Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý tưởng không được truyền đạt rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: I am not a very patient person because I dislike waiting for others. I tend to act quickly in everything I do, so waiting for a long time makes me feel bored and tired.

Sugestão: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nên dùng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, nên cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời sinh động.

Exemplo: I often feel impatient in situations where I have to wait for a long time. For example, once I invited my friend to my birthday party, but she was late for two hours because she needed to do her makeup, which made me very impatient.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, làm ý nghĩa bị mơ hồ. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác, câu đơn giản và rõ ràng hơn. Đồng thời, tránh dùng từ không đúng nghĩa như 'afraid' trong ngữ cảnh này.

Exemplo: I feel very interested when I do something for a long time because it gives me motivation. It also helps me build confidence and patience in my work or studies.

Sugestão: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Tránh lỗi như 'if I am have a job'. Ngoài ra, nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ.

Exemplo: Definitely yes. I am currently a secondary school student, and I believe every job requires patience to work and study efficiently. If I have a job in the future, I will be patient to perform well.

Sugestão: Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'Differently' thay vì 'Definitely'. Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc, có liên từ để nối ý và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn.

Exemplo: Definitely, I am more patient now than when I was a child. For example, when I was in primary school, I was lazy and often bored. I used to think about playing games instead of studying. However, now I realize that studying is very important, so I am more patient to achieve my future goals.

× I am not a really patient person because I don't want to be waited for anyone and I and I also immediate in every things and every action I do so I don't want to be patient to wait for a long term that's make me bored and tired.

✓ I am not a very patient person because I don't want to wait for anyone and I am also immediate in everything and every action I do, so I don't want to be patient to wait for a long time as that makes me bored and tired.

The adverb 'really' should be 'very' to modify 'patient' correctly. 'Be waited for' is incorrect; it should be 'wait for'. 'Immediate' is an adjective but used incorrectly here; 'impatient' or 'immediate' needs clarification, so 'immediate' is replaced with 'impatient' or rephrased. 'Every things' should be 'everything'. 'Long term' should be 'long time'. 'That's make' should be 'that makes' to agree with singular subject.

× I have been past a lot of situations that make me impatient.

✓ I have been through a lot of situations that made me impatient.

The phrase 'have been past' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have been through'. Also, 'make' should be in past tense 'made' to match the past experience.

× For instance, when I invited my friend to my birthday party, I need to wait for her for two hours because she need to make up and that make me really impatient because for a long time.

✓ For instance, when I invited my friend to my birthday party, I needed to wait for her for two hours because she needed to do her makeup, and that made me really impatient because it was for a long time.

The verb 'need' should be in past tense 'needed' to match the past event. 'Make up' as a noun phrase should be 'do her makeup'. 'That make' should be 'that made' to agree with singular subject in past tense. 'Because for a long time' is awkward; rephrased to 'because it was for a long time'.

× I feel very interested when I do something for a long time because it give me motivation and I need to be afraid in that actions beside it help me confidence and patience in work or studying.

✓ I feel very interested when I do something for a long time because it gives me motivation and I don't need to be afraid in those actions; besides, it helps me gain confidence and patience in work or studying.

'Give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject. 'I need to be afraid' is incorrect; likely intended 'I don't need to be afraid'. 'In that actions' should be 'in those actions'. 'Beside' should be 'besides'. 'Help me confidence' should be 'helps me gain confidence'.

× Definitely yes. Now I am a student in secondary school and I think every job needs to be patient to be more efficient in working and studying and if I am have a job in future I will be patient and to be doing good and not.

✓ Definitely yes. Now I am a student in secondary school and I think every job requires patience to be more efficient in working and studying, and if I have a job in the future, I will be patient and do well.

'Needs to be patient' is awkward; 'requires patience' is better. 'If I am have a job' is incorrect; should be 'if I have a job'. 'To be doing good and not' is unclear; corrected to 'do well'.

× Differently, yes. For example, when I was a student in primary school, I am very lazy and bored. When I learn, I always think about playing games, but not today. I think that studying is very important and significant to me, so I am more patient now to be achieve my goals in the future.

✓ Definitely, yes. For example, when I was a student in primary school, I was very lazy and bored. When I learned, I always thought about playing games, but not today. I think that studying is very important and significant to me, so I am more patient now to achieve my goals in the future.

'Differently' is incorrect; should be 'Definitely'. 'I am very lazy and bored' should be past tense 'I was'. 'When I learn' should be past tense 'When I learned'. 'I always think' should be past tense 'I always thought'. 'To be achieve' should be 'to achieve'.