Chocolate— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas (like 'no added sugar' and 'no artificial chemicals') without linking them smoothly. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and keep your answer within 4-5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate, because it contains natural ingredients and no added sugar. Moreover, it doesn't have artificial chemicals or fragrances, which makes it a healthier option for me.

Sugestão: Your answer has some grammar and fluency issues, and some redundancy. Try to organize your ideas clearly with correct grammar and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

Exemplo: I don't eat chocolate every day because it contains a lot of sugar and chemicals. Since I'm on a sugar-restricted diet, I avoid most chocolates. However, when I have a craving, I choose dark chocolate because it's healthier for me.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'it has some' and be more specific. Keep your answer concise and coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. I loved all kinds of chocolate, whether with or without sugar. My favorite was Alpen Liben chocolate because of its unique taste.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and has some grammar mistakes. Try to complete your ideas and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Avoid filler words and be specific with examples.

Exemplo: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy eating it daily. For example, we often give chocolate as a gift to congratulate someone or to appreciate their good work.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use present tense when talking about current preferences. Use linking words to connect your reasons smoothly.

Exemplo: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has no added sugar and contains many natural ingredients. Also, it fits well with my sugar-restricted diet, so I'm a big fan of it.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and contains filler words. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid unnecessary hesitation. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

Exemplo: In my opinion, chocolate makes a good gift because almost everyone enjoys its taste. It appeals to people of all ages, from young children to older adults.

× I'm not a big fan of eating chocolate, uh, for every day because it contains more sugar and uh chemicals as I I'm on a sugar diet so I'm avoid chocolates and whenever I I have a craving I just eat dark chocolate because it's more healthier for me.

✓ I'm not a big fan of eating chocolate every day because it contains a lot of sugar and chemicals. Since I'm on a sugar diet, I avoid chocolates, but whenever I have a craving, I just eat dark chocolate because it's healthier for me.

The original sentence has incorrect use of present tense and verb forms such as 'I'm avoid' which should be 'I avoid'. Also, 'more healthier' is incorrect; 'healthier' alone suffices. The sentence was also run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× I am very often eating chocolate when I was a kid, uh, in my childhood, every chocolates are my favorite.

✓ I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. During my childhood, chocolate was my favorite.

The phrase 'I am very often eating' is incorrect for past habitual action; the simple past 'I often ate' is appropriate. Also, 'every chocolates are my favorite' is incorrect; 'chocolate was my favorite' is correct.

× every chocolates are my favorite.

✓ chocolate was my favorite.

'Chocolates' is plural, but 'every' is used with singular countable nouns. Here, 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun fits better.

× I love to eat chocolate and I'm big fan of Alpen Liben chocolate because it has some.

✓ I love to eat chocolate and I'm a big fan of Alpen Liben chocolate because it has some unique qualities.

The phrase 'big fan of' requires the article 'a' before 'big fan'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly; adding 'unique qualities' clarifies the meaning.

× Well, chocolate is very popular around the world because everybody like to eat chocolate in their day-to-day lives.

✓ Well, chocolate is very popular around the world because everybody likes to eat chocolate in their day-to-day lives.

The subject 'everybody' is singular and requires the verb 'likes' instead of 'like'.

× For example, if we congratulate someone, we can give them a chocolate and uh, we, if we can appreciate on someone good work or on their.

✓ For example, if we congratulate someone, we can give them chocolate. Also, if we want to appreciate someone's good work, we can give chocolate as a gift.

The original sentence is incomplete and has awkward phrasing. It was corrected to two clear sentences with proper structure and preposition use.

× Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate was a dark chocolate, uh, because it has no added sugar and also it has, uh, many natural ingredients in it and it is not very much affected on my sugar challenge diet.

✓ Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it has no added sugar and many natural ingredients, and it does not affect my sugar control diet much.

The question is about current preference, so present tense 'is' is appropriate. Also, 'affected on' is incorrect; 'affect' without 'on' is correct. 'Sugar challenge diet' is unclear; 'sugar control diet' is clearer.

× So I'm big fan of dark chocolate.

✓ So I'm a big fan of dark chocolate.

The article 'a' is missing before 'big fan'.

× Well, according to my perspective, it is good to use chocolate as a gift to others because everybody likes chocolate taste.

✓ Well, from my perspective, it is good to use chocolate as a gift for others because everybody likes the taste of chocolate.

The phrase 'according to my perspective' is awkward; 'from my perspective' is better. Also, 'gift to others' should be 'gift for others'. 'Chocolate taste' needs 'the taste of chocolate' for correctness.

× Uh, it's uh, from the younger children to the older age people and we.

✓ It is enjoyed by everyone, from young children to older people.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses 'we' without context. The correction completes the thought and uses appropriate pronouns.