Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子并注意时态和冠词的使用，使表达更自然流畅。

Exemplo: I don't write a lot because my major involves using computer applications like 3D printers, so I rarely need to write essays. Instead, I use the computer more often.

Sugestão: 表达不够清晰，词汇使用不准确，建议使用更恰当的词汇和句式，注意时态和单复数，使内容更具体。

Exemplo: If I need to write something, I like to write diaries because they record my emotions and daily events, and I can easily look back on them later.

Sugestão: 回答较为简洁，但句子连接不够自然，建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，同时注意介词和冠词的正确使用。

Exemplo: Yes, currently I write more essays for my homework, but if I have a job, I think I will write more reports or weekly summaries.

Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，建议注意时态一致性和句子完整性，避免断句，提升表达的连贯性。

Exemplo: I prefer typing because it is faster and more convenient than handwriting, especially for long texts like essays or emails. Typing also allows me to easily edit and organize my thoughts.

× I don't write a lot cause on my major use more computer apps like 3D printers and we don't need to write too much essays so I use computer a lot.

✓ I don't write a lot because in my major we use more computer apps like 3D printers and we don't need to write too many essays so I use the computer a lot.

这里“cause”应改为“because”表示原因；“on my major”应改为“in my major”，表示在某个专业领域；“too much essays”应改为“too many essays”，因为“essays”是可数名词；“use computer a lot”应改为“use the computer a lot”，加上定冠词。

× I don't write a lot cause on my major use more computer apps like 3D printers and we don't need to write too much essays so I use computer a lot.

✓ I don't write a lot because in my major we use more computer apps like 3D printers and we don't need to write too many essays so I use the computer a lot.

“too much essays”中“essays”为可数名词，应该用“too many”而不是“too much”。

× I don't write a lot cause on my major use more computer apps like 3D printers and we don't need to write too much essays so I use computer a lot.

✓ I don't write a lot because in my major we use more computer apps like 3D printers and we don't need to write too many essays, so I use the computer a lot.

句子缺少主语“we”在“use more computer apps”前，且句子较长应使用逗号分隔，改善句子结构。

× If I need to write something, I would like to write some Diaries because that record my mention emotions and the things happened on me and I can easily look back if I want to.

✓ If I need to write something, I would like to write some diaries because they record my emotions and the things that happened to me, and I can easily look back if I want to.

“Diaries”不应大写；“that”应改为“they”指代复数“diaries”；“mention emotions”应改为“my emotions”；“the things happened on me”应改为“the things that happened to me”。

× If I need to write something, I would like to write some Diaries because that record my mention emotions and the things happened on me and I can easily look back if I want to.

✓ If I need to write something, I would like to write some diaries because they record my emotions and the things that happened to me, and I can easily look back if I want to.

“happened on me”应改为“happened to me”，正确使用介词。

× If I need to write something, I would like to write some Diaries because that record my mention emotions and the things happened on me and I can easily look back if I want to.

✓ If I need to write something, I would like to write some diaries because they record my emotions and the things that happened to me, and I can easily look back if I want to.

“happened”是过去式，使用正确，无需改动。

× Yeah, actually now I write more about my homework, like essays, but if I have a job I think I may write more reports on or some weekly summary.

✓ Yeah, actually now I write more about my homework, like essays, but if I have a job I think I may write more reports or some weekly summaries.

“reports on or some weekly summary”中“on”多余，应去掉；“summary”应为复数“summaries”与“reports”保持一致。

× Yeah, actually now I write more about my homework, like essays, but if I have a job I think I may write more reports on or some weekly summary.

✓ Yeah, actually now I write more about my homework, like essays, but if I have a job I think I may write more reports or some weekly summaries.

“weekly summary”应改为复数“weekly summaries”，与“reports”保持一致。

× I prefer typing when I am writing because it's much faster and more convenient than handwriting, especially for long tests. For example when I was access or emails. Typing allow me to edit and organize my thoughts.

✓ I prefer typing when I am writing because it's much faster and more convenient than handwriting, especially for long texts. For example, when I was accessing emails. Typing allows me to edit and organize my thoughts.

“long tests”应为“long texts”；“when I was access or emails”应改为“when I was accessing emails”；“Typing allow”应为“Typing allows”，主谓一致。

× Typing allow me to edit and organize my thoughts.

✓ Typing allows me to edit and organize my thoughts.

主语“Typing”是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，改为“allows”。