Chocolate— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and make your answer more coherent. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence structure to sound more natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it melts in my mouth and makes me feel happy. In particular, I enjoy chocolate with nuts since it is beneficial for my health and brain. For example, I often eat it while studying to help me concentrate.

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and contradictory. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words to explain your habits clearly. Also, avoid redundancy and improve fluency.

Exemplo: I don't often crave chocolate, but when I do, I can finish a whole bar in one sitting. Usually, I eat chocolate when I feel sad or when I am reviewing for exams.

Sugestão: Good content but avoid filler words like 'cause because'. Try to use more precise linking words to connect ideas and improve fluency.

Exemplo: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid because my father, who works overseas as an OFW, always brought us chocolates from Saudi Arabia to the Philippines.

Sugestão: Your answer is too brief and lacks supporting details. Try to expand your ideas with reasons and examples, and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Exemplo: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and is often considered a luxury item. Moreover, it is sometimes seen as a symbol of status since being able to afford it implies wealth.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating the same idea multiple times. Use linking words to connect your sentences and provide a more structured answer.

Exemplo: My favourite chocolate flavour depends on my mood. Sometimes, I crave dark chocolate, while other times, I prefer vanilla-flavoured chocolate.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid minor grammar mistakes like 'They're few people'.

Exemplo: I don't think chocolate is always a good gift because not everyone likes it. Since some people dislike chocolate, it's better to choose a neutral gift that everyone can appreciate.

× I particularly I love chocolate with nuts because it's good for my health and also good for my brain.

✓ I particularly love chocolate with nuts because it's good for my health and also good for my brain.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'I particularly I love' which is incorrect. The correct form is 'I particularly love' to avoid redundancy and maintain sentence clarity.

× Yes, I remember growing up we always had a chocolate in our refrigerator cause because my father is an OFW, he's working overseas and he always brought us chocolate from Saudi to the Philippines.

✓ Yes, I remember growing up we always had chocolate in our refrigerator because my father is an OFW, he works overseas and he always brought us chocolate from Saudi Arabia to the Philippines.

The phrase 'a chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' here is uncountable; remove the article 'a'. Also, 'cause because' is redundant; use 'because' only. 'He's working overseas' is better as 'he works overseas' for habitual action. 'Saudi' should be 'Saudi Arabia' for correct country name.

× Because it's good and expensive, and perhaps it's a symbol of a status.

✓ Because it's good and expensive, and perhaps it's a symbol of status.

The phrase 'a symbol of a status' is incorrect; 'status' is uncountable here and does not need an article. The correct phrase is 'a symbol of status'.

× There's a time that I crave dark chocolate, while there's also a time I want to eat vanilla chocolate.

✓ There are times when I crave dark chocolate, while there are also times I want to eat vanilla chocolate.

'There's a time that' is incorrect; the plural 'times' fits better with the context. Also, 'that' should be 'when' to refer to time. The corrected sentence uses plural and proper relative pronoun for time.

× I don't think so, because not all of us love chocolate. They're few people who dislike chocolate, so it's better if you can give them a gift that is neutral so that they can appreciate it.

✓ I don't think so, because not all of us love chocolate. There are few people who dislike chocolate, so it's better if you can give them a gift that is neutral so that they can appreciate it.

'They're few people' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'There are few people' to indicate the existence of a small number of people. 'They're' is a contraction of 'they are' and does not fit here.