Machine— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid short pauses and filler words like 'And. Also,' which interrupt the flow. Use linking words smoothly to connect ideas, and correct minor grammar mistakes such as 'appeared appliance' to 'appliance'. Also, keep sentences concise and clear.

Exemplo: My favourite machine at home is the food blender because it helps me prepare meals quickly and easily. Moreover, it is energy-efficient and affordable, making it a very convenient appliance to use daily.

Sugestão: Improve fluency by avoiding unnecessary pauses and fragmented sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas clearly. Also, correct word choice errors such as 'sweeping missions' to 'sweeping machines'.

Exemplo: In my opinion, washing machines and sweeping machines are essential at home because they save a lot of time and effort. Therefore, people can relax more and avoid getting too tired while doing household chores.

Sugestão: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid fragmented sentences like 'So what videos on YouTube...'. Use linking words such as 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas. Correct phrases like 'care unused and use this machines' to 'care for and use these machines'.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually read the instructions carefully and sometimes watch YouTube videos about how to set up and properly maintain these machines. This helps them last longer and work efficiently.

Sugestão: Avoid sentence fragments like 'it's equally. Efficient'. Use linking words such as 'and' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct awkward phrases like 'badly used A machines' to 'machines that are used improperly'.

Exemplo: Yes, it is very important to read the instructions that come with machines because it helps maintain their durability and ensures efficient use. Unfortunately, many people neglect this and end up damaging their machines.

× And. Also, it's very easy to use.

✓ Also, it's very easy to use.

Starting a sentence with 'And' followed by a period is incorrect punctuation and conjunction usage. 'Also' alone is sufficient to connect the idea smoothly.

× It doesn't cost much an also doesn't take a lot on electricity, so this is a very. Comfortable home appeared appliance.

✓ It doesn't cost much and also doesn't use a lot of electricity, so this is a very comfortable home appliance.

The phrase 'take a lot on electricity' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'use a lot of electricity'. Also, 'appeared' is incorrect here and should be removed. The sentence also had unnecessary periods disrupting flow.

× In my perspective, washing machines and sweeping missions are very essential in the home.

✓ From my perspective, washing machines and sweeping machines are very essential in the home.

The phrase 'In my perspective' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'From my perspective'. Also, 'sweeping missions' is a typo and should be 'sweeping machines'.

× This is because it saves a lot of time and also allows one to be able to. Enjoy. Between. Doing chores without breaking so much sweat.

✓ This is because it saves a lot of time and also allows one to enjoy doing chores without breaking so much sweat.

The sentence is fragmented with unnecessary periods breaking the flow. 'Enjoy between doing chores' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy doing chores'.

× Yes, I often read the instructions and sometimes I go the extra mile. So what videos on YouTube about the setup and how to properly care unused and use this machines?

✓ Yes, I often read the instructions and sometimes I go the extra mile by watching videos on YouTube about the setup and how to properly care for and use these machines.

The phrase 'So what videos' is incorrect; it should be 'by watching videos'. Also, 'care unused and use this machines' is incorrect; it should be 'care for and use these machines'.

× This is because they tend to last longer when we take care of them and use them the right way.

✓ This is because they tend to last longer when we take care of them and use them the right way.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct.

× Yes, it's very essential to read instructions that accompany machines.

✓ Yes, it's very essential to read the instructions that accompany machines.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'instructions' to specify which instructions are being referred to.

× This is because it helps maintain the durability and it's equally. Efficient while using the machine and applying it in our daily life.

✓ This is because it helps maintain durability and is equally efficient while using the machine and applying it in our daily life.

'Maintain the durability' is awkward; 'maintain durability' is better. Also, 'it's equally. Efficient' is fragmented and should be combined into 'is equally efficient'.

× Unfortunately not a lot of people do this and they end up with badly used A machines.

✓ Unfortunately, not a lot of people do this and they end up with badly used machines.

The article 'A' before 'machines' is incorrect because 'machines' is plural. Also, 'badly used' is acceptable but could be improved to 'machines that are badly used' for clarity.