Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and unnecessary phrases. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'every time' and 'I still remember', you could say: "I don't enjoy singing because I lack the talent. Although I can sing with others at church, I struggle to sing alone as I can't find the right tune."

Exemplo: I don't enjoy singing because I lack the talent. Although I can sing with others at church, I struggle to sing alone as I can't find the right tune.

Sugestão: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to organise your answer logically. For example, you could say: "I learnt some singing in junior high school, but it was not a compulsory course. We only learned popular songs at that time, and I didn't take any in-depth singing lessons."

Exemplo: I learnt some singing in junior high school, but it was not a compulsory course. We only learned popular songs at that time, and I didn't take any in-depth singing lessons.

Sugestão: Try to organise your ideas more clearly and avoid hesitations. Use linking words to connect your points. For example: "If I learn to sing well, I would sing for the Lord because He is my savior. Knowing God was a turning point in my life; I used to be depressed but now I feel positive and optimistic. Singing to praise Him would be very meaningful to me."

Exemplo: If I learn to sing well, I would sing for the Lord because He is my savior. Knowing God was a turning point in my life; I used to be depressed but now I feel positive and optimistic. Singing to praise Him would be very meaningful to me.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words like 'you know' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example: "Yes, I believe singing has positive effects. Firstly, it helps us escape the hustle and bustle of daily life. Moreover, it allows us to forget stressful routines and simply enjoy singing, which relieves pressure and cheers us up."

Exemplo: Yes, I believe singing has positive effects. Firstly, it helps us escape the hustle and bustle of daily life. Moreover, it allows us to forget stressful routines and simply enjoy singing, which relieves pressure and cheers us up.

× I don't like singing because I don't have the talent for it.

✓ I don't like singing because I don't have the talent for it.

No correction needed here as the verb form 'singing' is correctly used as a gerund after 'like'. This sentence is grammatically correct.

× And every time when I still remember that every, every time when I'm at church, I can sing together with others, but I Can't Sing alone because I can't find the right tune.

✓ And every time I am at church, I can sing together with others, but I can't sing alone because I can't find the right tune.

The phrase 'every time when I still remember that every, every time when' is redundant and awkward. 'Every time I am at church' is sufficient and grammatically correct. Also, 'Can't Sing' should be 'can't sing' with lowercase 's' as it is mid-sentence.

× To be honest, I did learn about seeing when I was in junior high school, but it was not a compulsory course and we did learn some songs which is very popular at that time.

✓ To be honest, I did learn about singing when I was in junior high school, but it was not a compulsory course and we did learn some songs which were very popular at that time.

The word 'seeing' is a typo and should be 'singing'. Also, 'which is very popular' should be 'which were very popular' to agree with the plural noun 'songs' and past tense context.

× However, I didn't learn. I didn't like take actual courses or learned in depth about the.

✓ However, I didn't learn. I didn't take actual courses or learn in depth about it.

The phrase 'didn't like take' is incorrect; it should be 'didn't take' because 'did' already indicates past tense. Also, 'learned' should be 'learn' after 'didn't' because the auxiliary verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb. The sentence ends abruptly with 'about the' which should be 'about it' for clarity.

× Well if I do learn thing well I would sing for the Lord because he is my savior.

✓ Well, if I do learn to sing well, I would sing for the Lord because he is my savior.

The phrase 'learn thing well' is incorrect; it should be 'learn to sing well'. Adding commas improves readability.

× I used to be depressed a lot but coming to know God is a turning point in my life and now I'm positive and I'm very I don't know how to put it but optimistic about my life.

✓ I used to be depressed a lot, but coming to know God was a turning point in my life and now I'm positive and, I don't know how to put it, optimistic about my life.

The phrase 'coming to know God is a turning point' should be 'was a turning point' to maintain past tense consistency. Adding commas helps clarify the sentence structure.

× So I will say in the Lord and praise him.

✓ So I will sing to the Lord and praise him.

The phrase 'say in the Lord' is incorrect; it should be 'sing to the Lord' to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, I do think seeing can have very positive impacts on the singers.

✓ Yes, I do think singing can have very positive impacts on the singers.

The word 'seeing' is a typo and should be 'singing' to match the context.

× For one thing, seeing helps us to escape from the hustle and bustle of our daily life.

✓ For one thing, singing helps us to escape from the hustle and bustle of our daily life.

The word 'seeing' is a typo and should be 'singing'. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× And we can, you know, forget all the stressful routines and just enjoy the scene itself.

✓ And we can, you know, forget all the stressful routines and just enjoy the singing itself.

The word 'scene' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'singing' to match the topic.

× It really relieves our pressure and cheer us up.

✓ It really relieves our pressure and cheers us up.

The verb 'cheer' should be in third person singular form 'cheers' to agree with the singular subject 'It'.