Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答较直接但存在重复、语法和用词不自然的问题。建议： 1) 避免重复（如两次用“I usually”），把主题句和细节合并； 2) 修改不自然或错误的表达（如“make me feel entertained”应为“cheer me up”或“boost my mood”；“make myself more confident”应为“make me feel more confident”）； 3) 控制长度，不超过5句，并用连接词简洁解释原因或频率。练习句型：主题句 + 一两个具体原因/情境 + 频率。

Exemplo: I usually have a snack, especially chocolate, before exams because it cheers me up and helps me feel more confident. I tend to eat it about an hour before the test to calm my nerves.

Sugestão: 观点明确但有语法、搭配和用词错误，细节不够具体。建议： 1) 注意单复数和搭配（“most snacks”而不是“most of snacks”；“make people obese”而非“make people more obesity”）； 2) 提供更具体的例子和稍微扩展理由，用连接词如“for example”或“as a result”使逻辑连贯； 3) 保持简洁，避免重复。

Exemplo: No, I don't think snacks are healthy. Most snacks are high in fat and sugar, which can lead to weight gain. For example, candies and fried snacks are calorie-dense and can increase the risk of obesity over time.

Sugestão: 回答包含过去习惯但时态和句尾不完整，有逻辑衔接不足。建议： 1) 使用正确时态（过去常态用“I often ate”或“I used to eat”）； 2) 完整表达对比（说明为何认为能帮助注意力同时有害健康，并用连接词如“however”）； 3) 修正句子未完成的问题并控制句数。

Exemplo: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I usually had them before going to school because I felt they helped me concentrate in class; however, I now realise they weren't very healthy.

Sugestão: 回答有词汇和表达错误，且用词不当导致意思不清。建议： 1) 使用恰当的形容词（不是“sweaty perfume”，可用“rich aroma”或“sweet smell”）； 2) 避免口语或不恰当词汇（如“appreciate much”、“sweetie”）； 3) 给出简短理由或具体品牌作为补充，用连接词保持流畅。

Exemplo: I like eating chocolate because of its rich aroma and sweet taste. For example, I often buy a brand called Dough, which I find delicious and satisfying.

× I usually eat snacks before I need to go for examinations.

✓ I usually eat snacks before I have to go to exams.

原句中的“before I need to go for examinations”时态和用法不自然。应使用常见表达“have to”表示必须去做某事，并用复数名词“exams”或可数形式更自然。建议用“before I have to go to exams”。

× I usually eat chocolate because it can make me feel entertained and make myself more confident.

✓ I usually eat chocolate because it makes me feel relaxed and more confident.

原句中“it can make me feel entertained”用词不当，chocolate通常使人relaxed、comforted等，而不是“entertained”。另外“make myself more confident”中不需要反身代词myself，用makes me more confident。建议使用“it makes me feel relaxed and more confident”。

× I often eat it before the exam.

✓ I often eat it before exams.

上下文为习惯性行为，应使用复数泛指“exams”或特指某次考试可用“the exam”。为一致性改为“before exams”。

× No, I think eating snacks is harmful to my health. Firstly, most of snacks has a lot of fat which will make people more obesity.

✓ No, I think eating snacks is harmful to my health. Firstly, most snacks have a lot of fat which can make people more obese.

“most of snacks”应为“most snacks”或“most of the snacks”。动词与主语不一致，“snacks”复数需用“have”。“make people more obesity”错误，形容词应为“obese”。另外“will”换成“can”更符合一般陈述。

× For example the candy has a lot of sugar and make people fat.

✓ For example, candy has a lot of sugar and makes people fat.

主语“candy”视为不可数或类属名词时，动词需使用第三人称单数“makes”。原句缺少逗号，且“make”形式错误。

× Yes, I often eat snacks.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks.

问题询问过去习惯（Did you often eat snacks when you were young?），回答应该用过去时“ate”表示过去常做的动作，而不是一般现在时“eat”。

× I usually eat them before I need to go to school.

✓ I usually ate them before I had to go to school.

同前，问题是过去时，需用过去时态“ate”和“had to”。

× I think eating snacks in the morning can make me concentrate on the lessons, but they are quite harmful to my health and.

✓ I think eating snacks in the morning helped me concentrate on lessons, but they were quite harmful to my health.

原句混合现在和过去，问题询问过去经历，应使用过去时“helped”/“were”。句尾多余“and.”且结构不完整，需删除。

× For me, I like to eat chocolate. It has a sweaty perfume which makes me appreciate much and for example I usually eat a chocolate brand called Dough which is yummy and sweetie.

✓ I like to eat chocolate. It has a sweet aroma that I really enjoy. For example, I usually eat a chocolate brand called Dough, which is yummy and sweet.

“sweaty perfume”用词不当，应为“sweet aroma”或“sweet smell”。“makes me appreciate much”不自然，改为“I really enjoy”。“sweetie”用法错误，应为形容词“sweet”。另外拆句和标点使表达更清晰。