Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and provides a personal example, which is good. However, it is a bit lengthy and contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your response more concise and use clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'I am very patient person' at the end. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I have faced several challenges, such as preparing for an important exam for several years without success. During that time, I remained calm and focused on improving, which helped me stay patient about my career progress.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to organise your ideas better and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'things to be not in a certain way that I don't like.' Instead, be specific about what bothers you and why.

Exemplo: I feel impatient when I am surrounded by negative influences, such as bad friends or colleagues, because as an introvert, I prefer a calm and orderly environment. Moreover, when situations become chaotic or uncontrollable, it makes me lose patience.

Sugestão: Your answer is honest and relevant, but it can be improved by avoiding redundancy and using more natural expressions. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a clearer explanation.

Exemplo: Honestly, I feel bored when I have to do the same task for a long time because it's natural for people to seek variety. Therefore, I tend to become uneasy and impatient if I am engaged in repetitive activities for extended periods.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more concise and better structured. Avoid repeating words like 'if' and try to link your ideas logically. Also, use more precise vocabulary to express your thoughts.

Exemplo: Currently, I am a student and do not have a job, so patience is not a requirement for me at the moment. However, in the future, especially since I aspire to be a doctor, I understand that patience will be essential, and I am prepared to develop it.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but contains some hesitations and repetitions. Try to avoid filler words like 'as as' and be more confident in your statements. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a clear progression of thought.

Exemplo: Generally, children tend to be less patient, and I was no exception. However, as I have grown older, I have become more patient, and I believe that with age, my patience will continue to improve.

× I am very patient person.

✓ I am a very patient person.

In English, singular countable nouns require an article such as 'a' or 'an'. Here, 'person' is singular and countable, so it needs the article 'a' before it.

× Bad friends around me or bad environment, bad company of colleagues make me very impatient because I am a very introvert person

✓ Bad friends around me or a bad environment, bad company of colleagues make me very impatient because I am a very introverted person

The phrase 'bad environment' is singular and countable, so it requires the article 'a'. Also, 'introvert' is a noun; the adjective form 'introverted' should be used to describe a person.

× I am a very introvert person

✓ I am a very introverted person

The word 'introvert' is a noun; to describe a person’s characteristic, the adjective 'introverted' should be used.

× when a thing is going out of the hand

✓ when a thing is going out of hand

The correct idiomatic expression is 'out of hand' without the definite article 'the'.

× I prepared for my need examination

✓ I prepared for my needed examination

The adjective 'needed' correctly modifies 'examination' to indicate the examination required. Alternatively, 'necessary examination' could be used.

× I am very patient person

✓ I am a very patient person

Singular countable nouns like 'person' require an article 'a' before them.

× I am patient about my result and about my career

✓ I am patient with my result and with my career

The correct preposition to express tolerance or patience towards something is 'with' rather than 'about'.

× I am patient about my result and about my career

✓ I am patient with my results and with my career

Also, 'result' in this context is better used in plural form 'results' to indicate multiple outcomes.

× these are the things make me impatient

✓ these are the things that make me impatient

The sentence is missing the relative pronoun 'that' to connect the clause properly.

× these are the things make me impatient

✓ these are the things that make me impatient

A relative pronoun 'that' is needed to link the subject and verb correctly in the relative clause.

× I would be very bored because it's human tendency to not do the same thing for very long period of time

✓ I would be very bored because it's human tendency not to do the same thing for a very long period of time

The phrase 'human tendency' should be followed by the infinitive form 'not to do'. Also, 'a' is needed before 'very long period'.

× I think I will be impatient if I have to do the same thing for a very long period of time

✓ I think I will be impatient if I have to do the same thing for a very long period

The phrase 'period of time' is redundant; 'period' alone suffices.

× Currently I am not doing any job

✓ Currently I am not doing any work

In English, 'job' usually refers to employment; 'doing any job' is less common than 'doing any work' when referring to activity or employment status.

× my dream is to be a doctor and I think doctors are the most patient persons in in the world

✓ my dream is to be a doctor and I think doctors are the most patient people in the world

The word 'persons' is less common; 'people' is the preferred plural noun for humans. Also, remove the repeated 'in'.

× if if it requires and then I will be patient

✓ if it requires, then I will be patient

Remove the repeated 'if' and add a comma before 'then' for clarity.

× I am becoming more patient and I think as as I'll hit my old age, I will be more patient in my little life

✓ I am becoming more patient and I think as I grow older, I will be more patient in my life

The phrase 'hit my old age' is awkward; 'grow older' is more natural. Also, 'little life' is unclear and unnecessary.