Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and informative with clear reasons, but it is slightly long and repetitive (mentions working at a news agency twice across answers). To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details, using a linking word to connect them. Avoid repeating the same background information in multiple answers.

Exemplo: Yes, I write almost every day. For about ten years I’ve worked at a news agency in Japan, where writing summaries from interviews is a main part of my job, so I practice writing regularly.

Sugestão: Good content and clear motivation, but the opening repeats previous employment detail. Be more concise and use a linking word to connect topic and reason. Provide a specific example of a topic you enjoy to make it more vivid.

Exemplo: I enjoy writing science and technology articles because I mainly cover space exploration and rocket science. For example, I recently wrote a piece explaining a new satellite launch in simple terms so general readers could understand it.

Sugestão: Answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing (e.g., “experienced writing stories about the science,” “it will be changed”). Improve accuracy: give a clear reason why topics will change and use a linking word to connect present experience to future plans. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. After I return to Japan I expect to cover diplomacy and international relations because my new role will involve contacts with foreign embassies, so my focus will shift from science to political reporting.

Sugestão: Strong, natural response with a clear reason and brief past contrast. To improve further, tighten the second sentence to avoid awkward phrasing and use a linking word to contrast past and present.

Exemplo: I prefer typing because it’s faster and makes editing easy. However, when I was a child I wrote by hand with a pencil, but over the last decade I’ve switched almost entirely to digital writing.

Sugestão: Your answer gives specific frequency and purpose, which is good, but phrasing is awkward (“record it,” “write it down on my diary”). Be more concise and use specific examples of how the diary helped change habits, connected by linking words.

Exemplo: I’ve kept a diary almost every day since January to improve my writing and track habits. As a result, I now go to bed earlier and wake up at a more consistent time because I review my schedule each night.

Sugestão: Relevant detail about the diary is good, but the answer is slightly generic and has grammatical slips (“using such items are”). Improve by giving one more concrete example of another recording method (e.g., apps, photos) and link ideas with a connector.

Exemplo: I also use a scheduling diary that lists hours from 6:00 am to 11:00 pm because it helps me see tasks at a glance. In addition, I use a notes app on my phone to take quick photos and short voice memos when I’m on the move.

× Yes, I usually write a lot, almost every day, because I have worked at a news agency in Japan for about 10 years, so conducting interviews and summarizing information are some of the most important tasks for me.

✓ Yes, I usually write a lot, almost every day, because I have been working at a news agency in Japan for about 10 years, so conducting interviews and summarizing information are some of the most important tasks for me.

The original sentence mixes simple present 'I usually write' with present perfect 'I have worked' which is grammatical but less natural when emphasizing a continuing situation. Use present perfect continuous 'have been working' to show an action that started in the past and continues to the present. This makes the temporal relationship clearer and fits the ongoing nature of the job. Suggestion: Use 'have been working' for activities that started in the past and are still ongoing; use 'worked' or 'I worked' for completed past jobs.

× I like writing articles about science and technology because I have worked at the news agency for about 10 years and mainly cover stories about space exploration and rocket science.

✓ I like writing articles about science and technology because I have been working at the news agency for about 10 years and mainly cover stories about space exploration and rocket science.

Same issue as above: 'have worked' suggests a completed period, while the speaker continues to cover these topics. Present perfect continuous 'have been working' matches 'mainly cover' and clarifies ongoing employment. Also avoids awkward repetition of past-perfect sense. Suggestion: Choose tense consistently when describing ongoing activities (present perfect continuous + present simple for habitual actions).

× Yes, I definitely think my writing topics will change in the near future, especially after I go back to Japan, and I think I will write articles about diplomacy and international relations.

✓ Yes, I definitely think my writing topics will change in the near future, especially after I go back to Japan; I think I will write articles about diplomacy and international relations.

No major grammatical error, but the sentence was long and slightly repetitive ('and I think I will'). Split or use a semicolon to improve clarity and flow. Tense usage 'will change' and 'will write' is correct for future intentions. Suggestion: Remove repeated phrases and use punctuation to separate ideas for clarity.

× I have experienced writing stories about the science, but it will be changed.

✓ I have experience writing stories about science, but that will change.

'Have experienced writing' is awkward; 'have experience writing' is the natural collocation. 'the science' is incorrect article usage—'science' is uncountable here so no article. 'It will be changed' is passive and vague; better to use active 'that will change' to refer to topics. This fixes article error and improves clarity. Suggestion: Use 'have experience writing' for skills, omit 'the' with uncountable nouns like 'science', and prefer active structures for clarity.

× When I was a child, I used to write articles by my hand with pencils, but my writing habit has changed a lot in the past 10 years.

✓ When I was a child, I used to write articles by hand with pencils, but my writing habits have changed a lot over the past 10 years.

'By my hand' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'by hand' meaning handwriting. 'Writing habit' should be plural 'writing habits' if referring to multiple aspects (optional), and 'in the past 10 years' is acceptable but 'over the past 10 years' is more natural with 'changed'. Also ensure tense agreement: 'have changed' indicates change up to now. Suggestion: Use fixed expressions like 'by hand' and 'over the past 10 years'; choose singular/plural for 'habit(s)' based on meaning.

× I have kept a diary almost every day since the beginning of this January because I want to record it and improve my style.

✓ I have kept a diary almost every day since the beginning of this January because I want to record my life and improve my style.

'Record it' is unclear: the pronoun 'it' has no clear antecedent. Use 'record my life' or 'record what happens' to clarify. The rest is grammatical; present perfect 'have kept' correctly indicates an action continuing from January. Suggestion: Replace vague pronoun 'it' with a clear noun phrase that refers to what you are recording.

× So before going to bed I usually write it down on my diary and this is very effective to change my lifestyle, such as when to go to bed or wake up.

✓ So before going to bed I usually write it down in my diary, and this is very effective for changing my lifestyle, such as deciding when to go to bed or wake up.

Use 'in my diary' (not 'on my diary') for entries inside a diary. 'Effective to change' is awkward; 'effective for changing' or 'effective in changing' is better. 'When to go to bed or wake up' should be 'deciding when to go to bed or wake up' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions with 'diary' and use 'effective for/in changing' with a gerund.

× This January I bought a diary that shows my daily schedule from 6:00 AM to 11:00 PM and I think this diary is very convenient because I can see what I did and what I need for the day.

✓ This January I bought a diary that shows my daily schedule from 6:00 AM to 11:00 PM, and I think this diary is very convenient because I can see what I did and what I need to do for the day.

'What I need for the day' is vague; the intended meaning is likely 'what I need to do for the day'. Adding 'to do' clarifies the purpose. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use precise verb phrases like 'need to do' when listing tasks.

× So I think using such items are very important to record our lives.

✓ So I think using such items is very important for recording our lives.

The subject 'using such items' is a gerund phrase treated as singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also 'to record our lives' is grammatically okay, but 'for recording our lives' flows better. Ensure pronoun scope: 'our lives' is acceptable if the speaker includes themselves and readers. Suggestion: Match verb number to gerund subjects (singular), and choose preposition 'for' + gerund for purpose.