Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, using correct tense and sentence structure. Avoid unnecessary words and focus on the main idea.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to write a lot when I was in school. I often wrote essays and notes in my notebook.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to organize your ideas with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: I like to write about my daily life and personal experiences because it helps me remember important moments from both the past and present.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Use clear and concise sentences with appropriate linking words to explain your ideas logically.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe what I write will change over time because I have gained more knowledge about foreign countries compared to the past.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but repetitive. Use varied vocabulary and linking words to make your response more natural and effective.

Exemplo: I mostly prefer handwriting rather than typing because I feel more comfortable and connected to my thoughts when I write by hand.

Sugestão: Try to avoid filler words and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: I usually carry my diary with me when I go out because I feel comfortable writing about the events that happen in my life.

Sugestão: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Provide a direct response and explain your preference with specific reasons, using linking words for clarity.

Exemplo: I prefer writing to record my life experiences because it helps me remember details better than other methods.

× Yes, IRA writer Lord when I was in the school at that time, I write too much essays and the topics on in my notebook.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot of essays and topics in my notebook when I was in school at that time.

The sentence incorrectly uses the present tense 'write' instead of the past tense 'wrote' to describe past actions. Also, 'too much essays' should be 'a lot of essays' because 'essays' is countable. Use past tense to match the time frame indicated by 'when I was in school'.

× Yes, IRA writer Lord when I was in the school at that time, I write too much essays and the topics on in my notebook.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot of essays and topics in my notebook when I was in school at that time.

The phrase 'the topics on in my notebook' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' to indicate location inside the notebook. Also, 'in the school' is better as 'in school' when referring to attending school generally.

× I love to write a topic like related to my life and my experience the whole day, so that's why it is a very memorable for me what is happening in the my in the past and in my present days.

✓ I love to write topics related to my life and my experiences throughout the day, so that's why it is very memorable for me what has happened in my past and in my present days.

The phrase 'a topic like related to' is incorrect; it should be 'topics related to'. Also, 'the whole day' is better expressed as 'throughout the day'. The phrase 'in the my in the past' is incorrect; it should be 'in my past'. The verb tense should be present perfect 'has happened' to connect past events to the present.

× I love to write a topic like related to my life and my experience the whole day, so that's why it is a very memorable for me what is happening in the my in the past and in my present days.

✓ I love to write topics related to my life and my experiences throughout the day, so that's why it is very memorable for me what has happened in my past and in my present days.

The phrase 'what is happening in the my in the past' incorrectly uses present tense 'is happening' for past events. The past perfect or present perfect tense 'has happened' is appropriate to describe past experiences relevant to the present.

× Yes, I think that umm, uh, my things will be a change as compared to the past, uh, in the past, I have no more knowledge about the foreign countries, but now I have a lot of knowledge about the foreign countries.

✓ Yes, I think that my things will change compared to the past. In the past, I did not have much knowledge about foreign countries, but now I have a lot of knowledge about them.

The phrase 'will be a change' is awkward; 'will change' is more natural. Also, 'I have no more knowledge' is incorrect; the past tense 'did not have much knowledge' fits better. Modal verb 'will' is correctly used to indicate future change, but the sentence structure needs improvement.

× Yes, I think that umm, uh, my things will be a change as compared to the past, uh, in the past, I have no more knowledge about the foreign countries, but now I have a lot of knowledge about the foreign countries.

✓ Yes, I think that my things will change compared to the past. In the past, I did not have much knowledge about foreign countries, but now I have a lot of knowledge about them.

The phrase 'as compared to the past' is better expressed as 'compared to the past'. Also, 'knowledge about the foreign countries' is better as 'knowledge about foreign countries' without 'the'.

× I mostly prefer writing by hand as compared to the typing.

✓ I mostly prefer writing by hand compared to typing.

The phrase 'as compared to the typing' is incorrect. It should be 'compared to typing' without 'the' before 'typing'.

× When I write, I feel very comfortable as compared to the typing on the computer.

✓ When I write, I feel very comfortable compared to typing on the computer.

The phrase 'as compared to the typing' is incorrect. It should be 'compared to typing' without 'the'.

× I mostly carry my diary with me when I go to the outside, uh, because I feel comfortable, uh, with my own diary because I write, uh, many things, uh, in uh, which is happen in my life on, on the diary.

✓ I mostly carry my diary with me when I go outside because I feel comfortable with my own diary since I write many things in it about what happens in my life.

The phrase 'go to the outside' is incorrect; it should be 'go outside'. Also, 'in uh, which is happen in my life on, on the diary' is ungrammatical; it should be 'in it about what happens in my life'. Prepositions and sentence structure need correction.

× I mostly prefer to write the things which was happening in the my life, so that's why this is the way where I can where this is the best way to record my life experience.

✓ I mostly prefer to write about the things that are happening in my life, so that's why this is the best way for me to record my life experiences.

The phrase 'which was happening' is incorrect because the student is referring to current or ongoing events; present tense 'are happening' is appropriate. Also, 'in the my life' should be 'in my life'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.