Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure subject-verb agreement. Also, make your answer more concise and clear by directly stating your point and supporting it with a reason.

Exemplo: I used to be impatient when I was younger because I would easily lose my temper if someone annoyed me. However, working in a team has taught me to be more patient since collaboration requires understanding others.

Sugestão: Focus on clarity and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use precise vocabulary to express your feelings.

Exemplo: I am usually patient, but I feel impatient when someone interrupts me while I'm dealing with urgent tasks because it distracts me and breaks my concentration.

Sugestão: Make your sentences complete and avoid grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a clear example. Also, try to be more specific about your feelings and experiences.

Exemplo: To be honest, I enjoy exploring things in depth, so I feel excited when I know I have to spend a long time on a task. For example, when I study a subject thoroughly, I find it very rewarding.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary by using more precise terms. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and avoid awkward phrasing.

Exemplo: My job definitely requires a lot of patience because I deal with many children's issues and collaborate with various people who have different opinions and perspectives.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use clear linking words to show cause and effect. Also, use appropriate vocabulary to express your ideas more naturally.

Exemplo: Compared to my childhood, I am much more patient now because of continuous practice and learning from collaborating with different people.

× I used to be an impatient person when I was young because I was easily lose my control when someone triggered me.

✓ I used to be an impatient person when I was young because I easily lost my control when someone triggered me.

The verb 'lose' should be in the past tense 'lost' to match the past tense context indicated by 'used to be' and 'was young'. Using the base form 'lose' here is incorrect.

× But when I, uh, go to work, I, uh, the workplace trained me to be a patient person because I need to collaborate.

✓ But when I, uh, went to work, the workplace trained me to be a patient person because I needed to collaborate.

The verb 'go' should be in the past tense 'went' to maintain consistency with the past tense narrative. Also, 'need' should be 'needed' to match the past context.

× I'm very patient in most of the time, but when someone disturbs me when I'm handling some urgent matter matters because it is because I believe my thoughts will shift away when I was disturbed.

✓ I'm very patient most of the time, but when someone disturbs me while I'm handling some urgent matters, it is because I believe my thoughts will shift away when I am disturbed.

The phrase 'in most of the time' is incorrect; it should be 'most of the time' without 'in'. Also, 'when' should be 'while' to indicate simultaneous actions. 'Matter matters' is redundant; 'matters' suffices. 'Was disturbed' should be 'am disturbed' to maintain present tense consistency.

× To be honest, I love digging in to explore the things more deeply when I spend time on it, so I will I feel excited when I notice that I need to spend a longer time on something, for example when I studying in.

✓ To be honest, I love digging in to explore things more deeply when I spend time on them, so I feel excited when I notice that I need to spend a longer time on something, for example when I am studying.

The phrase 'the things' should be 'things' as it is general. 'On it' should be 'on them' to agree with plural 'things'. 'I will I feel' is incorrect; 'I feel' suffices. 'When I studying in' is incomplete and should be 'when I am studying' to form the present continuous tense.

× I definitely need to be very patient in my job. It is because I have to handle a lot of kids matter and I need to collaborate with different parties that are varied in their comments and also their perspective.

✓ I definitely need to be very patient in my job. It is because I have to handle a lot of kids' matters and I need to collaborate with different parties that vary in their comments and also their perspectives.

'Kids matter' should be 'kids' matters' to indicate plural possessive. 'Are varied' is incorrect; 'vary' is the correct verb form. 'Perspective' should be plural 'perspectives' to match 'comments'.

× Too, compared with my childhood childhood, I believe I become more patient because of a longitudinal training and also after collaborating with different kinds of people, I learned from them and then to.

✓ Also, compared with my childhood, I believe I have become more patient because of long-term training and after collaborating with different kinds of people, I have learned from them.

'Too' at the beginning is informal; 'Also' is better. 'Childhood childhood' is a repetition error. 'I become' should be 'I have become' to indicate present perfect tense. 'A longitudinal training' is awkward; 'long-term training' is better. The last part 'and then to' is incomplete and should be removed. 'I learned' should be 'I have learned' for present perfect tense.