Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive. Try to be more concise and clear. Start with a direct response, then add one or two specific details. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I asked my pleaded Mr. after'.

Exemplo: I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I recently forgot my girlfriend's birthday, which made her upset. To make it up, I gave her some chocolates.

Sugestão: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat confusing. Use correct tense and structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples with linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. For instance, I missed my girlfriend's birthday and also forgot my passport appointment, which caused problems with my parents.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct vocabulary. Provide specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Exemplo: In my daily life, I need to remember several things. For example, I pack my bag for coaching classes, bring my notebooks, and sometimes buy snacks for my girlfriend to keep our relationship smooth.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat fragmented. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about your methods.

Exemplo: To remember important things, I usually write notes on my phone's Notes app. Additionally, I sometimes ask my sister to remind me about important tasks.

× I recently forgot about my girlfriend's birthday and she got angry about that and we had a fight.

✓ I recently forgot my girlfriend's birthday, and she got angry about it, and we had a fight.

The sentence is mostly correct in past tense usage, but 'forgot about' is less natural than 'forgot' in this context. Also, 'about that' is better replaced with 'about it' for clarity and naturalness.

× After that I gave her some chocolate to calm down and I asked, I asked my pleaded Mr. after.

✓ After that, I gave her some chocolate to calm her down, and I asked her to forgive me.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'I asked, I asked my pleaded Mr. after' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence that fits the context.

× First of all I forget it.

✓ First of all, I forgot it.

The verb 'forget' should be in the past tense 'forgot' to match the past context of the sentence.

× I forgot my girlfriends birthday.

✓ I forgot my girlfriend's birthday.

The word 'girlfriends' should be possessive singular 'girlfriend's' to indicate the birthday belongs to one girlfriend.

× I forgot my passport's appointment and I got bitten by my parent for missing the appointment and later on I had fight with my girlfriend.

✓ I forgot my passport appointment, and I got scolded by my parents for missing it, and later on, I had a fight with my girlfriend.

'Passport's appointment' is unnatural; 'passport appointment' is better. 'Got bitten by my parent' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'got scolded by my parents'. Also, 'had fight' should be 'had a fight'.

× So yes I'm I have forget things.

✓ So yes, I have forgotten things.

The phrase 'I have forget' is incorrect; the correct past participle form is 'forgotten' for present perfect tense.

× Villain in my daily life.

✓ In my daily life,

'Villain in my daily life' is incomplete and does not make sense. It seems to be a mishearing or typo. The correction starts the sentence properly.

× I do remember doing it to remember many things, like packing up my bag for my coaching.

✓ I do remember to do many things, like packing my bag for my coaching classes.

The phrase 'remember doing it to remember many things' is awkward. 'Remember to do' is the correct form to express recalling to perform tasks. Also, 'packing up my bag' is better as 'packing my bag'.

× Begging you my notebooks and also buying some food or some snacks for my girlfriend so she don't get angry toward me because that's a very bad thing in a relationship.

✓ Bringing my notebooks and also buying some food or snacks for my girlfriend so she doesn't get angry with me because that's a very bad thing in a relationship.

'Begging you my notebooks' is incorrect; likely meant 'bringing my notebooks'. 'She don't' should be 'she doesn't'. 'Angry toward me' is better as 'angry with me'.

× Well, talking about. My way of remembering things.

✓ Well, talking about my way of remembering things,

The original sentence is fragmented. Combining the two parts into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually write things on my Notes app.

✓ I usually write things in my Notes app.

The correct preposition with 'write' and 'app' is 'in' rather than 'on'.

× Or sometimes I ask I talk with my sister so she can help me remember things and this is the method I use.

✓ Or sometimes I talk with my sister so she can help me remember things, and this is the method I use.

The phrase 'I ask I talk' is incorrect and redundant. Removing 'I ask' clarifies the sentence.