Chocolate— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is quite detailed but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two supporting details. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'I've always been'.

Exemplo: Yes, I love eating chocolate because I've enjoyed it since I was a child. For example, my family often brought me chocolates when they visited, which made me really passionate about sweets.

Sugestão: Good content and structure, but try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and make your sentences smoother. Also, use linking words to connect ideas clearly.

Exemplo: I used to eat chocolate daily as a child; however, now I try to limit it because too much sugar isn't healthy. Therefore, I reduce my intake to maintain my weight and keep my blood sugar stable.

Sugestão: Your answer is enthusiastic but contains some redundancy and minor grammar errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'always I never' and keep sentences clear and concise. Use linking words to improve flow.

Exemplo: Absolutely, I ate chocolate every day as a child. Whenever I went out with my parents or alone, I never missed a chance to buy some and share it with my brother, which made our time enjoyable.

Sugestão: Good explanation with scientific reasoning, but avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be careful with word choice, e.g., 'jollies' is informal and less common.

Exemplo: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it improves people's mood by releasing endorphins, which are hormones that make us feel happy. Consequently, it energises people and brings joy, no matter where they live.

Sugestão: Your answer is personal and specific, which is good. However, avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Exemplo: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because I enjoy its rich cocoa taste. Additionally, it helps relieve my period cramps, so I have developed a habit of eating it regularly.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but watch for minor grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid repeating similar ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, chocolate is a popular gift because it symbolises love and happiness. For example, Valentine's Day includes a special day for giving chocolates, which shows how it spreads joy among people. I would feel delighted to receive chocolate as a gift.

× I've always been a sweet tooth.

✓ I've always had a sweet tooth.

The phrase 'a sweet tooth' is an idiomatic expression meaning a liking for sweet foods. The correct verb to use is 'have' rather than 'be'. Saying 'I am a sweet tooth' is incorrect because 'sweet tooth' is not a noun describing a person but a metaphorical expression for a preference.

× I enjoyed eating chocolates every time someone visited me, whether it was my mom, dad, relatives, or even my brother, they always used to bring me chocolate because I've always been passionate about sweet things.

✓ I enjoyed eating chocolate every time someone visited me, whether it was my mom, dad, relatives, or even my brother; they always used to bring me chocolate because I've always been passionate about sweet things.

The word 'chocolate' is generally uncountable when referring to the food in general, so 'chocolates' is incorrect here unless referring to individual pieces or types. Also, the sentence is a run-on and should be separated properly with a semicolon or period.

× but as I grow older the sugar is not really great for your health, so I've been trying to reduce my chocolate intake nowadays to maintain my weight and to umm, level my blood sugar as well.

✓ but as I grow older, sugar is not really great for your health, so I've been trying to reduce my chocolate intake nowadays to maintain my weight and to, umm, level my blood sugar as well.

The article 'the' before 'sugar' is unnecessary when speaking generally about sugar. Also, a comma is needed after 'grow older' to separate clauses. The sentence otherwise is correct in tense.

× Whenever I step out of my home with my parents or by myself, I always I never missed a chance to buy a chocolate, take it to my home, share with my brother and have a good happy chocolate eating time.

✓ Whenever I stepped out of my home with my parents or by myself, I never missed a chance to buy chocolate, take it home, share it with my brother, and have a good happy chocolate-eating time.

The phrase 'I always I never' is contradictory and incorrect; 'I never missed' fits the past tense context. Also, 'buy a chocolate' is incorrect; 'buy chocolate' is better as 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'Take it to my home' is better as 'take it home'. 'Share with my brother' should be 'share it with my brother' to clarify the object. 'Chocolate eating time' should be hyphenated as 'chocolate-eating time'.

× Because chocolate releases endorphins, which is a happy hormone, it also jollies your mood and keeps you energized throughout the day.

✓ Because chocolate releases endorphins, which are happy hormones, it also lifts your mood and keeps you energized throughout the day.

'Endorphins' is plural, so the relative pronoun should be followed by 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'happy hormone' should be plural 'happy hormones'. The verb 'jollies' is not commonly used in this context; 'lifts' or 'boosts' is more appropriate.

× That's why I have developed a habit and like the taste of the dark chocolates.

✓ That's why I have developed a habit and like the taste of dark chocolate.

'Chocolate' in this context is uncountable, so 'dark chocolates' is incorrect unless referring to specific types or pieces. The article 'the' before 'dark chocolates' is unnecessary here.

× For instance, there's is a separate day on a Valentine week dedicated for a chocolate, which means chocolate actually shares joy and love among people.

✓ For instance, there is a separate day in Valentine’s week dedicated to chocolate, which means chocolate actually shares joy and love among people.

The phrase 'there's is' is incorrect; it should be 'there is'. 'On a Valentine week' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in Valentine’s week'. 'Dedicated for a chocolate' should be 'dedicated to chocolate' as 'dedicated to' is the correct collocation.