Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答中存在较多口语填充词（如"uh"），影响流畅性。建议减少重复和填充词，句子结构应更简洁自然，避免语法错误。

Exemplo: Yes, I write a lot because my major is translation. Every semester, I have to write about six or seven essays and reports on the books I read.

Sugestão: 回答中表达不够连贯，句子结构混乱，词汇使用不准确。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并注意语法和词汇的准确性。

Exemplo: Besides my assignments, I like to write articles about my favorite artists and songs because I am a big music fan. I want to introduce foreign singers to Chinese audiences to broaden their horizons.

Sugestão: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，词汇使用不准确。建议加强语法练习，使用更准确的词汇，并使句子更简洁明了。

Exemplo: Yes, my writing changes as I gain more life experience. In the past, I focused on simple topics, but now I like to explore deeper ideas and share them with my audience.

Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和重复填充词，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，减少填充词，注意时态和主谓一致。

Exemplo: I used to prefer handwriting because schools didn't allow electronic devices. But now, as a university student, I mostly type my articles because it's more convenient to carry a laptop.

Sugestão: 回答中语法和表达不准确，词汇使用错误（如"take a diary"应为"keep a diary"），建议加强基本表达和词汇准确性。

Exemplo: I don't keep a diary regularly, but I write in it when something important happens. For example, after my solo trip to Busan last month, I wrote a journal about the experience.

Sugestão: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，词汇使用不当。建议加强语法基础，使用正确的时态和词汇，句子应更简洁连贯。

Exemplo: I usually record my life by taking photos. For example, when I go out with friends, I use Snapchat to take pictures and then post them on my WeChat Moments so I can remember those events.

× So yes, uh, every semester I will write about 6 to the 7th uh, as it is each semester.

✓ So yes, uh, every semester I will write about 6 to 7 essays each semester.

这里“6 to the 7th”用法不正确，应该用“6 to 7”表示数量范围，且“essays”应为复数形式。数字范围表达时不需要序数词。

× Even though I have to finish the task that's assigned by the professor, but that in spree time I will also write some articles about my favorite artists and my favorite songs.

✓ Even though I have to finish the tasks assigned by the professor, in my spare time I also write some articles about my favorite artists and songs.

“Even though”与“but”不能同时使用，二者都是转折连词，使用其中一个即可。

× Even though I have to finish the task that's assigned by the professor, but that in spree time I will also write some articles about my favorite artists and my favorite songs.

✓ Even though I have to finish the tasks assigned by the professor, in my spare time I also write some articles about my favorite artists and songs.

“task”应为复数“tasks”，因为教授布置了多个任务。

× So I want to just introduce different foreign singers to Chinese student to Chinese audience to them.

✓ So I want to just introduce different foreign singers to Chinese students and Chinese audiences.

“to Chinese student to Chinese audience to them”结构混乱，应该用复数形式“students”和“audiences”，并用“and”连接。

× Maybe in the past I will just focus on some facial question, but now I would like to think deeper on this topic, so I will just introduce some elaborating ideas to my audience.

✓ Maybe in the past I just focused on some facial questions, but now I would like to think more deeply on this topic, so I will introduce some elaborated ideas to my audience.

过去时间应使用过去时态“focused”，且“facial question”应为复数“facial questions”。“think deeper”应改为副词形式“think more deeply”。“elaborating ideas”应改为形容词形式“elaborated ideas”。

× Maybe in the past I get used to handwriting because school don't allow students to uh, use their electronic devices when they are learning.

✓ Maybe in the past I got used to handwriting because school didn't allow students to use their electronic devices when they were learning.

过去习惯应使用过去时态“got used to”。“school don't allow”主语是单数，谓语应为“doesn't allow”，但这里改为过去时“didn't allow”。

× But nowadays, umm, uh, university student, I can, uh, mostly I will just type on my keyboard to the right an article because they were more convenient.

✓ But nowadays, as a university student, I mostly just type on my keyboard to write an article because they are more convenient.

“university student”前应加冠词“a”。“to the right an article”应为“to write an article”。“they were”时态错误，应为“they are”。

× Actually, I don't have a regular routine to take a diary, just once something very important habit, I will just quickly write down my diary book.

✓ Actually, I don't have a regular routine to keep a diary, but when something very important happens, I will quickly write in my diary.

“take a diary”用法错误，正确表达是“keep a diary”。“just once something very important habit”结构不通顺，应改为“but when something very important happens”。“write down my diary book”应改为“write in my diary”。

× Then when I went back I will just directly, uh, write some berries or journals about the trip.

✓ Then when I went back, I just directly wrote some diaries or journals about the trip.

前半句是过去时，后半句应保持时态一致，使用过去时“wrote”。“berries”应为“diaries”。

× Mostly I was just simply take the photo of that moment.

✓ Mostly I just simply take photos of that moment.

“was just simply take”时态和结构错误，应为“just simply take”。

× if I want, if I go to hub Bob with my friend, I would directly just, uh, use the Snapchat to, uh, take the short photos of that moment.

✓ If I go to Hub Bob with my friend, I would directly use Snapchat to take short photos of that moment.

“use the Snapchat”中“the”不需要，且“short photos”更自然。

× Then that will never forgot this event.

✓ Then I will never forget this event.

“that will never forgot”语法错误，应为“I will never forget”。