Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答时句子结构不够完整，表达不够自然，且有语法错误。建议注意句子完整性，避免断句，使用更自然的表达方式，并且减少语法错误。

Exemplo: I think I'm quite good at memorising things, especially experiences that have impressive symbols. I can clearly recall important details because I pay attention to these symbols. However, I find it difficult to remember events that don't interest me.

Sugestão: 回答中表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误较多，句子较长且缺乏连贯性。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和词汇的正确使用，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

Exemplo: One time, when I was 13, I forgot my mother's birthday because I was studying with my father and lost track of time. When I realized it was too late, I made a birthday cake myself and gave it to her the next day as a way to make up for it.

Sugestão: 回答内容较好，但句子略显冗长，建议使用更简洁的表达，并适当使用连接词使句子更流畅。

Exemplo: In my daily life, to stay healthy and prepare for challenging learning tasks, I record difficult words, sentence structures, grammar rules, and my exercise plan every day.

Sugestão: 回答中表达不够自然，句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议简化句子，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态一致。

Exemplo: Usually, when I receive important information, I try to remember all the details and mentally note its location. Then, I review it again before going to bed. This way, I can usually remember it clearly when I need to.

× I think I'm pretty good at it when it comes to. Experiences which have impressive symbols.

✓ I think I'm pretty good at it when it comes to experiences that have impressive symbols.

句子结构不完整，'when it comes to'后面不应有句号，且应连接后面的内容，形成完整句子。建议将句号改为连接词，使句子连贯。

× I can clearly describe all the important details because I'm sensitive at these symbols.

✓ I can clearly describe all the important details because I'm sensitive to these symbols.

介词使用错误，'sensitive'后应接介词'to'，表示对某事敏感。

× However, I can't rely on taking events which I'm not interested in into my head completely.

✓ However, I can't rely on taking events which I'm not interested in completely into my head.

介词短语位置不当，'completely'应修饰'into my head'，放在更合适的位置以表达完整意思。

× The most suitable experience called as a pity is that I forgot celebrating my mother's birthday.

✓ The most suitable experience, which I call a pity, is that I forgot to celebrate my mother's birthday.

'called as'用法错误，应改为'which I call'；'forgot celebrating'应改为'forgot to celebrate'，表达忘记做某事。

× When I realized it was too late, I made a birthday cake by DIY and send it to my mom's an exciting gift at the second day as the reduction of the problem.

✓ When I realized it was too late, I made a birthday cake by DIY and sent it to my mom as an exciting gift the next day to make up for the problem.

动词时态错误，'send'应为过去式'sent'；'at the second day'表达不自然，应改为'the next day'；'as the reduction of the problem'表达不清晰，改为'to make up for the problem'更合适。

× In daily life, in order to maintain good health and prepare for every challenging learning task, I would record some difficult words, sentence structures, grammar rules, as well as the exercise plan for that day, every day.

✓ In daily life, in order to maintain good health and prepare for every challenging learning task, I record some difficult words, sentence structures, grammar rules, as well as the exercise plan for that day every day.

'would'在此处使用不当，表达习惯动作应使用一般现在时；'for that day, every day'中逗号多余，应去掉。

× Usually, as soon as I receive the information of the things, I will first remember all of its details so as to mark its location in my mind.

✓ Usually, as soon as I receive the information about things, I first remember all of its details so as to mark its location in my mind.

'information of the things'介词使用错误，应为'information about things'；'will first remember'中'will'不必要，习惯用一般现在时表达习惯动作。

× Then I will repeat the same process before going to bed.

✓ Then I repeat the same process before going to bed.

同上，习惯动作用一般现在时，去掉'will'。

× Every night by the time I needed to do this thing, basically I can clearly remember it.

✓ Every night, by the time I need to do this thing, I can basically remember it clearly.

时态不一致，'needed'应为现在时'need'；副词位置不当，'basically'和'clearly'位置调整使句子更自然。