Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but lacks natural flow and clarity. Try to use simpler and more direct sentences, avoid redundancy, and improve grammar. For example, instead of 'If the things are menial then obviously I tend to forget them,' say 'I tend to forget simple things.' Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I'm not very good at memorising things, especially simple tasks. So, I usually write important things in my notepad to help me remember them.

Sugestão: Your answer provides relevant content but is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to sound more fluent.

Exemplo: Yes, I recently forgot an important interview with my university. Fortunately, my friends reminded me, and I apologized to the interviewer later.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to make your sentences more concise and coherent by using linking words. Also, avoid repeating the same idea multiple times. Focus on giving specific examples of what you need to remember daily.

Exemplo: In my daily life, I need to remember tasks like reporting to my manager and completing important assignments by the end of the day.

Sugestão: Your answer has good content but lacks clarity and has incomplete sentences. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and improve grammar.

Exemplo: I usually carry a notepad to write down important tasks, such as meetings with my boss, deadlines for papers, or upcoming exams, so I don't forget them.

× If the things are menial then obviously I tend to forget them.

✓ If the things are menial, then obviously I tend to forget them.

The sentence is missing a comma after the introductory clause 'If the things are menial'. Adding a comma improves clarity and sentence structure, which is important for correct grammar.

× So maybe I need to memorize. I need to see a little bit things, so I take notepad about the important thing in order to memorize them.

✓ So maybe I need to memorize. I need to see a few things, so I take a notepad to note the important things in order to memorize them.

The phrase 'a little bit things' is incorrect; 'a few things' is appropriate for countable nouns. Also, 'take notepad about' is incorrect; it should be 'take a notepad to note' or 'write down'. This correction improves preposition and quantifier usage.

× Yes, I forgot recently my interview with my CU.

✓ Yes, I recently forgot my interview with my CU.

The adverb 'recently' should be placed before the verb 'forgot' for correct word order in past tense sentences.

× So it was like a monthly evaluation and it was kind of important for me, but I forgot it and later on I remembered, uh, it.

✓ So it was a monthly evaluation and it was kind of important for me, but I forgot it and later on I remembered it.

The phrase 'like a monthly evaluation' is better as 'a monthly evaluation' for clarity. Also, the comma before 'uh' is unnecessary, and 'remembered, uh, it' should be 'remembered it' for correct sentence structure.

× Uh, so I was reminded by my friends and later I confronted and umm, apologized for that.

✓ Uh, so I was reminded by my friends and later I confronted them and, umm, apologized for that.

The verb 'confronted' requires an object; 'them' refers to the friends. Without the object pronoun, the sentence is incomplete.

× Mostly I need to be, I need to re memorize umm, the things that I need to complete by the end of the day.

✓ Mostly, I need to re-memorize the things that I need to complete by the end of the day.

The phrase 'I need to be, I need to re memorize' is awkward and redundant. 'Re-memorize' is the correct verb form, and the sentence flows better without 'I need to be'.

× Something. It can be some menial tasks, maybe just reporting it to the manager, but mostly, sometimes it can be important tasks which need to be reminded, which I need to remind.

✓ It can be some menial tasks, maybe just reporting to the manager, but mostly, sometimes it can be important tasks which I need to remember and remind myself about.

The phrase 'reporting it to the manager' is incorrect; 'reporting to the manager' is correct. Also, 'tasks which need to be reminded' is incorrect; tasks cannot be reminded, people remind themselves or others. The correction clarifies this.

× So do remember important things.

✓ So, to remember important things,

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'to' and restructuring the sentence makes it grammatically correct and meaningful.

× I mostly carry my notepad where I will be writing all the things that I need to complete by the end of the day and all the important things.

✓ I mostly carry my notepad where I write all the things that I need to complete by the end of the day and all the important things.

Using 'will be writing' is awkward here; the present simple 'write' is more appropriate for habitual actions. Also, 'where' is acceptable but could be better as 'in which' for formal correctness.

× Maybe sometime I need to have some meetings with my boss or maybe I need to write some papers by the end of the deadline or maybe I will be having some exams.

✓ Maybe sometimes I need to have meetings with my boss, or I need to write some papers by the deadline, or I will have some exams.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Some meetings' and 'some papers' are acceptable, but 'some exams' is better as 'exams' without 'some' for naturalness. 'By the end of the deadline' is redundant; 'by the deadline' suffices.

× So those things I will write in on the.

✓ So I will write those things down.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains unnecessary prepositions 'in on the'. The correction completes the sentence and uses the correct phrasal verb 'write down'.