Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat clear but lacks fluency and natural phrasing. Avoid filler words like 'UMM' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: No, I don't write much these days. Since graduating from high school, I haven't had many opportunities to write because I focus mainly on Fine Arts. I usually express myself through drawing rather than writing.

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains hesitations. Try to organise your ideas more clearly and use linking words to make your response coherent. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more specific about what you write and why.

Exemplo: Although I don't write often, I like to jot down notes about inspirations I get, especially when I visit art museums. I usually record these ideas on my phone so I can remember them later.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to avoid informal or negative expressions like 'cringe' and 'stupid'. Use linking words to explain your ideas logically and complete your sentences fully.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. When I look back at my old notes, I often find them immature and amusing. As I grow and mature, my thoughts and writing style naturally change.

Sugestão: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to organise your response clearly, use correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Use linking words to contrast your preferences effectively.

Exemplo: It depends on the situation. For efficiency, I usually type lists and plans on my phone. However, when I write diaries or poetry, I prefer handwriting in my notebook because it feels more personal.

× No I don't. Since I graduated from high school I don't have much chances to write UMM because I'm studying Fine Arts.

✓ No I don't. Since I graduated from high school I haven't had many chances to write UMM because I'm studying Fine Arts.

The phrase 'much chances' is incorrect because 'chances' is a countable noun and should be used with 'many' instead of 'much'. Also, the tense should reflect the period from graduation until now, so 'haven't had' is more appropriate than 'don't have'.

× I do draw but I don't write so haven't.

✓ I do draw but I don't write, so I haven't.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' before 'haven't'. Also, the phrase 'so haven't' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'so I haven't' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, since I said I don't really write much these days, so the only thing I will write is to, uh, write some notes of the inspiration that I get that I thought of or from the Art Museum I recorded in my phone to write it down.

✓ Yes, since I said I don't really write much these days, the only thing I write is some notes of inspiration that I get or think of, or from the Art Museum, which I record on my phone to write down.

The original sentence is overly long and contains redundant conjunctions ('since' and 'so'). The phrase 'the only thing I will write is to, uh, write' is awkward and repetitive. Also, 'I recorded in my phone' should be 'I record on my phone' to match the present tense context. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Sometimes I I look at those notes I write before I find it very cringe and awkward to sometimes laugh at myself to those stupid immature ideas.

✓ Sometimes when I look at the notes I wrote before, I find them very cringe and awkward and sometimes laugh at myself for those stupid immature ideas.

The verb tense 'write' should be past tense 'wrote' to refer to notes written in the past. Also, 'I find it very cringe' should be 'I find them very cringe' because 'notes' is plural. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× So through growing and become more mature I will.

✓ So through growing and becoming more mature, I will.

The verb 'become' should be in the '-ing' form 'becoming' to parallel 'growing'. The sentence is incomplete and needs a clearer ending, but based on the original, this correction addresses the grammatical issue.

× Ah it depends if IA focus on efficiency I normally like writing plants and list.

✓ Ah, it depends. If I focus on efficiency, I normally like writing plans and lists.

The sentence is missing punctuation and has a typo 'IA' instead of 'I'. Also, 'plants and list' should be 'plans and lists'. The preposition 'on' is correctly used with 'focus'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× But if I'm like writing Diaries I PR or poetry.

✓ But if I'm writing diaries, PR, or poetry,

The phrase 'I'm like writing Diaries I PR or poetry' is ungrammatical and unclear. It should be 'if I'm writing diaries, PR, or poetry,' to list the types of writing properly. 'Diaries' should not be capitalized unless at the start of a sentence.

× I prefer to writing handwriting on my notebook or something.

✓ I prefer handwriting in my notebook or something.

The phrase 'prefer to writing' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer writing' or simply 'prefer handwriting'. Also, 'on my notebook' should be 'in my notebook' because writing is done inside a notebook. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition and verb form usage.