Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure subject-verb agreement. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: I don't write a lot on paper because I rarely find time for it. However, I enjoy writing journals on my phone app, which keeps me interested in writing.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and grammar, such as subject-verb agreement and plural forms. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about your interests.

Exemplo: I like to write random thoughts that come to my mind, especially about fantasy topics like dreams and emotions, because they help me understand human connections better.

Sugestão: Use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structures. Use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' to explain reasons. Be more specific about how your writing topics change.

Exemplo: Yes, the topics I write about change depending on my mood. For example, when I feel lonely, I tend to write about human life and emotions because they reflect my feelings.

Sugestão: Avoid informal phrases like 'I'm so lazy' and improve grammar. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and concisely.

Exemplo: Although I like handwriting, I prefer typing because it is more convenient and I can write on my phone anytime I want.

Sugestão: Use past and present tenses correctly and avoid redundancy. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

Exemplo: I used to keep diaries regularly when I was in 8th grade, which was a wonderful time for me. However, now I prefer typing journals on my phone instead.

Sugestão: Make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific examples.

Exemplo: In this technological era, I record my life by taking videos, photos, and reels. I also often record myself speaking to capture special moments.

× Not really, even if I'm a person who love to write, but, uh, I doesn't find any time to write with a paper or a pen rather than writing manually, I like to write journals within my journal app, uh, in my phone.

✓ Not really, even if I'm a person who loves to write, but, uh, I don't find any time to write with a paper or a pen rather than writing manually, I like to write journals within my journal app, uh, in my phone.

The verbs 'love' and 'doesn't' are incorrectly used with the first person subject 'I'. For third person singular, 'love' should be 'loves' when referring to 'a person who'. Also, 'doesn't' is incorrect with 'I'; it should be 'don't'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue with third person singular and first person singular subjects.

× Like I'm more interested in fantasy like dreams, or about the emotions we have and what makes us connect to other people. So especially I like that kinds of thing.

✓ Like I'm more interested in fantasy like dreams, or about the emotions we have and what makes us connect to other people. So especially I like those kinds of things.

The phrase 'that kinds of thing' is incorrect because 'kinds' is plural and should be matched with 'those' and 'things' to maintain singular/plural agreement. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Yes, I never focuses on a particular subject rather than I have alternative subjects every now and then according to my mood.

✓ Yes, I never focus on a particular subject rather than I have alternative subjects every now and then according to my mood.

The verb 'focuses' is incorrectly used with the first person singular subject 'I'. It should be 'focus' to agree with the subject. This is a present tense subject-verb agreement issue.

× If I am sitting somewhere lonely or in a solo mood, I would more be interested in writing topics related to human life and their emergence and other things.

✓ If I am sitting somewhere lonely or in a solo mood, I would be more interested in writing topics related to human life and their emergence and other things.

The adverb 'more' is incorrectly placed between the modal verb 'would' and the main verb 'be'. The correct placement is 'would be more interested'. This is an incorrect adverb placement issue.

× I'm a person who usually likes my handwriting but I'm so lazy that I not take a paper and pen to write, so I just prefer to type and that makes me more comfortable so I can type in my phone whenever I want.

✓ I'm a person who usually likes my handwriting but I'm so lazy that I do not take a paper and pen to write, so I just prefer to type and that makes me more comfortable so I can type on my phone whenever I want.

The phrase 'I not take' is incorrect; it should be 'I do not take' to form the negative. Also, the preposition 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone' when referring to typing on a device. This involves incorrect use of pronouns and prepositions.

× Yeah, I had a habit of writing there even I was in 8th standard and I really like those days whenever I memorize it because that time was really like a fantasy period of my life.

✓ Yeah, I had a habit of writing there even when I was in 8th standard and I really like those days whenever I remember them because that time was really like a fantasy period of my life.

The phrase 'whenever I memorize it' is incorrect; 'memorize' means to commit to memory, but the intended meaning is 'remember'. Also, 'even I was' should be 'even when I was' for correct conjunction use. This is a past tense and incorrect conjunction use issue.

× But nowadays I'm not writing any Diaries and I'm only typing journals in my phone only.

✓ But nowadays I'm not writing any diaries and I'm only typing journals on my phone.

'Diaries' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. Also, 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone'. The word 'only' is repeated unnecessarily. This is a singular/plural and preposition use issue.

× So in this new era of technology, there are many ways by which we could record our special moments, either by taking a video or a snap or a reel would really help.

✓ So in this new era of technology, there are many ways by which we can record our special moments, either by taking a video, a snap, or a reel, which would really help.

The modal verb 'could' is less appropriate here than 'can' for general ability. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; adding commas and 'which' clarifies meaning. This is a modal verb usage and sentence structure issue.

× And I'm a person who would love to do all of these things. And also I often record videos and I often record my own speaking.

✓ And I'm a person who loves to do all of these things. Also, I often record videos and my own speaking.

The phrase 'would love' suggests conditional mood, but the context is habitual action, so 'loves' is better. Repetition of 'I often record' is redundant. This is a present tense and sentence structure issue.