Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating the same reason twice (saving time).

Exemplo: I usually eat snacks when I'm short of time and need to go out quickly. Because snacks are ready-made, they save me time compared to cooked meals.

Sugestão: Good use of contrasting ideas and clear opinion. To improve, try to use more precise linking words and correct minor grammar mistakes, such as 'are unhealthy' instead of 'or unhealthy'.

Exemplo: I believe small snacks like nuts and fruits are healthy if eaten in moderation. However, many market snacks contain high sugar and fat, so it's important to choose snacks carefully.

Sugestão: Your answer has some grammar errors and is a bit unclear. Try to use correct tense and sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy like 'every day on a daily basis'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, when I was a teenager, I often ate snacks because my home was near a big shopping mall. It had many snack options with different varieties and flavours, so I visited the mall daily.

Sugestão: Your answer conveys your preference clearly but has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words and correct sentence structures for clarity and fluency.

Exemplo: I usually prefer healthy snacks like nuts and fruits because, when eaten in moderation, they are very beneficial for health. I avoid snacks like Lays because they are extremely unhealthy.

× I usually eat snacks when I have shortage of time and I have to go somewhere else urgently, but before that I also have to take some meal.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I have a shortage of time and I have to go somewhere else urgently, but before that I also have to have a meal.

The phrase 'shortage of time' requires the article 'a' before 'shortage' because 'shortage' is a singular countable noun. Also, 'take some meal' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have a meal' or 'eat a meal'. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× Then I usually prefer snacks rather than a cooked meal because it can save a lot of time because they are ready made.

✓ Then I usually prefer snacks rather than a cooked meal because they can save a lot of time as they are ready made.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'snacks', which is plural; it should be 'they'. Also, 'ready made' should be hyphenated as 'ready-made'. This correction ensures subject-pronoun agreement and proper adjective form.

× However, some snacks available in the market or unhealthy which contains high sugar and fat content.

✓ However, some snacks available in the market are unhealthy and contain high sugar and fat content.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' after 'snacks', and 'or' is incorrectly used instead of 'are'. Also, 'contains' should be 'contain' to agree with the plural subject 'snacks'. This correction fixes verb usage and subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, obviously when I was in my teenager I have a lot of place to eat, number of snacks and of different variety and of different flavours because my home is near a big shopping mall and I always consider to visit mall every day on a daily basis.

✓ Yes, obviously when I was a teenager I had a lot of places to eat, a number of snacks of different varieties and different flavours because my home was near a big shopping mall and I used to visit the mall every day.

The phrase 'in my teenager' is incorrect; it should be 'a teenager'. The verbs 'have' and 'is' should be in past tense 'had' and 'was' to match the past time frame. 'Number of snacks' needs an article 'a number of'. 'Variety' should be plural 'varieties' to match 'different'. 'Consider to visit' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'used to visit'. Also, 'mall' needs the definite article 'the'. These corrections align verb tenses and fix article and phrase usage.

× Well I usually prefer healthy snacks like nuts and fruits because if they are taken in the moderation amount they can very beneficial for health and I do not prefer snacks like Lays and something like that which are extremely unhealthy for.

✓ Well, I usually prefer healthy snacks like nuts and fruits because if they are taken in moderation, they can be very beneficial for health and I do not prefer snacks like Lays and similar ones which are extremely unhealthy.

The phrase 'in the moderation amount' is incorrect; it should be 'in moderation'. The verb 'can very beneficial' is missing 'be'. The phrase 'something like that' is vague; 'similar ones' is clearer. The sentence ends abruptly with 'unhealthy for' which is incomplete; it should end with 'unhealthy'. These corrections improve preposition use, verb form, and sentence completeness.