Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent: open with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds, and give one specific example that supports your claim. Use linking words if adding details.

Exemplo: Yes, I’m quite good at memorising things, especially when they’re organised alphabetically. For example, I can quickly recall a list of patients’ names when they’re arranged A to Z, which helps me at work.

Sugestão: Give a clear concise account with coherent sequence and correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, so, therefore) to show consequences, and include a brief reflection or lesson learned.

Exemplo: Yes — a few months ago I missed a passport verification appointment because I forgot the date. As a result, I had to reschedule the verification, which took extra time and money, so now I always set a calendar reminder.

Sugestão: Organise your answer: start with a topic sentence, then give two specific duties you must remember. Reduce hesitations and correct unclear phrases (e.g. “hand over” and “handover notes”).

Exemplo: I work in a hospital, so I must remember my shift schedule and the handover details for each patient. For example, at the end of every shift I record each patient's condition and medications so the next staff can continue care safely.

Sugestão: Be confident and slightly more varied in language: state your main method, give a linked secondary method, and add a brief example of when each is useful. Avoid fillers.

Exemplo: I usually write important items in a small notebook that I carry with me. If I can't carry it, I use a notes app on my phone; for instance, I jot down upcoming appointments in the app and set reminders so I don't miss them.

× I am quite good at memorizing things.

✓ I am quite good at memorising things.

The sentence originally used American spelling 'memorizing' while the rest of the transcript uses British-style 'memorising' (the examiner used 'memorising' in the question). This is a spelling/consistency issue rather than a grammar issue. Use the present participle 'memorising' to match the variant used earlier for consistency.

× I can remember them.

✓ I can remember them.

No grammatical correction required; 'them' correctly refers to plural 'things'. Included only to indicate no change needed; sentence is correct.

× I just, I'm not just good with numbers.

✓ I'm not just good with numbers.

The extra 'I just,' is redundant and creates a fragmented utterance. Removing it produces a clear, grammatical sentence. Conjunction/structure simplified for fluency.

× I was granted my passport verification date and I almost forgot about the date.

✓ I was given a passport verification date, and I almost forgot it.

'Granted' is odd collocated with 'date' here; 'given' is more natural. Also avoid repeating 'the date'—use the pronoun 'it' to improve cohesion. The past tense is correctly used; this correction improves word choice and cohesion.

× This made me miss my appointment and in order to get a new I have to get new date.

✓ This made me miss my appointment, and to get a new one I had to get another date.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unstructured. Use 'one' to replace 'appointment', and 'another date' for clarity. Maintain past tense 'had to' because the event already occurred.

× I work at a hospital so I need to remember my shift schedule, umm along with the Whenever the shift is over, there is a tradition among the healthcare staff to pass on the over to next, so I have to remember uh over for every patient and hand it over to the next staff.

✓ I work in a hospital, so I need to remember my shift schedule. Whenever a shift is over, there is a tradition among the healthcare staff to pass the duty on to the next person, so I have to remember the handover for every patient and pass it to the next staff member.

Multiple issues: use 'in a hospital' (correct preposition), split run-on sentence into clearer sentences (sentence structure), 'the Whenever' is wrong capitalization and article use—use 'Whenever a shift', 'pass the duty on to the next person' corrects idiom and prepositions, 'handover' or 'hand over' needs article 'the' and 'next staff member' is clearer than 'next staff'. Also changed 'pass it over' to 'pass the handover' for clarity.

× I usually write them on a small notebook that I often keep along with me wherever I go.

✓ I usually write them in a small notebook that I often keep with me wherever I go.

Use 'in a notebook' not 'on a notebook' (correct preposition), and 'keep with me' is more natural than 'keep along with me'. Article 'a' is correct.

× Secondly, if uh, it's not possible to carry a notebook, I have an, uh, note app in my mobile phone, so I use that to remember important things.

✓ If it's not possible to carry a notebook, I have a note app on my mobile phone, so I use that to remember important things.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Use 'on my mobile phone' (correct preposition for apps), not 'in'. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct.