Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，影响表达的自然流畅。建议避免重复词汇，注意语法正确性，并简洁表达。

Exemplo: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, especially with my family and close friends. For instance, when my younger sister repeatedly asks simple questions, I calmly answer her without getting annoyed.

Sugestão: 句子结构混乱，时态和语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议理清句子结构，使用正确时态，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

Exemplo: I feel impatient when I commute on a crowded subway because people often push me, which invades my personal space and makes the journey uncomfortable.

Sugestão: 回答较为完整，但连接词使用不够自然，部分表达略显生硬。建议使用更自然的连接词和表达方式。

Exemplo: I don't find long tasks challenging because I can stay calm and focused. Sometimes, I treat myself to some chocolates, which boosts my energy and motivates me to work harder.

Sugestão: 表达中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“stay in the states”不明确。建议使用准确表达，避免模糊词汇。

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. My job involves checking data from databases and documents, which requires me to stay calm and pay close attention to many numbers for extended periods.

Sugestão: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，表达不够简洁。建议注意时态一致，避免重复，并简洁表达观点。

Exemplo: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. For example, I couldn't study for long periods before, but now I can study in the library for seven or eight hours.

× I consider myself as a patient person, especially with my families and close friends.

✓ I consider myself a patient person, especially with my family and close friends.

“families”应为不可数名词“family”，表示家庭。去掉“as”更符合表达习惯。

× when my younger sister keeps keeps asking me some simple questions repeatedly

✓ when my younger sister keeps asking me some simple questions repeatedly

“keeps keeps”重复，应去掉一个“keeps”。

× I can always answer her again and again and again again without annoy getting annoyed.

✓ I can always answer her again and again and again without getting annoyed.

“annoy getting annoyed”词序错误，应为“getting annoyed”。去掉多余的“again”。

× I really feel impatient and getting annoyed but when I was commuting in a cloudy subway, I'm easily get annoyed because there are always some people keep pushing me

✓ I really feel impatient and get annoyed, but when I am commuting in a crowded subway, I easily get annoyed because there are always some people who keep pushing me

“getting annoyed”应改为“get annoyed”保持动词原形；“I'm easily get annoyed”语法错误，应为“I easily get annoyed”；“cloudy subway”应为“crowded subway”；“people keep pushing me”应加关系代词“who”。

× which makes me feel like my personal space is broken and makes it journey uncomfortable.

✓ which makes me feel like my personal space is invaded and makes the journey uncomfortable.

“broken”不合适，个人空间被侵犯应用“invaded”；“makes it journey uncomfortable”中“it”应为“the”。

× I don't think a task that needs a long time work is a challenge for me

✓ I don't think a task that needs a long time to work is a challenge for me

“long time work”表达不准确，应为“long time to work”或“long work time”。

× My main job is to check the data from databases and various documents, which really needs to stay calm and pay attention to the many numbers.

✓ My main job is to check data from databases and various documents, which really requires staying calm and paying attention to many numbers.

“the data”改为“data”更自然；“needs to stay calm”应改为“requires staying calm”；“pay attention to the many numbers”中“the”多余。

× So I need to stay in the states for a long time and keep checking the data.

✓ So I need to stay focused for a long time and keep checking the data.

“stay in the states”表达不清，应为“stay focused”或“stay attentive”。

× Yes, I do think I'm more patient than the younger me because for example when I was a kid I can't stay stay in the study for a long time, but now I can study in the library for about 7 or 8 hours.

✓ Yes, I do think I'm more patient than my younger self because, for example, when I was a kid I couldn't stay in the study for a long time, but now I can study in the library for about 7 or 8 hours.

“the younger me”应为“my younger self”；“can't”应为过去时“couldn't”；“stay stay”重复，应去掉一个。