Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけ、冗長な部分を避けましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, I write occasionally, mostly short notes or emails to my colleagues at work. Also, I practice writing in English to improve my skills.

Sugestão: 答えが途中で途切れており、内容が不十分です。理由を明確に述べ、具体的な説明を加えると良いでしょう。

Exemplo: I like to write messages to my daughter because she is 13 and sometimes feels nervous or anxious. Writing helps me encourage and support her.

Sugestão: 回答が不明瞭で文法的に誤りがあります。質問に直接答え、過去と現在の違いを明確に説明しましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, the things I write have changed. When I was in elementary school, I practiced writing kanji characters, but now I rarely write by hand.

Sugestão: 内容は伝わりますが、文が途切れたり不自然な部分があります。理由を整理して、より流暢に話す練習をしましょう。

Exemplo: I prefer typing because it is easier to edit and correct mistakes. Also, typed documents are less likely to be lost compared to handwritten ones.

Sugestão: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去と現在の習慣の違いを明確に述べましょう。

Exemplo: I don't keep a diary now. When I was young, I sometimes wrote diaries, but as an adult, I have no time to write regularly.

Sugestão: 文が不完全で意味が伝わりにくいです。写真を使う理由を明確にし、具体的な説明を加えましょう。

Exemplo: I use photography to record my life because photos capture memories from when my children were young. Looking at pictures helps me remember their voices and moments.

× Sometimes, yes I do 'cause sometimes I write them just memoir for my colleague in my office or I'm I've been learning English. So using writing, use writing.

✓ Sometimes, yes I do because sometimes I write just memoirs for my colleagues in my office or I've been learning English, so I use writing.

The phrase 'using writing, use writing' is incorrect; it should be 'I use writing' to express the action properly. Also, 'memoir' should be plural 'memoirs' to match the context, and 'colleague' should be plural 'colleagues' to agree with 'memoirs'.

× Sometimes, yes I do 'cause sometimes I write them just memoir for my colleague in my office or I'm I've been learning English. So using writing, use writing.

✓ Sometimes, yes I do because sometimes I write just memoirs for my colleagues in my office or I've been learning English, so I use writing.

The word 'memoir' should be plural 'memoirs' because it refers to multiple writings. Similarly, 'colleague' should be plural 'colleagues' to match the plural context.

× I would like to write some message for my daughter because she's she's already 13 and feeling nervous or sometimes anxious or. Hmm.

✓ I would like to write some messages for my daughter because she's already 13 and sometimes feels nervous or anxious.

The verb 'feeling' should be 'feels' to agree with the third person singular subject 'she'. Also, 'some message' should be 'some messages' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, when I was in elementary school, I I practiced practiced to to write the the letter kanji, but now I didn't I.

✓ Yes, when I was in elementary school, I practiced writing kanji letters, but now I don't.

The phrase 'practiced to to write the the letter kanji' is incorrect; 'practiced writing kanji letters' is correct. Also, 'didn't I' is incorrect here; it should be 'don't' to indicate present tense.

× Yes, when I was in elementary school, I I practiced practiced to to write the the letter kanji, but now I didn't I.

✓ Yes, when I was in elementary school, I practiced writing kanji letters, but now I don't.

The phrase 'didn't I' is incorrect for present tense; 'don't' is appropriate to express current habit.

× I prefer typing because. It's easier for me to type it, I can delete easily and write again and it's not lost. But writing paper?

✓ I prefer typing because it's easier for me to type; I can delete easily and write again, and it's not lost. But writing on paper?

The phrase 'writing paper' should be 'writing on paper' to correctly use the preposition indicating the medium.

× When I was young I sometimes keep Diaries, but grown up I forget to writing. There's no time for me.

✓ When I was young, I sometimes kept diaries, but as I grew up, I forgot to write. There's no time for me.

'Diaries' should be lowercase unless at the start of a sentence. 'Keep' should be past tense 'kept' to match 'when I was young'. 'Forget to writing' is incorrect; it should be 'forgot to write'. 'Grown up' should be 'as I grew up' for correct expression.

× When I was young I sometimes keep Diaries, but grown up I forget to writing. There's no time for me.

✓ When I was young, I sometimes kept diaries, but as I grew up, I forgot to write. There's no time for me.

The verbs 'keep' and 'forget' should be in past tense 'kept' and 'forgot' to match the past time frame 'when I was young' and 'as I grew up'.

× It is taking picture for me because the photograph remained as the young days, especially my child, and I recalled their voice. It's very.

✓ Taking pictures is important for me because photographs remain from my younger days, especially of my child, and I recall their voice. It's very meaningful.

'Taking picture for me' is incorrect; it should be 'Taking pictures is important for me'. 'Photograph remained as the young days' is incorrect; 'photographs remain from my younger days' is correct. 'I recalled their voice' should be 'I recall their voice' to maintain present tense. Added 'meaningful' to complete the sentence.