Machine— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating phrases like "washing dishes" twice in a row and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, use more precise vocabulary, for example, say "dishwasher" instead of "dishwasher machine."

Exemplo: My favorite machine at home is definitely the dishwasher. Before we had it, I was always responsible for washing the dishes, which was time-consuming. Since we got the dishwasher, I no longer have to do that chore, which makes life much easier.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and avoid vague expressions like "make you very comfortable." Also, use more precise vocabulary such as "vacuum cleaners" instead of "sweeping machines."

Exemplo: Yes, I believe washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important because they help us maintain a clean and comfortable living environment. For example, washing machines save time on laundry, and vacuum cleaners keep the floors free of dust, which makes the home more pleasant to live in.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it could be improved by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words like "however" to contrast ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, try to be more concise.

Exemplo: It depends on the machine. If it's expensive or complicated, I usually spend a few minutes reading the instructions to avoid mistakes. However, if it's simple and easy to use, I prefer to start using it right away without reading the manual.

Sugestão: Your answer is personal and relevant but could be more structured and formal. Avoid using filler phrases like "like I said" and provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: I think it depends on the situation. For example, I never read the instructions for our washing machine because it has been in our home since I was young, and my parents taught me how to use it. However, for new or complex machines, reading the instructions is important to use them correctly.

× before we got the dishwasher, the washing dishes, washing dishes is always on me.

✓ before we got the dishwasher, washing the dishes was always on me.

The phrase 'the washing dishes' is incorrect because 'washing dishes' is an uncountable activity here, so 'the' is unnecessary and 'washing dishes' should be treated as a singular activity. Also, 'is always on me' should be 'was always on me' to match past tense context.

× So after we got 1, I don't have to wash those dishes anymore.

✓ So after we got one, I don't have to wash those dishes anymore.

The use of '1' as a numeral is inappropriate in spoken or formal writing; it should be spelled out as 'one'.

× because it helps us keep our space really clean and make you very comfortable and make the place more vibrant.

✓ because it helps us keep our space really clean, makes us very comfortable, and makes the place more vibrant.

The verbs after 'helps us' should be in the third person singular form to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'make you very comfortable' is inconsistent with 'helps us'; it should be 'makes us very comfortable' for subject agreement and consistency.

× It depends is if it's something that really expensive and I would rather just spend a few minutes reading on it to avoid mistakes,

✓ It depends; if it's something really expensive, I would rather just spend a few minutes reading about it to avoid mistakes,

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and missing words. 'It depends is if' is incorrect; it should be 'It depends; if'. Also, 'reading on it' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'reading about it'.

× reading on it to avoid mistakes,

✓ reading about it to avoid mistakes,

The correct preposition with 'reading' in this context is 'about', not 'on'.

× but if it's something that really straightforward and easy to use, I'll just usually go straight for it.

✓ but if it's something that is really straightforward and easy to use, I'll usually just go straight for it.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'something that'. Also, the adverb order 'just usually' is better as 'usually just' for natural English flow.

× Like I said, it depends. And like for washing machine I actually didn't really have instructions because it's always been there since I was a little and I learned how to use it from my mom and my dad, so I didn't read the instructions.

✓ Like I said, it depends. And for the washing machine, I actually didn't really have instructions because it's always been there since I was little, and I learned how to use it from my mom and dad, so I didn't read the instructions.

'Like for washing machine' is missing the article 'the'. 'Since I was a little' is incomplete; it should be 'since I was little'. Also, 'my mom and my dad' can be simplified to 'my mom and dad' for natural English.