Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear due to some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your response more concise and directly answer the question with clear sentence structure. Avoid unnecessary repetition and ensure subject-verb agreement.

Exemplo: I don't write a lot currently because I am not studying. However, as a teacher, I sometimes write assignments or follow up on activities.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and redundant phrases such as 'like write it down'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I enjoy writing in my diary because it helps me record my daily activities. When I have an eventful day, I like to note down the details for future reference.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by using more formal language and avoiding casual words like 'Yeah'. Also, try to add a linking word to connect your ideas better.

Exemplo: Definitely, as we grow older, our perspectives and expression styles change. Therefore, I believe my writing will evolve in the future.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and somewhat repetitive. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to contrast your preferences clearly and keep your sentences concise.

Exemplo: It depends on the situation. For quick notes during lectures, I prefer handwriting because it's faster. However, for longer writing tasks, I prefer typing on a laptop.

Sugestão: Your answer is good and clear. To improve, try to use linking words like 'however' to connect contrasting ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases.

Exemplo: I don't write in my diary very often now. However, when something special happens, I record it so I can cherish those memories later.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by combining sentences for better flow and avoiding repetition of similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

Exemplo: In today's modern world, I prefer recording my life through photographs and videos. This way, I can look back and cherish those memories whenever I want.

× When I don't think that I write a lot because now I am not in a academic curriculum where I have to study and do my task, so I don't have to write a lot.

✓ I don't think that I write a lot because now I am not in an academic curriculum where I have to study and do my tasks, so I don't have to write a lot.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'When' at the beginning, which is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'a academic' should be 'an academic' because 'academic' starts with a vowel sound. 'Task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context. The sentence should start directly with 'I don't think' to correctly express the present tense opinion.

× When I don't think that I write a lot because now I am not in a academic curriculum where I have to study and do my task, so I don't have to write a lot.

✓ I don't think that I write a lot because now I am not in an academic curriculum where I have to study and do my tasks, so I don't have to write a lot.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the word 'academic' which starts with a vowel sound. The correct article is 'an'. This is a common article usage rule in English to ensure smooth pronunciation.

× When I don't think that I write a lot because now I am not in a academic curriculum where I have to study and do my task, so I don't have to write a lot.

✓ I don't think that I write a lot because now I am not in an academic curriculum where I have to study and do my tasks, so I don't have to write a lot.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because it refers to multiple assignments or duties. Using the plural form matches the context of ongoing or multiple tasks.

× I have a passion of writing diary and I like to jot everything down that I have done in a day.

✓ I have a passion for writing a diary and I like to jot everything down that I have done in a day.

The phrase 'passion of writing diary' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'passion for'. Also, 'writing diary' should be 'writing a diary' to specify the object. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I have a passion of writing diary and I like to jot everything down that I have done in a day.

✓ I have a passion for writing a diary and I like to jot everything down that I have done in a day.

The noun 'diary' requires the indefinite article 'a' when referring to a single diary. Omitting the article makes the sentence grammatically incorrect.

× If that day is very active and I have done something crazy, I would really like to like write it down for future reference.

✓ If that day is very active and I have done something crazy, I would really like to write it down for future reference.

The phrase 'like to like write' contains a redundant 'like'. Removing the extra 'like' corrects the sentence. Also, 'future reference' is correct without an article here.

× Umm, I really like diary entry.

✓ Umm, I really like diary entries.

'Diary entry' should be plural 'diary entries' to express a general liking for such entries. Also, no article is needed when speaking generally about plural countable nouns.

× Yeah, definitely. As we grow older, our perspective and our way of expressing things change vividly.

✓ Yeah, definitely. As we grow older, our perspective and our way of expressing things change vividly.

No correction needed here as the verb forms and usage are correct.

× So I completely agree that in future my way of expressing and writing the things would change.

✓ So I completely agree that in the future my way of expressing and writing things will change.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'would change' is better replaced with 'will change' to express a definite future event. 'The things' is better as 'things' without 'the' for general reference.

× So I completely agree that in future my way of expressing and writing the things would change.

✓ So I completely agree that in the future my way of expressing and writing things will change.

The phrase 'in future' requires the definite article 'the' to become 'in the future'. This is the correct idiomatic expression in English.

× Well, it really depends upon the circumstances. If I have a pen in my hand, I would prefer writing or if I have to make quick notes or somebody is delivering A lecture, I prefer writing with pen and paper and on the paper because opening the laptop and making notes is quite difficult.

✓ Well, it really depends upon the circumstances. If I have a pen in my hand, I prefer writing, or if I have to make quick notes or somebody is delivering a lecture, I prefer writing with pen and paper because opening the laptop and making notes is quite difficult.

The modal verb 'would prefer' is better replaced with 'prefer' to express habitual preference. Also, 'A lecture' should be 'a lecture' with lowercase 'a'. The phrase 'and on the paper' is redundant and removed for clarity.

× If I have a pen in my hand, I would prefer writing or if I have to make quick notes or somebody is delivering A lecture, I prefer writing with pen and paper and on the paper because opening the laptop and making notes is quite difficult.

✓ If I have a pen in my hand, I prefer writing, or if I have to make quick notes or somebody is delivering a lecture, I prefer writing with pen and paper because opening the laptop and making notes is quite difficult.

The article 'A' before 'lecture' should be lowercase 'a' as it is in the middle of the sentence. Also, 'and on the paper' is unnecessary and can be omitted for better sentence flow.

× Now, as I have grown up, I don't write very often, but if something happens in my life which I would like to cherish in the future, I write it down in my diary so that whenever I read it after a long time, I would feel relaxed and happy about that moment.

✓ Now, as I have grown up, I don't write very often, but if something happens in my life which I would like to cherish in the future, I write it down in my diary so that whenever I read it after a long time, I feel relaxed and happy about that moment.

The modal 'would feel' is better replaced with 'feel' to express a habitual or general truth in the present tense. This makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Now we are living in a modern world and everything is on social media.

✓ Now we are living in a modern world and everything is on social media.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I really like to record my life through photographs and videos so that whenever I would see those photos, I will feel nostalgic and would like to recreate those memories.

✓ I really like to record my life through photographs and videos so that whenever I see those photos, I feel nostalgic and would like to recreate those memories.

The use of 'would see' and 'would like' is incorrect here. 'Whenever' indicates a habitual action, so simple present tense 'see' and 'feel' should be used. 'Would like' is correct to express desire.