Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答要更直接并且条理清晰。先用一句话直接回答问题，然后简要说明频率和原因，避免重复和语法错误。注意时态和名词形式（master student 应为 master's student；essay 多用复数或写作）。尽量保持不超过5句。

Exemplo: Yes, I write a lot. As a master's student, I write essays almost every day because of coursework and feedback from my tutor. Occasionally my tutor gives extra assignments, so I revise and submit essays regularly.

Sugestão: 回答应更准确地说明写作主题并给出具体原因或例子。减少填充词（uh, umm），用连词使句子流畅。说明“为什么”时给出具体目的或兴趣点。

Exemplo: I mainly write essays related to my major, musicology, especially Chinese modern musicology. For example, I explore how traditional Chinese music elements can be combined with contemporary styles to create new forms.

Sugestão: 回答要更自然并用更准确的表达谈未来变化。避免字面翻译（my age is more and more older）。可以说明随着人生阶段变化写作题材会如何改变并给出例子。

Exemplo: Yes, I think my writing will change as I get older. In the future I expect to write more personal pieces, like diaries or reflections on my feelings and life experiences.

Sugestão: 回答清晰但有重复。先直接给出偏好，再用1–2个具体理由并用连词连接。避免重复表达“convenient”。注意语法和词序（write essays, on my phone）。

Exemplo: I prefer typing because it's more convenient and efficient. For instance, I can write on my phone, laptop or iPad, and my fast typing speed helps me finish essays quickly.

Sugestão: 回答要逻辑清晰，区分过去和现在，使用正确的表达（felt pressure, I had to write）。说明频率时要具体并简短解释原因，避免杂乱无章的停顿词。

Exemplo: I used to write in my diary every day when I was in junior high because I felt a lot of pressure and needed to express my emotions. Now I write about twice a week, for example I plan to write again tomorrow.

Sugestão: 回答缺乏条理且含混。先列出方法（photos, diaries），然后给出具体情境或频率。避免不必要的重复和语法错误（read → write; 'when I was upset'）。

Exemplo: I usually take photos to record important moments, and I also keep a diary. I tend to write in my diary about twice a week, especially when I'm upset or frustrated.

× Yes, because I am a master student so I write my essay every day and sometimes my tutor will bring me a homework like write another I say and I will take my essay to my tutor.

✓ Yes, because I am a master's student, so I write essays every day. Sometimes my tutor gives me homework like "write another essay," and I take my essay to my tutor.

问题类型：现在时/一般现在时使用不当。说明：句子中存在名词单复数错误（master student → master's student； essay → essays），时态和动词搭配不自然（will bring me a homework → gives me homework），以及表达混乱。建议：使用一般现在时描述经常发生的事情（write → write essays; gives），复数用于表示经常写多篇文章；用更自然的短语如 “give homework” 和引号标注要写的作业内容。

× I like to write, uh, some essay about my major, uh, because my major is musicology, umm, I uh, specifically is Chinese modern musicology. So I often argue, umm, Chinese, Chinese traditional music, how to combine with, uh, modern music that.

✓ I like to write essays about my major because my major is musicology; specifically, I study Chinese modern musicology. I often write about Chinese traditional music and how to combine it with modern music.

问题类型：形容词/副词使用不当及句子结构混乱。说明：使用了不正确的词类或形式（some essay → essays； specifically is → specifically, I study; argue → write about/ discuss），句子断裂导致表达不清。建议：复数名词表示泛指（essays）；用正确的动词短语表达观点或写作主题（write about / discuss）；将长句拆分并调整词序以保持清晰。

× Oh yes, I think it will be changed because my age is more and more older. So I think in the future I maybe write a little about my diary, just my feeling or emotions.

✓ Oh yes, I think it will change because I will get older. In the future I might write more about my diary—just my feelings or emotions.

问题类型：将来时使用不当。说明：原句中“will be changed”被动且不自然，年龄说法不正确（more and more older），情态动词和动词形式错误（maybe write a little → might write more about my diary; feeling → feelings）。建议：用主动形式表达变化（it will change），用正确的比较表达（get older / become older），情态动词用might或may并搭配动词原形，使用复数 feelings 表示情感的集合。

× I prefer typing because I think it is very convenient, such as I can write essay in my phone meanwhile I can write in my computer or just iPad. So I think it's convenient and I think and my typing speed is very fast so it is efficient.

✓ I prefer typing because I think it is very convenient. For example, I can write essays on my phone, on my computer, or on my iPad. My typing speed is very fast, so it is efficient.

问题类型：代词和介词使用不当。说明：句中代词和介词搭配不准确（write essay in my phone → write essays on my phone；write in my computer → on my computer），重复多余的代词和连接词（and I think and）。建议：使用正确的介词on用于电子设备前，使用复数essays表示泛指，删除多余重复表达，保持句子简洁。

× Uh, in my junior high school, I read my diary every day, uh, because that time, uh, I feel very pressure, so I must stay, uh, write my emotions and feeling. And now just to, umm, 2, uh, twice a week, umm, especially I plan to do some tomorrow.

✓ In junior high school, I wrote in my diary every day because at that time I felt a lot of pressure, so I had to write down my emotions and feelings. Now I write only twice a week; in fact, I plan to write tomorrow.

问题类型：过去时使用不当。说明：描述过去习惯应使用过去时（read → wrote； feel → felt； must stay write → had to write down），并注意名词复数（feeling → feelings）及表达次数（just to 2 → only twice a week）。建议：用过去时叙述过去习惯或状态，使用固定搭配 write down 表示记录，明确频率表达（only twice a week），并修正时态一致性。

× Umm, sometimes I will take some photos umm, to record my life and sometimes I will write Diaries, umm, suggest me, I uh, read Diaries uh, twice a week and uh, especially umm, when I was upside and angry.

✓ Sometimes I take photos to record my life, and sometimes I write diaries. I read my diaries twice a week, especially when I am upset or angry.

问题类型：代词和时态混用/名词大小写错误。说明：Diaries不应大写且用法不当，时态混乱（I will take → I take；read Diaries twice a week 用时态应与习惯一致），单词错误（upside → upset）。建议：使用一般现在时描述经常性行为（take, write, read），小写diaries，使用正确形容词upset表示心情，保持时态一致。