Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy, for example, 'I used to write a lot, but for the past three years, I have relied more on my phone than on paper.'

Exemplo: I used to write a lot, but for the past three years, I have relied more on my phone than on paper for writing.

Sugestão: Reduce filler words and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your reasons.

Exemplo: I like to write stories, novels, and daily notes because they help me express my emotions and relieve stress.

Sugestão: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, 'Yes, I believe my writing changes over time because as I learn more from life, it influences both my writing style and topics.'

Exemplo: Yes, I believe my writing changes over time because as I learn more from life, it influences both my writing style and topics.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Clearly state your preference and reasons using linking words. For example, 'I prefer handwriting because typing involves using digital devices, which I try to avoid.'

Exemplo: I prefer handwriting because typing involves using digital devices, which I try to avoid.

Sugestão: Clarify your answer and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your routine clearly. For example, 'I usually write in my diary on Fridays or Saturdays because weekends give me time to relax at home.'

Exemplo: I usually write in my diary on Fridays or Saturdays because weekends give me time to relax at home.

Sugestão: Reduce filler words and improve sentence clarity. Provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details. For example, 'Besides diaries, I record my life by writing poems and stories, which help me express my experiences creatively.'

Exemplo: Besides diaries, I record my life by writing poems and stories, which help me express my experiences creatively.

× I used to write a lot, but uh, since three years ago I quit writing since I, uh, rely on phone more than writing in the paper or anything else.

✓ I used to write a lot, but uh, since three years ago I quit writing because I, uh, relied on my phone more than writing on paper or anything else.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Rely' should be in past tense 'relied' to match 'quit' and the time frame 'since three years ago'. Also, 'in the paper' should be 'on paper' as the correct preposition for writing medium.

× I used to write a lot, but uh, since three years ago I quit writing since I, uh, rely on phone more than writing in the paper or anything else.

✓ I used to write a lot, but uh, since three years ago I quit writing because I, uh, relied on my phone more than writing on paper or anything else.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to writing on a medium; the correct preposition is 'on' as in 'writing on paper'. Also, 'phone' should be preceded by 'my' to specify possession.

× I used to write a lot, but uh, since three years ago I quit writing since I, uh, rely on phone more than writing in the paper or anything else.

✓ I used to write a lot, but uh, since three years ago I quit writing because I, uh, relied on my phone more than writing on paper or anything else.

The pronoun 'phone' needs a possessive determiner 'my' to indicate ownership. Without it, the sentence is incomplete and unclear.

× I like to write, uh, some story or novel or my daily notes, uh, because, uh, it's kind of things, uh, uh, or ways I uh, umm, express my emotion or my life stress.

✓ I like to write, uh, some stories or novels or my daily notes, uh, because, uh, they are kinds of things, uh, uh, or ways I uh, umm, express my emotions or my life stress.

The pronoun 'it's' is singular but refers to multiple items ('stories', 'novels', 'notes'), so it should be plural 'they are'. Also, 'some story or novel' should be plural 'some stories or novels' to match the plural context.

× I like to write, uh, some story or novel or my daily notes, uh, because, uh, it's kind of things, uh, uh, or ways I uh, umm, express my emotion or my life stress.

✓ I like to write, uh, some stories or novels or my daily notes, uh, because, uh, they are kinds of things, uh, uh, or ways I uh, umm, express my emotions or my life stress.

The nouns 'story' and 'novel' should be plural 'stories' and 'novels' to match 'some'. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to refer generally to feelings.

× I believe so. So the things I write, it will change daily or improving because every time you live in this life you learn more and more and this effect my writing and the topic I will write about.

✓ I believe so. So the things I write will change daily or improve because every time you live in this life you learn more and more and this affects my writing and the topics I write about.

The phrase 'it will change' is redundant with 'the things I write'; 'it' should be removed. 'Improving' should be 'improve' to parallel 'change'. 'Effect' is a noun; the verb form 'affects' is correct here. 'Topic' should be plural 'topics' to match 'things'.

× I believe so. So the things I write, it will change daily or improving because every time you live in this life you learn more and more and this effect my writing and the topic I will write about.

✓ I believe so. So the things I write will change daily or improve because every time you live in this life you learn more and more and this affects my writing and the topics I write about.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect because 'the things I write' is plural. Also, 'this effect' should be 'this affects' to correctly use the verb form.

× For this, uh, things nowadays, I would like to say I like to hand the writing because typing, uh, it's make me involved with the cell phone or, uh, computer or the digital things and I would like to avoid it more.

✓ For these things nowadays, I would like to say I like handwriting because typing, uh, it makes me involved with the cell phone or, uh, computer or digital things and I would like to avoid it more.

'For this, uh, things' is incorrect; 'these things' is correct for plural. 'Hand the writing' should be 'handwriting'. 'It's make' should be 'it makes' for subject-verb agreement. 'The digital things' should be 'digital things' without 'the'.

× For this, uh, things nowadays, I would like to say I like to hand the writing because typing, uh, it's make me involved with the cell phone or, uh, computer or the digital things and I would like to avoid it more.

✓ For these things nowadays, I would like to say I like handwriting because typing, uh, it makes me involved with the cell phone or, uh, computer or digital things and I would like to avoid it more.

The verb 'make' does not agree with the singular subject 'it'; it should be 'makes'.

× For this, uh, things nowadays, I would like to say I like to hand the writing because typing, uh, it's make me involved with the cell phone or, uh, computer or the digital things and I would like to avoid it more.

✓ For these things nowadays, I would like to say I like handwriting because typing, uh, it makes me involved with the cell phone or, uh, computer or digital things and I would like to avoid it more.

The phrase 'involved with' is awkward here; a better phrase might be 'distracted by' or 'too involved with'. However, 'involved with' is acceptable but 'the digital things' should omit 'the'.

× Weekly days, Friday or Saturday or Saturday, every time I write my diary or update it because it's the weekend and it's the chance to stay in my room.

✓ On weekdays, Friday or Saturday, I write my diary or update it because it's the weekend and it's a chance to stay in my room.

'Weekly days' is incorrect; 'on weekdays' or 'on weekends' is correct. Also, 'it's the chance' should be 'it's a chance' to indicate one of many opportunities.

× Weekly days, Friday or Saturday or Saturday, every time I write my diary or update it because it's the weekend and it's the chance to stay in my room.

✓ On Fridays or Saturdays, I write my diary or update it because it's the weekend and it's a chance to stay in my room.

Days of the week require the preposition 'on'. Also, 'Friday or Saturday or Saturday' is redundant; 'Fridays or Saturdays' is clearer.

× By re uh, writing poet or uh, story. This is uh, the way I used to, uh, record my life in this, uh, world.

✓ By rewriting poems or stories. This is, uh, the way I used to, uh, record my life in this, uh, world.

'By re uh, writing poet or uh, story' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'By rewriting poems or stories' to correctly express the method of recording life. 'Poet' is a person, 'poem' is the correct noun.