Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用有误，建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，表达更自然。

Exemplo: Yes, I often write down interesting things on paper because it helps me feel relaxed.

Sugestão: 回答不连贯，语法错误较多，建议直接回答问题，说明写日记的原因，并使用连贯的句子。

Exemplo: I like to write in my diary because it is private and helps me express my thoughts without talking to others.

Sugestão: 回答内容混乱，表达不清，建议明确回答问题，说明写作内容会如何变化，并用简单明了的句子表达。

Exemplo: Yes, I think the things I write change over time because my thoughts and feelings develop.

Sugestão: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议使用正确的词汇和句型，清楚表达喜欢手写的原因。

Exemplo: I prefer handwriting because it helps me relax and I think writing on paper is a good habit.

× Yes, I use re write down some interesting things on paper be 'cause it can let me feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, I use rewriting to write down some interesting things on paper because it can let me feel relaxed.

这里're write'的用法不正确，应该使用动名词形式'rewriting'表示动作的进行。动词后接动名词表示习惯性动作或过程。

× Yes, I use re write down some interesting things on paper be 'cause it can let me feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, I use rewriting to write down some interesting things on paper because it can let me feel relaxed.

'on paper'是正确的介词搭配，'be 'cause'应改为'because'，以符合正式书面语。

× I'd like to write something, I don't want to talk. About with others. In my diary be 'cause I think is my strict.

✓ I'd like to write something; I don't want to talk about it with others. I write in my diary because I think it is my secret.

原句断句不当，导致语义不清。'About with others'应改为'talk about it with others'，'be 'cause'应为'because'，'strict'应为'secret'。需要调整句子结构使其通顺。

× I'd like to write something, I don't want to talk. About with others. In my diary be 'cause I think is my strict.

✓ I'd like to write something; I don't want to talk about it with others. I write in my diary because I think it is my secret.

缺少代词'it'，使句子不完整。正确使用代词可以使表达更清晰。

× I'd like to write something, I don't want to talk. About with others. In my diary be 'cause I think is my strict.

✓ I'd like to write something; I don't want to talk about it with others. I write in my diary because I think it is my secret.

'I think is my strict'缺少主语，应该是'it is my secret'，这里涉及到存在句的缺失。

× Sure. Well I where the ball something I always write down my Delray because I think it can it you know, I think this thing will become better and better.

✓ Sure. Well, whenever I feel bad, I always write down in my diary because I think it can help, you know. I think things will become better and better.

原句中'where the ball something'无意义，应为'whenever I feel bad'，'Delray'应为'diary'，代词使用混乱，需正确使用代词和词汇。

× Sure. Well I where the ball something I always write down my Delray because I think it can it you know, I think this thing will become better and better.

✓ Sure. Well, whenever I feel bad, I always write down in my diary because I think it can help, you know. I think things will become better and better.

'write down my Delray'缺少介词'in'，正确表达应为'write down in my diary'。

× Sure. Well I where the ball something I always write down my Delray because I think it can it you know, I think this thing will become better and better.

✓ Sure. Well, whenever I feel bad, I always write down in my diary because I think it can help, you know. I think things will become better and better.

'it can it'重复使用代词，语法错误，应删除多余的'it'。

× I prefer had writing. The cause I seeing her writing can. Let me feel very relaxed and I seeing write down something on the paper is a good habit.

✓ I prefer handwriting because seeing her writing can let me feel very relaxed, and I think writing down something on paper is a good habit.

'had writing'应为'handwriting'，'The cause'应为'because'，'I seeing her writing'应为'seeing her writing'，'I seeing write down'应为'I think writing down'，形容词和副词使用错误。

× I prefer had writing. The cause I seeing her writing can. Let me feel very relaxed and I seeing write down something on the paper is a good habit.

✓ I prefer handwriting because seeing her writing can let me feel very relaxed, and I think writing down something on paper is a good habit.

'on the paper'中'the'不必要，通常说'on paper'，介词短语使用不当。