Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang natural dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, gunakan kalimat yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan dan jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang benar secara tata bahasa.

Exemplo: Yes, I write a lot in my daily life because I have always dreamed of becoming a writer. I often journal to express my feelings, especially when I feel sad or upset.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Mulailah dengan kalimat topik yang jelas, lalu jelaskan alasan dengan detail yang spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

Exemplo: I like to write about my feelings because it helps me relax and understand myself better. Writing makes me feel comfortable and improves my mood.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan alasan yang logis dan mudah dipahami.

Exemplo: Yes, I think what I write might change because people grow and their opinions can be influenced by their surroundings over time.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda tidak jelas dan banyak pengulangan serta kata pengisi. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih singkat, jelas, dan terstruktur tanpa kata pengisi yang berlebihan.

Exemplo: I prefer handwriting because even though my handwriting is not perfect, writing in my journal makes me feel comfortable and helps me remember my daily experiences.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Jelaskan frekuensi dan alasan dengan kalimat yang jelas dan singkat, hindari pengulangan dan kata pengisi.

Exemplo: When I was young, I kept diaries regularly. I usually bought a new diary at the beginning of each year because I believe it symbolizes new hope.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda tidak jelas dan sulit dipahami. Gunakan kalimat yang sederhana dan langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan metode lain yang Anda gunakan untuk merekam kehidupan Anda.

Exemplo: Nowadays, I usually record my life by taking photos and remembering important moments because I don't have much time to write diaries.

× Yes, I'm writing a lot in a daily life because when I was young I have a lot of dreams.

✓ Yes, I write a lot in daily life because when I was young I had a lot of dreams.

The sentence mixes present continuous 'I'm writing' with a general statement about habits, which should use simple present 'I write'. Also, 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'when I was young'. 'A daily life' is incorrect; it should be 'daily life' without 'a'.

× One of the dream is being a writer and I'm always journaling and expressing my feeling.

✓ One of the dreams is being a writer and I'm always journaling and expressing my feelings.

'One of the dream' should be 'One of the dreams' because 'one of the' is followed by a plural noun. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to refer to multiple emotions.

× Every I have a blue feeling sad or madness.

✓ Every time I feel blue, sad, or mad.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Every I have a blue feeling sad or madness' is incorrect structure. It should be 'Every time I feel blue, sad, or mad' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Because when I was writing about my feeling, it really make me enjoy and rephrase things.

✓ Because when I was writing about my feelings, it really made me enjoy and rephrase things.

'Make' should be past tense 'made' to agree with 'was writing'. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings'.

× My brain and absolutely my feeling could be better after that.

✓ My brain and absolutely my feelings could be better after that.

'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to refer to multiple emotions.

× And also because writing always made me comfortable all the time.

✓ And also because writing always makes me comfortable all the time.

'Made' is past tense but the context suggests a habitual action, so 'makes' (present tense) is appropriate.

× Because when I was writing about my feeling, it really make me enjoy and rephrase things.

✓ Because when I write about my feelings, it really makes me enjoy and rephrase things.

The sentence should use simple present tense 'write' and 'makes' to express habitual action.

× If he says no in this pace, that would be change in the future when their principal may be influenced by their environment.

✓ If he says no in this phase, that would change in the future when their principle may be influenced by their environment.

'Pace' should be 'phase'. 'Change' should not have 'be' before it. 'Principal' should be 'principle' if referring to a fundamental truth. Also, 'their' is inconsistent with 'he' but context is unclear.

× If he says no in this pace, that would be change in the future when their principal may be influenced by their environment.

✓ If he says no in this phase, that would change in the future when his principles may be influenced by his environment.

Pronouns should be consistent: 'he' with 'his' instead of 'their'.

× I know my handwriting it's so bad, but I really love writing at the books with pants with my umm, journaling books all the time because it made me really, uh, comfortable and memorizing my uh, daily when I arrived.

✓ I know my handwriting is so bad, but I really love writing in books, especially my journaling books, all the time because it makes me really comfortable and helps me remember my day when I arrive.

'Writing at the books with pants' is incorrect; it should be 'writing in books'. 'Made' should be 'makes' for present habitual action. 'Memorizing my daily' is unclear; 'helps me remember my day' is clearer.

× But dear diary, it really mean to me.

✓ But dear diary, it really means a lot to me.

'Mean' should be 'means' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'mean to me' is incomplete; 'means a lot to me' is a common expression.

× When I was young, I'm always keep my Diaries, umm, often when the the year has changed, I'm always both the new Diaries because I believe that new dairies is a New Hope for the year.

✓ When I was young, I always kept my diaries. Often when the year changed, I always bought new diaries because I believe that new diaries are a new hope for the year.

'I'm always keep' is incorrect; should be past tense 'I always kept'. 'Both' should be 'bought'. 'Dairies' is misspelled; should be 'diaries'. 'Is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'diaries'.

× Umm, probably for the for the space. I don't care my Diaries because it's really not much time.

✓ Umm, probably because of the lack of time, I don't take care of my diaries because I really don't have much time.

'For the space' is unclear; likely means 'lack of time'. 'I don't care my Diaries' is incorrect; should be 'I don't take care of my diaries'. 'It's really not much time' is ungrammatical; 'I really don't have much time' is correct.

× If I'm a little me see this questions, she probably could answers his diary, her Diaries.

✓ If I were a little me and saw these questions, she probably could answer her diary, her diaries.

'If I'm a little me see this questions' is ungrammatical; should be 'If I were a little me and saw these questions'. 'Could answers' should be 'could answer'. Pronouns should be consistent: 'she' with 'her'.

× But for me in this age, it would uh, probably my eyes and my memorizings because I don't have many time to keep my Diaries.

✓ But for me at this age, it would probably be my eyes and my memory because I don't have much time to keep my diaries.

'In this age' should be 'at this age'. 'Memorizings' is incorrect; 'memory' is correct. 'Many time' should be 'much time'. 'Keep my Diaries' is acceptable but 'keep diaries' is more natural.