Part 1
Examinador
Do you love flowers?
Candidato
Yay. I like the greenery things, like whenever I see any attractive things near me in the garden, it really caught my heart. So yeah, I like flower very much and whenever I see them I just pick it up.
Examinador
Do you know anyone who loves flowers?
Candidato
Yeah, in my school and college time, there are lots, uh, number of my friends are really crazy for flower. Like whenever they see a beautiful flowers, they, they just pick it up and put in their notes. Like, yeah, I have many friends that.
Examinador
Are there a lot of flowers where you live?
Candidato
Yeah, actually I like Lotus, but it is not found everywhere. But whenever I go in a Riverside, like you can see a number of Lotus there. So in my surrounding, yeah, I like Riverside. So there are lots of Lotus.
Examinador
Do you take photos of flowers in your daily life?
Candidato
Uh, actually, no, because I didn't see the flowers every day because of my, uh, work. And, but whenever I see a cute and very attractive flower, I just took a photo just to, uh, keep, uh, in my mobile phone. So whenever I feel frustrated, I just look that photo.
Examinador
Do people in your country often send flowers to others?
Candidato
Yeah, actually it's like a tradition of our country, like whenever you put tikka on someone's forehead in any festival, you simply give a flower as a blessings like and many other purpose that are to give a flower to each other. Yeah.
Do you love flowers?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct expressions. Avoid informal interjections like 'Yay' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
Exemplo: Yes, I love flowers very much. Whenever I see attractive flowers in the garden, they really catch my attention. Therefore, I often pick them up to appreciate their beauty.
Do you know anyone who loves flowers?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetitive phrases. Use correct plural forms and improve sentence coherence by using linking words.
Exemplo: Yes, many of my friends in school and college love flowers. Whenever they see beautiful flowers, they pick them and press them in their notebooks as keepsakes.
Are there a lot of flowers where you live?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: Try to avoid repetition and use more precise vocabulary. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.
Exemplo: Yes, I like the lotus flower, although it is not found everywhere. However, near the riverside close to my home, there are many lotus flowers growing abundantly.
Do you take photos of flowers in your daily life?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: Reduce the use of filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your thoughts more clearly.
Exemplo: No, I don't take photos of flowers every day because I am busy with work. However, whenever I see a beautiful flower, I take a photo to keep on my phone. Looking at these photos helps me feel better when I am stressed.
Do people in your country often send flowers to others?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: Avoid informal language and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain traditions clearly and provide specific examples.
Exemplo: Yes, sending flowers is a common tradition in my country. For example, during festivals, people put a tikka on someone's forehead and give flowers as a symbol of blessings and good wishes.
× I like flower very much and whenever I see them I just pick it up.
✓ I like flowers very much and whenever I see them I just pick them up.
The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the plural pronoun 'them'. Also, 'pick it up' should be 'pick them up' to agree with the plural noun 'flowers'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.
× there are lots, uh, number of my friends are really crazy for flower.
✓ there are lots of my friends who are really crazy for flowers.
The phrase 'lots, uh, number of my friends' is incorrect; it should be 'lots of my friends'. Also, 'crazy for flower' should be 'crazy for flowers' to use the plural form. This is a singular and plural issue.
× Like whenever they see a beautiful flowers, they, they just pick it up and put in their notes.
✓ Like whenever they see beautiful flowers, they just pick them up and put them in their notes.
'a beautiful flowers' is incorrect because 'flowers' is plural and should not have the article 'a'. Also, 'pick it up' and 'put in their notes' need to use plural pronouns 'them' to agree with 'flowers'. This is a singular and plural issue.
× I have many friends that.
✓ I have many friends like that.
The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'like that' clarifies the meaning. This is a sentence structure issue but also relates to clarity in plural reference.
× there are lots of Lotus.
✓ there are lots of lotuses.
'Lotus' is singular; the plural form is 'lotuses'. Using 'lots of Lotus' is incorrect. This is a singular and plural issue.
× But whenever I go in a Riverside, like you can see a number of Lotus there.
✓ But whenever I go to a riverside, you can see a number of lotuses there.
The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'go to' is the correct phrase. Also, 'Riverside' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. This is an incorrect use of prepositions issue.
× I just took a photo just to, uh, keep, uh, in my mobile phone.
✓ I just take a photo to keep on my mobile phone.
The sentence is about habitual action, so present tense 'take' is appropriate instead of past tense 'took'. Also, 'keep in my mobile phone' should be 'keep on my mobile phone'. This is a past tense issue and preposition issue.
× I just look that photo.
✓ I just look at that photo.
The verb 'look' requires the preposition 'at' when referring to viewing something. This is an incorrect use of prepositions issue.
× it's like a tradition of our country, like whenever you put tikka on someone's forehead in any festival, you simply give a flower as a blessings like and many other purpose that are to give a flower to each other.
✓ It's a tradition in our country that whenever you put tikka on someone's forehead during any festival, you simply give a flower as a blessing and for many other purposes, people give flowers to each other.
The sentence has pronoun and article errors: 'a blessings' should be 'a blessing'; 'many other purpose that are to give a flower' is incorrect and unclear. Also, 'give a flower to each other' should be plural 'flowers'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and articles issue.