our anniversary' should be 'on our anniversary' (preposition error). 'singing Kim' seems to be a typo; 'singing' alone is correct. 'more romantically' should be 'more romantic' because 'romantic' is an adjective describing 'situation'. 'see him touch it' is unclear; likely intended 'see him touched' or 'see him touched emotionally' but 'see him touched' is awkward; better to say 'see him moved' or 'see him touched emotionally'. However, to keep close to original, 'see him touched' is used.

× And I think singing for someone I love is a very special and romantic gesture gesture.

✓ I think singing for someone I love is a very special and romantic gesture.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally discouraged in formal writing. Also, 'gesture' is repeated twice, which is redundant.

× I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people express their emotions and relax.

✓ I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people express their emotions and relax.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× For example, when I feel stressed, I like to sing my favorite song with my friends because it makes feel.

✓ For example, when I feel stressed, I like to sing my favorite song with my friends because it makes me feel better.

The phrase 'it makes feel' is incomplete and missing the object 'me' and the complement 'better' to complete the meaning.

× It makes me feel more positive and better.

✓ It makes me feel more positive and better.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.