Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and a bit long. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: No, I'm not a patient person because I tend to rush to achieve my goals quickly. For instance, I often feel anxious when progress is slow, which makes it hard for me to wait calmly.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect your ideas.

Exemplo: I feel impatient mainly when working on important projects, such as studying for exams. Because I want to succeed quickly, I often get anxious and eager to finish as soon as possible.

Sugestão: Your answer is honest but contains filler words and some awkward phrasing. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid fillers.

Exemplo: I find it difficult to stay patient when tasks take a long time. However, I realize that being patient is important, so I try to improve by reminding myself of the benefits of persistence.

Sugestão: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Try to use clearer vocabulary and correct sentence structures. Also, explain your points with specific examples.

Exemplo: Yes, my job at a beauty clinic requires patience because I interact with many clients who have different personalities. For example, I need to listen carefully and calmly explain treatment options to help them make informed decisions.

Sugestão: Your answer conveys your idea but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: I believe I was more patient as a child than I am now. Currently, I find myself becoming more impatient, which makes life challenging, so I am working on improving my patience in various areas.

× I'm always in a hurry and I cannot wait to achieve my goal and I'm always trying to reach my goals and my purpose at a very little time an I'm not a patient person.

✓ I'm always in a hurry and I cannot wait to achieve my goals and I'm always trying to reach my goals and my purpose in a very short time and I'm not a patient person.

The phrase 'my goal' and 'my goals' are inconsistent; since the student refers to multiple goals later, 'my goals' is more appropriate. Also, 'at a very little time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in a very short time' to express a brief duration.

× Honestly, I think it depends on the project or what was I want.

✓ Honestly, I think it depends on the project or what I want.

The phrase 'what was I want' is incorrect because 'was' is unnecessary and disrupts the present tense structure. The correct form is 'what I want' to express current desires.

× For example, uh, when I'm trying to study or having a better exam, I'm always impatient and I'm trying to achieve that goal sooner.

✓ For example, uh, when I'm trying to study or have a better exam, I'm always impatient and I'm trying to achieve that goal sooner.

The phrase 'or having a better exam' is incorrect because it mixes verb forms. It should be 'or have a better exam' to maintain parallel structure with 'trying to study'.

× It is very hard for me to deal with the time that I'm working on a special project, but I have to work on myself to be more patient because I think it can help me more.

✓ It is very hard for me to deal with the time I spend working on a special project, but I have to work on myself to be more patient because I think it can help me more.

The phrase 'deal with the time that I'm working on a special project' is awkward. Using 'the time I spend working' is clearer and more natural English.

× Actually, yes, because I'm working in a beauty clinic and I have to talk with different people with various personalities, so I have to be patient at work to conceive, to convince people make a better choice for their receive *****.

✓ Actually, yes, because I'm working at a beauty clinic and I have to talk to different people with various personalities, so I have to be patient at work to convince people to make better choices for their treatments.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to workplaces. Also, 'talk with' is better as 'talk to' in this context. The phrase 'to conceive' is incorrect here and should be removed. 'Convince people make' needs 'to' before 'make'. 'Their receive *****' is unclear; 'their treatments' is a suitable correction.

× I think it is vice versa. I think when I was child I was more patient, but right now I think I am changing to an impatient person and that is a make everything hard for me and I have to work on myself to be more patient in different parts of my life.

✓ I think it is vice versa. I think when I was a child I was more patient, but right now I think I am becoming an impatient person and that makes everything hard for me and I have to work on myself to be more patient in different parts of my life.

The phrase 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a'. 'Changing to' should be 'becoming' for natural expression. 'That is a make' is incorrect; it should be 'that makes' to agree with the singular subject 'that'.