Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: I usually eat snacks in the evening after my walk because I feel hungry. For example, I often choose cookies or crackers since they are affordable and satisfy my cravings.

Sugestão: Make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples of healthier snacks to enrich your answer.

Exemplo: I think eating snacks is generally unhealthy, but there are healthier options available. For instance, I prefer snacks with less sugar and calories, like fruit or nuts, because they help me stay healthy and feel relaxed.

Sugestão: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to organize your answer logically and provide specific details about your snacking habits as a child.

Exemplo: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. My parents would complain because I finished all the snacks they bought within a day or two, so sometimes they tried to save them for the whole week.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why you like these snacks, including health considerations.

Exemplo: I like to eat cookies, fries, and chips. Whenever I go shopping, I usually buy these snacks because I enjoy their taste. However, I try to choose options with less sugar or fewer calories to stay healthy.

× I usually eat snacks during evening after my walk.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening after my walk.

The preposition 'during' is incorrect here; 'in the evening' is the correct phrase to indicate a time period in the day.

× I feel very uh, hungry and uh, cravings to eat something uh, that satisfies my cravings.

✓ I feel very hungry and have cravings to eat something that satisfies my cravings.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'cravings' as a verb; 'have cravings' is the correct expression. Also, redundant use of 'uh' should be omitted for clarity.

× So cookies and uh, crackers are the cheaper ones so that I can save my money also.

✓ So cookies and crackers are the cheaper ones, so I can save my money as well.

The sentence needs a comma before 'so' to separate clauses, and 'also' is better replaced with 'as well' for smoother flow.

× I always prefer snacks which is less sugar or calories and it will make us stay healthier and more relaxing and.

✓ I always prefer snacks which have less sugar or calories, and they help us stay healthier and more relaxed.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'snacks' (plural), so the verb should be 'have' not 'is'. Also, 'more relaxing' should be 'more relaxed' to describe a state of being.

× Yes, when I was young my parents always doing something whenever she returns from the shopping.

✓ Yes, when I was young, my parents were always doing something whenever she returned from shopping.

The past continuous tense 'were always doing' is needed to describe habitual past actions. Also, 'returns' should be in past tense 'returned' to match the time frame. 'From the shopping' should be 'from shopping'.

× So I they always complain that I finish up the snacks whatever they are buying in in a one hour 2 days.

✓ So they always complained that I finished the snacks they bought within one or two hours.

The pronoun 'I they' is incorrect; it should be 'they'. Also, verb tenses should be past to match the time frame. The phrase 'in in a one hour 2 days' is unclear and corrected to 'within one or two hours'.

× So sometimes they plan to keep those snacks for the whole week.

✓ So sometimes they planned to keep those snacks for the whole week.

The verb tense should be past 'planned' to match the past context. The preposition 'for' is correct here.

× I prefer cookies and fries or sometimes chips.

✓ I prefer cookies, fries, or sometimes chips.

Commas are needed to separate items in a list properly. 'Or' is used correctly before the last item.

× These are the options I usually buy whenever I go for a shopping.

✓ These are the options I usually buy whenever I go shopping.

The phrase 'go for a shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping' without 'for a'.

× I couldn't resist whenever I whenever I see a lace packet or a cookies which which is my favorite and I choose with the less calorie chips or like less sugar.

✓ I can't resist whenever I see a large packet of cookies, which are my favorite, and I choose chips with fewer calories or less sugar.

The sentence has repeated words and unclear structure. 'Couldn't' is changed to 'can't' to match present tense. 'Lace' is corrected to 'large'. 'A cookies' is incorrect; 'cookies' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Which which' is redundant. 'Less calorie chips' should be 'chips with fewer calories' because 'calories' is countable.