Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Та илүү тодорхой, шууд хариулт өгч, илүү байгалийн хэллэг ашиглах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "No, I am not very patient because I like to finish tasks quickly." гэж хэлж болно.

Exemplo: No, I am not very patient because I like to finish tasks quickly and move on to the next thing.

Sugestão: Хариулт урт, төвөгтэй бөгөөд тодорхой бус байна. Илүү энгийн, логик холбоос ашиглан, тодорхой жишээ оруулах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I feel impatient when unexpected tasks disrupt my schedule because I like to plan my time well."

Exemplo: I feel impatient when unexpected tasks disrupt my schedule because I like to plan my time well and stay organized.

Sugestão: Хариулт ойлгомжтой боловч давтагдалтай, холбоос үгсийг илүү үр дүнтэй ашиглах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "If I enjoy the task, time passes quickly; however, if I don't, I get bored and feel like wasting time."

Exemplo: If I enjoy the task, time passes quickly; however, if I don't, I get bored and feel like wasting time, so I try to avoid such activities.

Sugestão: Хариулт сайн боловч илүү товч, тодорхой холбоос үг ашиглах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Yes, as a student, I need to be patient during lessons, but I ask questions later if I don't understand."

Exemplo: Yes, as a student, I need to be patient during lessons, but I ask questions later if I don't understand or want to learn more.

Sugestão: Хариулт сайн бөгөөд ойлгомжтой. Гэхдээ илүү товч, холбоос үг ашиглан илүү байгалийн хэллэгтэй болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Yes, I am more patient now because I understand that impatience can upset others, so I think carefully before I speak."

Exemplo: Yes, I am more patient now because I understand that impatience can upset others, so I think carefully before I speak and ask questions when appropriate.

× I wouldn't say so.

✓ I don't think so.

The use of 'wouldn't' here is less appropriate because the speaker is expressing a current opinion, not a hypothetical or conditional situation. Using 'don't' is more direct and suitable for stating a present opinion.

× I prefer to do things quickly at the moment, therefore I won't consider myself patient as I always like to get jobs done quickly.

✓ I prefer to do things quickly at the moment; therefore, I don't consider myself patient as I always like to get jobs done quickly.

The original sentence incorrectly connects two independent clauses with a comma and 'therefore' without proper punctuation. Using a semicolon before 'therefore' and a comma after it correctly links the clauses. Also, 'won't consider' is inappropriate for a current state; 'don't consider' fits better.

× Well, I feel very impatient because as a person who structures his time very effectively, if I get anything different that is not part of my time schedule then I prefer to usually leave that or like do as quickly as possible without getting any positive or well results.

✓ Well, I feel very impatient because, as a person who structures his time very effectively, if I get anything different that is not part of my time schedule, then I usually prefer to leave it or do it as quickly as possible without getting any positive or good results.

The sentence had unclear pronoun references and awkward phrasing. 'Leave that' should be 'leave it' to correctly refer to the object. 'Like do' is informal and unclear; 'do it' is clearer. 'Well results' is incorrect; 'good results' is the proper collocation.

× Well if I enjoy doing it then it feels like time well spent, but if I don't enjoy it and I don't like it, then I just feel like I'm wasting my time and and I become very bored and I often don't wanna do that again in the future.

✓ Well, if I enjoy doing it, then it feels like time well spent, but if I don't enjoy it and don't like it, then I just feel like I'm wasting my time, and I become very bored and often don't want to do that again in the future.

The sentence had repeated words ('and and') and informal contractions ('wanna'). Removing the repetition and replacing 'wanna' with 'want to' improves clarity and formality. Also, adding commas improves readability.

× Well I do think so because I am a student and I can't like cut teachers off mid conversations so obviously I would have to be patient.

✓ Well, I do think so because I am a student and I can't cut teachers off mid-conversations, so obviously I have to be patient.

The phrase 'can't like cut' is informal and awkward; removing 'like' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'would have to be' suggests conditionality, but the context requires a present necessity, so 'have to be' is more appropriate.

× But if there's something I really don't understand or I really enjoy learning then I would talk to my teachers during their off periods and become more interested.

✓ But if there's something I really don't understand or really want to learn, then I talk to my teachers during their off periods and become more interested.

'Enjoy learning' is not incorrect but 'want to learn' fits better with the context of seeking help. Also, 'would talk' suggests conditionality; 'talk' is better for habitual action. 'Off periods' is acceptable but could be 'free periods' for clarity.

× I do think so because as I grow, as I've grown up and I've understood more about the world, I realize that being impatient with others is kind of disturbing and hard for the others.

✓ I do think so because as I have grown up and understood more about the world, I realize that being impatient with others is kind of disturbing and hard for others.

The phrase 'as I grow' is present tense and inconsistent with 'I've grown up' (present perfect). Removing 'as I grow' maintains tense consistency. Also, 'the others' is unnecessary; 'others' suffices.

× Therefore, I really take my time to think of what I say and then ask when I have the time.

✓ Therefore, I really take my time to think about what I say and then ask when I have the time.

The correct preposition with 'think' in this context is 'about' rather than 'of'. 'Think about' means to consider carefully, which fits the intended meaning.