Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with one clear topic sentence naming the hometown, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "shops" repeated) and check subject-verb agreement.

Exemplo: I’m from Bathinda district. It’s a pleasant town with good public transport and many shops, such as grocery stores, clothing stores and pharmacies, which make daily life convenient.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence then 2 specific details linked with connectors. Avoid repeating phrases like "very beautiful" and correct small errors (distance wording and article use). Add a brief reason why the park matters to you personally.

Exemplo: What I like most is Ave Park, which is about five kilometres from my home. I visit it often with friends and family because it has quiet walking paths and benches where we can relax and think, so it helps me unwind after a busy week.

Sugestão: Give a single clear sentence stating how long, then add one concise supporting sentence about reasons. Fix tense and phrasing ("since birth", "for 12 years", or give exact age). Use linking words to connect reason and future plan.

Exemplo: I have lived in Bathinda since I was born, so I’m 12 years old. I’m happy here because the environment is pleasant, and I plan to continue living here for the foreseeable future since I have family and schooling nearby.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give 2 specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing and repetition; use correct pluralisation and simple relative clauses to describe opportunities available for young people.

Exemplo: Yes, I think it is. There are several good schools and vocational centres that teach useful skills, and local businesses offer entry-level jobs, so young people can study and gain work experience without moving away.

× My hometown is in Bathinda district. It is a beautiful town where we can find a lot of shops and it is very convenient to public transport.

✓ My hometown is in Bathinda district. It is a beautiful town where we can find a lot of shops and it is very convenient for public transport.

Use of the preposition 'for' is required with 'convenient' when indicating what something is convenient for. This matches the 'There be issue' category because it involves the structure describing existence/availability and the correct collocation with 'convenient'. Suggestion: use 'convenient for' + noun or 'convenient to' + verb phrase (e.g., 'convenient for public transport' or 'convenient for getting around').

× Apart from it, all the grocery store shops were there where we can purchase the daily food items.

✓ Apart from that, all the grocery stores were there where we could purchase daily food items.

Plural noun form 'grocery stores' is required instead of 'grocery store shops' (redundant and incorrect). Also tense consistency: use past 'were' only if narrating past; here 'were' acceptable but 'could' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'grocery stores' and avoid redundant words like 'shops' after 'store'.

× Moreover, clothes and cosmetic shops is also available in my hometown.

✓ Moreover, clothes and cosmetic shops are also available in my hometown.

Subject 'shops' is plural so the verb must be plural 'are' not 'is'. This is a singular/plural agreement error. Suggestion: match verb number to subject number: 'shops are'.

× My hometown is very beautiful and pleasant, but what I like the most about my hometown is the park that is Ave. Park.

✓ My hometown is very beautiful and pleasant, but what I like the most about my hometown is the park called Ave Park.

Use 'called' or 'named' when introducing a proper name for a place; 'the park that is Ave. Park' is awkward. Also punctuation: no period after Ave when used as name. This is an article/wording error; suggestion: 'the park called Ave Park' or 'Ave Park'.

× It is 5 kilometer away from my home.

✓ It is 5 kilometres away from my home.

Use plural 'kilometres' for a measurement greater than one and maintain present simple for location. Also add correct pluralization and spacing. Suggestion: '5 kilometres away'. (If using American English, 'kilometers').

× I often visit there with my friends and family members.

✓ I often visit it with my friends and family members.

Use of 'visit there' is incorrect; 'visit' takes an object ('visit it' or 'go there'). This falls under verb + -ing / verb usage category: correct is 'visit it' or 'go there'. Suggestion: 'I often visit it' or 'I often go there'.

× We get the time to introspect ourselves, our actions.

✓ We get time to introspect about ourselves and our actions.

Redundant comma and incorrect reflexive/pronoun structure. Use 'introspect about' or 'reflect on' and connect items with 'and'. This is a pronoun/use error and word choice issue. Suggestion: 'introspect about ourselves and our actions' or 'reflect on ourselves and our actions'.

× I have been living here since my birth now it's been a 12 years that I was staying in this town and I felt very happy by living here because the environment is very pleasant over the area.

✓ I have been living here since my birth; now it's been 12 years that I have been staying in this town, and I have felt very happy living here because the environment in the area is very pleasant.

Multiple tense and aspect errors: mix of present perfect continuous and incorrect past 'was staying' and 'felt'. Use present perfect continuous 'have been staying' or 'have lived' for duration from past to present. Remove article before '12 years'. Use 'in the area' not 'over the area'. Suggestion: 'I have been living here since my birth' or 'I have lived here for 12 years.'

× In future I plan to stay here only I don't have any plans to move further.

✓ In the future I plan to stay here; I don't have any plans to move elsewhere.

Missing article 'the' in 'in the future' and awkward 'stay here only' and 'move further' phrasing. Use 'elsewhere' or 'move away' for clarity. This is a future-tense/wording issue. Suggestion: 'In the future I plan to stay here; I don't plan to move elsewhere.'

× Yes, definitely my hometown is a good place for young people because my hometown provides a lot of facilities and educational centers were present in my hometown.

✓ Yes, definitely my hometown is a good place for young people because it provides many facilities and educational centers.

Redundant repetition and tense mismatch 'were present'. Use 'many' for countable 'facilities' and avoid repeating 'my hometown'. Remove past 'were present' when speaking generally. Suggestion: 'it provides many facilities and educational centers.'

× I suggest every young people not to move from here because they can have they are having a lot of organizations from where they can learn very variety of skills and get job opportunities.

✓ I would suggest that young people should not move away from here because there are many organizations where they can learn a variety of skills and get job opportunities.

Several pronoun and quantifier issues: 'every young people' is incorrect (use 'young people' or 'every young person'), misuse of 'they can have they are having', and incorrect phrase 'very variety'. Use 'there are many organizations' and 'a variety of skills'. Suggestion: 'I would suggest that young people should not move away because there are many organizations where they can learn a variety of skills and find job opportunities.'