Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a complete example.

Exemplo: Yes, I consider myself a very patient person because I work as a nurse in a dementia care unit. Since many residents can be aggressive, I have learned to remain calm and composed in challenging situations.

Sugestão: Focus on clearer sentence construction and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain reasons for impatience and provide specific examples.

Exemplo: I feel impatient mainly when I am sleep deprived or in a bad mood, especially on busy days when I don't get enough rest.

Sugestão: Avoid awkward phrases and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to explain your feelings and reasons clearly and provide a concise example.

Exemplo: I feel very happy when I have plenty of time to complete a task because it allows me to plan carefully and be more productive.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide a clear example of why patience is necessary in your job.

Exemplo: Yes, my job as a nurse requires a great deal of patience. For instance, working in a dementia care unit means dealing with aggressive residents, so staying calm is essential.

Sugestão: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to contrast past and present and provide specific reasons for increased patience.

Exemplo: I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child because I have a clearer understanding of my goals and what is important in life.

× Yes, I'm very patient person because as a professionally I'm an I'm working as a nurse.

✓ Yes, I'm a very patient person because professionally I'm working as a nurse.

The phrase 'very patient person' requires an article 'a' before 'very' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'as a professionally' is incorrect; it should be 'professionally' without 'as a'. The sentence is corrected to include the article and remove the incorrect phrase.

× So definitely my job required too much patience because I'm working as a nurse.

✓ So definitely my job requires too much patience because I'm working as a nurse.

The verb 'required' is in the past tense, but the sentence refers to a current job, so the present tense 'requires' is appropriate. Also, 'too much patience' is correct as 'patience' is uncountable.

× So for example in dementia care unit people has to be more calm and more patient because most of the resident are very aggressive so we need to calm our mind.

✓ So for example, in the dementia care unit, people have to be calmer and more patient because most of the residents are very aggressive, so we need to calm our minds.

'People' is plural and should be followed by 'have' not 'has'. 'Resident' should be plural 'residents'. 'Calm' as an adjective should be 'calmer' to compare. 'Mind' should be plural 'minds' to agree with 'we'. Commas are added for clarity.