Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use clear and concise sentences, and correct minor grammar mistakes. For example, instead of 'on the debt purpose', say 'for academic purposes'. Also, avoid repeating 'as' twice and use singular/plural forms correctly.

Exemplo: Yes, I write a lot because I am a college student and need to take detailed notes for my classes. Besides that, I enjoy writing poetry in my free time.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating information already mentioned. Use more natural phrasing and correct word forms, such as 'poetry' instead of 'poetries'. Also, try to add linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I like to write detailed notes for my studies because it helps me understand the material better. Additionally, I have enjoyed writing poetry since I was a child because it allows me to express my feelings creatively.

Sugestão: Focus on clear sentence structure and grammar. Use appropriate linking words like 'however' or 'nowadays' to contrast past and present. Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'Has technology definition the world?'.

Exemplo: Technology has definitely changed the way we write. When I was in school, we used handwritten notes, but nowadays, most students prefer electronic notes because they are more convenient and easier to organize.

Sugestão: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons clearly. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'one of them that who prefer' to 'one of those who prefer'.

Exemplo: I prefer typing because it is more convenient than handwriting. It saves me time and helps me write faster.

× Definitely as as I am a college student and I have to make my notes.

✓ Definitely, as I am a college student and I have to make my notes.

The phrase 'as as' is a repetition error. Removing the extra 'as' corrects the sentence. Also, a comma after 'Definitely' improves clarity.

× So on the debt purpose I have to write a lot.

✓ So for that purpose, I have to write a lot.

The phrase 'on the debt purpose' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'for' and the word should be 'that' instead of 'debt'. This clarifies the intended meaning.

× Apart from it, I also love to write some poetries.

✓ Apart from it, I also love to write some poetry.

The word 'poetry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Using 'poetries' is incorrect.

× Apart from it, I am also good at writing poetries and I used to do this from my childhood.

✓ Apart from it, I am also good at writing poetry and I have been doing this since my childhood.

Again, 'poetries' is incorrect; 'poetry' is uncountable. Also, 'used to do this from my childhood' is awkward; 'have been doing this since my childhood' is more appropriate to express continuous action from past to present.

× Has technology definition the world?

✓ Has technology changed the world?

The sentence is ungrammatical. 'Definition' is a noun and does not fit here. The correct verb is 'changed' to ask if technology has altered the world.

× When I was in my school at that time we used to write.

✓ When I was in school, we used to write.

The phrase 'in my school at that time' is redundant and awkward. 'In school' suffices. Also, 'used to write' is correct for past habitual action.

× We used to have a handwritten notes.

✓ We used to have handwritten notes.

'Notes' is plural, so the article 'a' should be removed. 'Handwritten' is an adjective describing 'notes'.

× Whereas nowadays most of the students prefer enotes which is far convenient or easier for them.

✓ Whereas nowadays most students prefer e-notes, which are far more convenient and easier for them.

'Enotes' should be 'e-notes' for clarity. 'Which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'e-notes'. Also, 'far convenient' is incorrect; it should be 'far more convenient'.

× I prefer typing while writing as I already mentioned that it is far convenient as compared with the handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing while writing, as I already mentioned that it is far more convenient compared to handwriting.

'Far convenient' is incorrect; it should be 'far more convenient'. Also, 'compared with the handwriting' is better as 'compared to handwriting' without 'the'.

× I am also one of them that who prefer typing so it also saves my time and makes my speed better.

✓ I am also one of those who prefer typing, so it also saves me time and improves my speed.

'One of them that who' is incorrect; it should be 'one of those who'. 'Saves my time' should be 'saves me time'. 'Makes my speed better' is better expressed as 'improves my speed'.