Weather— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and structured. Start with a direct topic sentence about the general weather, then briefly mention seasonal variations using linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: The weather where I live is mostly warm and hot throughout the year. However, during autumn and winter, it becomes milder and less hot, but not very cold.

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but a bit repetitive and informal. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, use more precise vocabulary to express your preference clearly.

Exemplo: I prefer cold weather to hot weather because in my country, spring, summer, and part of fall are extremely hot, which can be uncomfortable. Therefore, I find cold weather more refreshing and pleasant.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and lacks coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and be more specific about your preference and reasons. Avoid unnecessary details that do not support your main point.

Exemplo: I prefer wet weather because rain brings freshness and coolness. Although it rarely snows in my country, the occasional rain helps improve the atmosphere and makes the environment more pleasant.

Sugestão: Your answer is repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a clear explanation of your habit and its purpose.

Exemplo: Yes, I check the weather forecast daily to know the temperature outside. Recently, I've noticed that the weather has cooled down a bit, which is something I appreciate since we miss the cold weather here.

Sugestão: Your answer lacks clarity and contains some errors. Be specific about the effects of climate change and use correct vocabulary. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words.

Exemplo: I believe climate change has significant effects on our planet, especially on animals. For instance, changes in snowfall patterns affect bears' habitats, and rising temperatures impact fish populations.

Sugestão: Your answer is enthusiastic but somewhat repetitive and informal. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear reasons for your preference.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates. For example, I am considering moving to Doha because its geography results in colder weather, more rain, and even snow, which is different from my current city.

× I prefer cold weather over hot weather cause in my country it's always like this during the spring and summer and even half of fall it's really really hot and we're really tired of sweating so I always prefer cold weather.

✓ I prefer cold weather over hot weather because in my country it's always like this during the spring and summer, and even half of fall it's really, really hot, and we're really tired of sweating, so I always prefer cold weather.

The word 'cause' is an informal contraction of 'because' and is inappropriate in formal speech or writing. Using 'because' improves clarity and formality. Also, commas are needed to separate clauses for better readability.

× Actually I prefer wet weather, like rain means wind because most of the time because of our geography, it barely snows in winter in my country.

✓ Actually, I prefer wet weather, like rain and wind, because most of the time, due to our geography, it barely snows in winter in my country.

The phrase 'rain means wind' is incorrect; it should be 'rain and wind' to correctly list weather elements. Also, 'because of' is better replaced with 'due to' for clarity in this context.

× And even when it snows it will stay on like one or two days and then the snow will melt down.

✓ And even when it snows, it will stay for like one or two days, and then the snow will melt away.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; 'stay for' is appropriate to indicate duration. Also, 'melt down' is not standard; 'melt away' is the correct phrasal verb for snow disappearing.

× I daily check the weather to see how how much is the temperature outside and I realize that it's all cool down a bit because we really miss the cold weather in here.

✓ I check the weather daily to see how much the temperature is outside, and I realize that it has all cooled down a bit because we really miss the cold weather here.

The adverb 'daily' should be placed after the verb 'check' for correct word order. The phrase 'how how much is the temperature' is incorrect; it should be 'how much the temperature is'. 'Cool down' should be in past tense 'cooled down' to match the context. Also, 'in here' is better as 'here'.

× For example the snow, beers or even fishes.

✓ For example, the snow, bears, or even fish.

'Beers' is incorrect when referring to animals; the correct plural is 'bears'. 'Fishes' is generally used when referring to different species; 'fish' is the standard plural. Also, a comma is needed after 'For example'.

× Yes, absolutely. I would love to move to another city that got a different weather.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I would love to move to another city that has different weather.

The phrase 'that got' is informal and incorrect here; 'that has' is the correct present tense form. Also, 'different weather' does not need the article 'a'.

× And for example, right now I'm trying to leave my city and move to Doha because because of their geography, it's colder and it rains more in there and it snows even more in there.

✓ For example, right now I'm trying to leave my city and move to Doha because, due to its geography, it's colder, it rains more there, and it even snows more there.

The phrase 'because because of' is redundant; 'because' or 'due to' should be used. 'Their geography' is incorrect when referring to a city; 'its geography' is correct. The preposition 'in there' is better as 'there' for naturalness.