Part 1
Examinador
Are you a patient person?
Candidato
To be honest I'm not patient person but I always try to be patient. For example when my friend is dropping me, I just holding my handbags like I try to patient.
Examinador
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Candidato
When's my friends call my dad name, my mother's name and he bullied me about my parents, especially if they let me about my physics, about my mindset or about me, it's OK, but if they're about.
Examinador
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Candidato
When I do something for a long time, I always get bored. I don't know why, but when I do something for a long time, I'm just not satisfied with that. Again, I just want to try about new one new experience.
Examinador
Does your job require you to be patient?
Candidato
Of course, all of the jobs are need the patience, especially if you want to be succeed. You should be patient and do not give up.
Examinador
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Candidato
Of course I am, because I can control my emotions. I can control my feelings. When I was a child, I can't control myself. I can't control my emotions. That's why when I was a child I impatient for things.
Are you a patient person?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang alami dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta hindari pengulangan kata 'patient'. Contoh kalimat yang lebih baik: "I'm not a very patient person, but I always try to be. For instance, when my friend is late to pick me up, I stay calm and wait quietly."
Exemplo: I'm not a very patient person, but I always try to be. For instance, when my friend is late to pick me up, I stay calm and wait quietly.
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Pontuação: 40.0Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan tidak terstruktur dengan baik. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih teratur dan lengkap, serta jelaskan alasan Anda merasa tidak sabar dengan spesifik. Contoh: "I feel impatient when my friends insult my parents or bully me about personal things, because it hurts my feelings."
Exemplo: I feel impatient when my friends insult my parents or bully me about personal things, because it hurts my feelings.
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas, namun ada pengulangan dan tata bahasa yang kurang tepat. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan alami. Contoh: "I usually get bored when I do something for a long time because I like to try new experiences."
Exemplo: I usually get bored when I do something for a long time because I like to try new experiences.
Does your job require you to be patient?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, namun ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan penggunaan kata. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih tepat dan alami. Contoh: "Yes, all jobs require patience, especially if you want to succeed. You need to be patient and never give up."
Exemplo: Yes, all jobs require patience, especially if you want to succeed. You need to be patient and never give up.
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: Jawaban Anda sudah mengandung ide yang baik, tetapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengulangan. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan ringkas. Contoh: "Yes, I am more patient now because I can control my emotions better than when I was a child."
Exemplo: Yes, I am more patient now because I can control my emotions better than when I was a child.
× To be honest I'm not patient person but I always try to be patient.
✓ To be honest I'm not a patient person but I always try to be patient.
The phrase 'patient person' requires an article 'a' before the singular noun 'patient person' to be grammatically correct.
× For example when my friend is dropping me, I just holding my handbags like I try to patient.
✓ For example, when my friend is dropping me, I just hold my handbag like I try to be patient.
The verb 'holding' is incorrectly used after 'I just'; it should be the base form 'hold'. Also, 'handbags' should be singular 'handbag' if referring to one, and 'try to patient' should be 'try to be patient' because 'patient' is an adjective requiring 'to be' before it.
× When's my friends call my dad name, my mother's name and he bullied me about my parents, especially if they let me about my physics, about my mindset or about me, it's OK, but if they're about.
✓ When my friends call my dad's name, my mother's name and they bully me about my parents, especially if they tease me about my physics, about my mindset or about me, it's OK, but if they don't, it's not.
'Friends' is plural, so 'call' is correct, but 'dad name' should be 'dad's name' to show possession. 'He bullied' should be 'they bully' to agree with plural 'friends'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; 'let me about my physics' is incorrect and replaced with 'tease me about my physics' for clarity.
× When I do something for a long time, I always get bored.
✓ When I do something for a long time, I always get bored.
This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context, so no correction is needed.
× Of course, all of the jobs are need the patience, especially if you want to be succeed.
✓ Of course, all jobs need patience, especially if you want to succeed.
'All of the jobs are need' is incorrect; it should be 'all jobs need' because 'need' is a verb and does not require 'are'. 'The patience' should be 'patience' without 'the' because it is an uncountable noun here. 'Be succeed' should be 'succeed' as 'succeed' is a verb.
× When I was a child, I can't control myself.
✓ When I was a child, I couldn't control myself.
The sentence refers to past time ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in past tense 'couldn't' instead of present tense 'can't'.
× That's why when I was a child I impatient for things.
✓ That's why when I was a child I was impatient for things.
The adjective 'impatient' needs a linking verb 'was' to form the correct past tense sentence.