Chocolate— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'Our dermal chocolates for Russia'.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it has a rich taste and reminds me of my childhood. My father loves sweets, so I developed a liking for chocolate from a young age.

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I usually eat a piece of chocolate every day because it has become a regular part of my diet, and I find it hard to imagine my day without it.

Sugestão: Your answer is too long and contains unclear information like 'I had ADD also used to buy me a lot of chocolate'. Be clear and concise, and avoid irrelevant details. Use linking words to explain your point.

Exemplo: When I was a child, I ate much more chocolate than I do now because my parents often bought it for me. I used to enjoy 2 to 3 bars daily.

Sugestão: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect your ideas and express them clearly. Avoid confusing phrases like 'enjoyment violating it'.

Exemplo: Chocolate is popular worldwide because its sweet taste and smooth texture bring people joy and relaxation. Many enjoy eating it as a treat to feel happy.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition like 'dark milk milk chocolate' and by using linking words to explain why you like it.

Exemplo: My favourite flavour is dark milk chocolate because it has the perfect balance of sweetness and richness, which makes me feel very happy when I eat it.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and use linking words to make your points clear and logical.

Exemplo: Yes, chocolate is a popular gift nowadays because it is enjoyed by many people and suits occasions like welcoming or homecoming gifts.

× I absolutely love eating chocolates.

✓ I absolutely love eating chocolate.

The word 'chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, which is not the intended meaning here. Hence, 'chocolate' is correct.

× And I have been the kind of chocolates I like.

✓ And I have my favorite kinds of chocolates.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The phrase 'I have been the kind of chocolates I like' is grammatically incorrect and does not convey a clear meaning. The corrected sentence clarifies that the speaker has favorite kinds of chocolates.

× Our dermal chocolates for Russia.

✓ Our favorite chocolates are from Russia.

The original sentence is unclear and seems to have typographical errors ('dermal' is incorrect). The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence indicating the origin of the chocolates.

× I usually eat one chocolate every day because a chocolate has become kind of a stable thing in my everyday diet and uh, without chocolate I cannot comprehend.

✓ I usually eat one piece of chocolate every day because chocolate has become a stable part of my everyday diet, and without chocolate, I cannot imagine my day.

'Chocolate' as a substance is uncountable, so 'one chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'one piece of chocolate'. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect here. The phrase 'cannot comprehend' is replaced with 'cannot imagine my day' for naturalness.

× Oh, when I was a kid I actually used to eat million times more than I do now because uh, as a kid I had ADD also used to buy me a lot of chocolate and every single day I used to eat like 2-3 bars of chocolate.

✓ Oh, when I was a kid, I actually used to eat a million times more than I do now because, as a kid, I had ADD and someone used to buy me a lot of chocolate. Every single day, I used to eat like 2-3 bars of chocolate.

The sentence lacked proper punctuation and conjunctions, making it confusing. 'Used to buy me' needs a subject, so 'someone' is added. Also, 'million' should be preceded by 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× I believe chocolate is really popular on the world and a lot of people are fond buy chocolate as well because something about the texture and the sweetness in it just gives people.

✓ I believe chocolate is really popular in the world, and a lot of people are fond of buying chocolate as well because something about the texture and the sweetness in it just gives people joy.

The correct preposition is 'in the world' not 'on the world'. Also, 'fond buy' is incorrect; it should be 'fond of buying'. The sentence was incomplete, so 'joy' is added to complete the thought.

× A lot of enjoyment violating it and people feel really joy, like people feel very happy and very relaxed after eating it.

✓ It gives a lot of enjoyment, and people feel real joy; they feel very happy and relaxed after eating it.

The phrase 'enjoyment violating it' is incorrect and unclear. It is corrected to 'gives a lot of enjoyment'. 'Really joy' is incorrect; 'real joy' is the correct phrase.

× My personal favorite flavor would be dark milk milk chocolate because it's just plain chocolate with its perfect amount of sweetness and it just gives me so much happiness and I feel so joyful when I'm eating it.

✓ My personal favorite flavor would be dark milk chocolate because it's just plain chocolate with the perfect amount of sweetness, and it gives me so much happiness. I feel very joyful when I'm eating it.

The phrase 'dark milk milk chocolate' has a repeated word 'milk'. Also, 'so joyful' is acceptable but 'very joyful' is more natural here. The sentence is split for clarity.

× I think in this modern world, usually when people don't really know what to buy others, they gift chocolates as a like welcoming gift or homecoming gift because a lot of people enjoy eating chocolates and this just is the perfect kind of gift that you can give any.

✓ I think in this modern world, usually when people don't really know what to buy others, they gift chocolates as a welcoming gift or homecoming gift because a lot of people enjoy eating chocolates, and this is the perfect kind of gift that you can give to anyone.

The phrase 'gift chocolates as a like welcoming gift' is incorrect; 'as a welcoming gift' is correct. Also, 'give any' is incomplete; it should be 'give to anyone'. Proper prepositions and articles are used in the correction.