Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，有语法错误和重复，且用词不准确。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的词汇。

Exemplo: Honestly, I am not very good at memorising things. For instance, I often forget my laptop and phone in the classroom, which is very inconvenient.

Sugestão: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，缺少连贯性。建议使用完整句子，明确表达经历，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

Exemplo: Yes, I often forget important things because I struggle with memorising. For example, I sometimes leave my belongings behind and have to go back to get them.

Sugestão: 回答内容较丰富，但表达不够清晰，句子结构有些混乱。建议理清思路，使用连接词，明确列举需要记住的具体事项。

Exemplo: I need to remember several things daily. For example, the Wi-Fi password is essential for me, as well as my driver's license number and important phone numbers.

Sugestão: 回答不够清晰，语法错误严重，表达含糊。建议简化表达，直接说明记忆方法，并用简单明了的语言描述。

Exemplo: I usually write down important information or save it on my phone. This helps me remember things better.

× Honestly, I struggle with memorizing things, even the important things.

✓ Honestly, I struggle with memorising things, even the important things.

动词memorise在英式英语中拼写为memorising，保持一致性。

× For example, I frequently forget my laptop and phone in the classroom, which makes me SO, which is so inconvenient.

✓ For example, I frequently forget my laptop and phone in the classroom, which is so inconvenient for me.

原句中“which makes me SO”结构不完整且不通顺，应改为“which is so inconvenient for me”使句子完整且表达清晰。

× As I said before, I'm very struggle with memorizing things so every time.

✓ As I said before, I struggle a lot with memorising things every time.

动词struggle后应直接接动词原形或动名词，且“I'm very struggle”结构错误，应改为“I struggle a lot”。

× The mistakes happening and I have to go back and retrieve my things so I should improve my memories.

✓ Mistakes happen and I have to go back and retrieve my things, so I should improve my memory.

“The mistakes happening”结构不正确，应改为“Mistakes happen”；“improve my memories”应为“improve my memory”，memory是不可数名词。

× There are quite a few things I need to remember in my daily life.

✓ There are quite a few things I need to remember in my daily life.

该句无错误，保持原句。

× For example, I can't live without Wi-Fi, so the Wi-Fi password is very essential for me, and besides the license, the license number and then the call number.

✓ For example, I can't live without Wi-Fi, so the Wi-Fi password is very essential for me, and besides that, the license, the license number, and the phone number.

“besides the license”表达不完整，应加“that”指代前文；“call number”应为“phone number”，更符合英语习惯。

× As I said, I'm really struggled with memorizing things, even the important things, but they have some information from the Internet.

✓ As I said, I really struggle with memorising things, even the important things, but I have some information from the Internet.

“I'm really struggled”时态和语态错误，应为“I really struggle”；“they have”指代不明，应改为“I have”。

× 1 tips is finding using the convictive scale to figure out whole things by your core.

✓ One tip is to use the convictive scale to figure out the whole thing by your core.

“1 tips”数量和单复数不匹配，应为“One tip”；“finding using”结构不正确，应改为“to use”；“whole things”应为“the whole thing”。