Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer has many hesitations and some unclear phrases like "lost four greenery" which makes it hard to understand. Try to speak more fluently and use clear, natural expressions. Also, avoid repeating words and filler sounds like "uh". Keep your answer concise and directly describe your hometown with specific details.

Exemplo: My hometown is Koshani, located in the eastern part of Nepal. It is known for its lush greenery and stunning mountain views. Many people visit for trekking and swimming in the natural rivers nearby.

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid vague phrases like "and that thing." Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about what you like. Also, avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily.

Exemplo: I like my hometown because it offers many outdoor activities, especially trekking. Whenever my friends visit, we enjoy trekking and swimming together, which makes my hometown very special to me.

Sugestão: Your answer is confusing and contains many hesitations and unclear phrases like "since my boat" and "further house examination." Try to prepare your answer to be clear and direct. Use simple sentences to explain how long you have lived there and your current situation.

Exemplo: I have lived in my hometown since I was born and have never moved away. However, I am currently staying in Kathmandu for my higher studies.

Sugestão: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and repeats ideas. Try to use correct grammar and avoid repeating phrases like "like I said." Provide clear reasons and examples why your hometown is good for young people, using linking words to connect your ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because there are many outdoor activities available. For example, young people can enjoy trekking and swimming with their friends, which helps them stay active and socialize.

× My hometown is in Koshani which is located in eastern part of Nepal.

✓ My hometown is in Koshani, which is located in the eastern part of Nepal.

The phrase 'in eastern part of Nepal' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'eastern part'. In English, when referring to a specific part of a place, we use 'the' before the noun phrase. So, it should be 'in the eastern part of Nepal'.

× it has a beautiful, uh, it, it has uh, my hometown has lost four greenery and a breathtaking view, mountain views and it is quite famous for uh, trekking, uh, trekking or swimming on natural river.

✓ It has beautiful greenery and breathtaking mountain views, and it is quite famous for trekking or swimming in natural rivers.

The original sentence has redundant and unclear phrases like 'lost four greenery' which is incorrect. 'Lost four greenery' seems to be a mishearing or misstatement. The correct phrase is 'beautiful greenery'. Also, 'swimming on natural river' should be 'swimming in natural rivers' because we swim in water bodies, not on them, and 'rivers' should be plural to generalize. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Like I said before, it is my hometown is popular for outdoor activities and especially I like trekking.

✓ Like I said before, my hometown is popular for outdoor activities, and especially I like trekking.

The phrase 'it is my hometown is popular' is redundant and incorrect. The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary here. The correct sentence should directly state 'my hometown is popular'. This removes redundancy and improves clarity.

× Whenever my friends came will be in my hometown we just went to for tracking and swimming and that thing.

✓ Whenever my friends come to my hometown, we just go trekking and swimming.

The original sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect prepositions. 'Came will be' is incorrect; it should be 'come'. Also, 'went to for tracking' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go trekking'. 'That thing' is vague and unnecessary. The sentence is simplified and corrected for tense and preposition use.

× Uh, I've been living there from, since my boat, uh, I haven't, uh, moved out from at all anywhere from town, but recently, uh, right now I'm on Kathmandu, Kathmandu for my further house examination.

✓ I've been living there since my birth. I haven't moved out of the town at all, but recently, right now, I'm in Kathmandu for my further studies.

The phrase 'since my boat' is incorrect; it should be 'since my birth'. 'Moved out from at all anywhere from town' is awkward and incorrect; the correct phrase is 'moved out of the town at all'. 'I'm on Kathmandu' should be 'I'm in Kathmandu'. 'Further house examination' is unclear; likely intended 'further studies'. The sentence is corrected for past tense and preposition use, and clarified.

× Yeah, it is quite good because I also born there and raised there and a lot of people are very good here.

✓ Yeah, it is quite good because I was also born and raised there, and a lot of people are very good there.

The phrase 'I also born there and raised there' is incorrect; it should be 'I was also born and raised there' to use the correct past passive form. 'A lot of people are very good here' is inconsistent with the location; it should be 'there' to refer to the hometown. The sentence is corrected for verb form and pronoun use.

× Like I said, there are a lot of things for two activities, for example, like I said, we go for trekking or swimming with my friends.

✓ Like I said, there are a lot of things to do, for example, we go trekking or swimming with my friends.

The phrase 'things for two activities' is incorrect; it should be 'things to do'. Also, 'go for trekking' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go trekking'. The sentence is corrected for preposition and phrase use.