Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 発音と流暢さを改善し、繰り返しや不必要な語句（"it's it's", "near to my it's near to"など）を避けて簡潔に話す練習をしてください。また語彙の選択を正確にし（"one of the album places"は不自然）、文を論理的に構成すること。最初に簡潔なトピック文を述べ、その後1〜2の具体的な補足情報（場所の位置、魅力の理由）を短く加える練習をしてください。

Exemplo: My hometown is Komazawa in Tokyo, which is close to Shibuya Station. I like it because it is convenient and comfortable, with good shops and parks nearby.

Sugestão: 文法（主語と動詞の一致）を正し、語彙を正確に使う練習をしてください（"it have"→"it has", "family remote"ではなく"FamilyMart"）。冗長なフィラー（"umm", "uh"）を減らし、理由と具体例を論理的に結ぶために接続詞を使ってください。回答はまず主張（何が好きか）を述べ、次に具体例を1〜2点挙げると良いです。

Exemplo: I like the convenience of my town because it has many convenience stores like 7-Eleven and FamilyMart, plus numerous vending machines. In addition, there are frequent public transport links, so I can get around easily.

Sugestão: 時制と表現を明確にして、数字の表現を正しく短く述べる練習をしてください（"since I was a child"や"for about 15 years"の使い分け）。冗長な語句や曖昧な表現（"it took me 15 or 16 years ago"）は避け、最初に明確な答えを述べてから補足情報を加えてください。

Exemplo: I've lived in the same place since I was a child, except for one year when I went to study in the United States during high school. In total, I have lived there for about 15 or 16 years.

Sugestão: 主張をはっきりさせ、理由を論理的に述べる練習をしてください。語彙を正確に（"sightseeing spot"など）使い、不要な繰り返しやフィラーを減らすこと。比較や具体例（どんな店、どんな娯楽）があると説得力が増します。

Exemplo: Yes. Because Shibuya, which is close to my hometown, has many shops, restaurants and entertainment venues popular with young people. It also attracts international tourists, so there are always lively events and new trends to enjoy.

× It's near to my it's near to Shibuya station.

✓ It's near Shibuya station.

'There be' category applies because 'near to' is incorrect with 'near' when indicating proximity to a specific place; use 'near' without 'to'. Also remove the repeated fragment. Use: 'It's near Shibuya station.' Suggestion: Use 'near' + place without 'to' and avoid repetitions.

× It's it's one of the album places in Japan and I like it.

✓ It's one of the popular places in Japan and I like it.

The word 'album' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is likely 'popular' or 'famous'. Replace with an appropriate adjective. Suggestion: Choose a clear adjective that matches meaning (popular/famous/beautiful).

× The com convenience and comfortable place.

✓ It is a convenient and comfortable place.

Fragment lacking a verb and incorrect word order. 'Convenient' is the adjective form; 'comfortable' pairs with it. Use full sentence structure: subject + verb + predicate. Suggestion: Use 'It is' or 'It's' followed by two adjectives in correct order.

× I love my town that it have convenience.

✓ I love my town because it is convenient.

Use of 'that it have' is incorrect. Replace with 'because it is' plus adjective 'convenient'. Subject-verb agreement and conjunction usage are fixed. Suggestion: Use 'because' to give reason and 'is convenient' to describe.

× there are a lot of vending machines in uh, 711 or like family remote, the convenience store so I can easily access to them.

✓ There are a lot of vending machines in 7-Eleven and FamilyMart, so I can easily access them.

Use 'There are' correctly; brand/store names formatted and 'access to them' should be 'access them' or 'get them'. Remove 'to' after 'access'. Suggestion: Use correct store names and remove unnecessary fillers.

× It's accessible and it's there.

✓ They are accessible and nearby.

Original is unclear and has pronoun mismatch: 'It's' (it is) doesn't agree with plural 'vending machines'. Better: 'They are accessible' referring to machines, and 'nearby' replaces vague 'there'. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun refers to correct noun and number.

× There are a lot of public transportation and that's useful.

✓ There is a lot of public transportation, and that's useful.

'Public transportation' is an uncountable noun, so use 'There is' not 'There are'. Keep 'that's useful.' Suggestion: Treat uncountable nouns with singular verb.

× I have been living in the same place since when I was a child, but I went to study abroad in America when I was a high school student, first grade.

✓ I have been living in the same place since I was a child, but I studied abroad in America when I was a first-year high school student.

Remove unnecessary 'when' after 'since'. Use past simple 'studied' for the completed action. 'First grade' is unclear for high school; use 'first-year high school student'. Suggestion: Use 'since I was a child' and past simple for completed past actions.

× So like it's it took me 15 or 16 years ago, 16 years to live here.

✓ So I have been living here for about 15 or 16 years.

Original mixes past and present incorrectly. Use present perfect 'have been living' with duration 'for 15 or 16 years'. Do not use 'ago' with present perfect duration. Suggestion: Use 'for' + period with present perfect to express duration.

× in Shibuya station that's near to my hometown umm, there are a lot of shops and umm the tourists from all over the world and there is a like young sightseeing sport.

✓ Near Shibuya station, which is close to my hometown, there are a lot of shops and many tourists from all over the world, and it is a popular sightseeing spot for young people.

Fix 'near to' to 'near' and restructure sentence for clarity. 'There are' for shops and tourists (plural) is correct; 'there is a like young sightseeing sport' is incorrect—replace with 'it is a popular sightseeing spot for young people.' Suggestion: Combine clauses using relative pronoun 'which' and choose correct nouns and adjectives.

× So it's it's it will be good place for the teenager or young people.

✓ So it is a good place for teenagers and young people.

No future meaning intended; remove 'will' and repetitions. Use plural 'teenagers'. 'A good place' doesn't need future tense. Suggestion: Use present simple to describe general truths and correct plural nouns.