Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answer clearer and more natural by avoiding awkward phrases like 'fertile agriculture or land' and 'growing crops like trees.' Instead, use simple and correct expressions. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: My hometown is a small village near Kampung Jam city. It is famous for its fertile land, and most people there are farmers who grow crops like rice and vegetables.

Sugestão: In English (Cambodia), focus on making your sentences clearer and more natural. Avoid confusing phrases like 'I like to think about my hometown first' and 'the cloudy from life in the city.' Use linking words to connect ideas and keep your answer organized.

Exemplo: I like my hometown because it is far from the city, so there is less noise and pollution. Also, the environment is very green and natural, and the people are friendly.

Sugestão: In English (Cambodia), answer the question directly and clearly. Avoid mixing information about living in France if it is not relevant. Use correct grammar and complete sentences. Provide specific details about your time in your hometown.

Exemplo: I have lived in my hometown for many years. During that time, I made many friends with my neighbors, and I know several places where I can relax and have fun.

Sugestão: In English (Cambodia), your answer is quite clear. To improve, try to use linking words like 'because' and 'but' to make your ideas flow better. Also, give more specific examples to support your opinion.

Exemplo: I don't think my hometown is good for young people because it lacks modern amenities like fast Internet, shopping centers, and cinemas. But if young people enjoy nature and quiet places, they might like it there.

× My hometown is a small village in the countryside which is located in the provincial capital of Kampung Jam.

✓ My hometown is a small village in the countryside near the provincial capital of Kampung Jam.

The phrase 'located in the provincial capital' is incorrect because a village cannot be located inside a provincial capital city. The correct preposition is 'near' to indicate proximity.

× It is well known for fertile agriculture or land, whereas most of the villagers do farming for livelihood such as growing crops like trees.

✓ It is well known for its fertile land, and most of the villagers farm for their livelihood by growing crops and trees.

The phrase 'fertile agriculture or land' is incorrect; 'fertile land' is the proper expression. Also, 'do farming' should be 'farm', and 'such as growing crops like trees' is awkward; 'growing crops and trees' is clearer.

× Honestly speaking, I like to think about my hometown first.

✓ Honestly speaking, I like my hometown the most.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'I like to think about my hometown first' does not clearly express preference. The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning.

× All in the location it's mean it far away from the city where it's likely to affected by noise pollution or the cloudy from life in the city.

✓ Overall, it means it is far away from the city, so it is less likely to be affected by noise pollution or the smog from city life.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and grammar. 'All in the location' is unclear; 'far away from the city' needs 'is'; 'likely to affected' should be 'likely to be affected'; 'cloudy' is incorrect, 'smog' or 'pollution' is appropriate.

× And also the environment is very green nature and people are very friendly.

✓ Also, the environment is very green and natural, and the people are very friendly.

The phrase 'green nature' is incorrect; 'green and natural' is better. Also, the sentence needs proper conjunctions and articles.

× In France, I lived there for 15 years before moving to my current address in the city.

✓ I lived in France for 15 years before moving to my current address in the city.

The phrase 'In France, I lived there' is redundant; 'I lived in France' is correct. The past tense 'lived' is used correctly here.

× However, during the years that I live in my hometown, I made a lot of friends with my neighbor.

✓ However, during the years that I lived in my hometown, I made a lot of friends with my neighbors.

The phrase 'that I live' should be past tense 'that I lived' to match 'made'. Also, 'neighbor' should be plural 'neighbors'.

× I know a lot of place where I can go to enjoy and we will.

✓ I know a lot of places where I can go to enjoy, and we do.

'A lot of place' should be 'a lot of places' (plural). The phrase 'and we will' is incomplete; 'and we do' is clearer.

× I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people nowadays since they only prefer modern amenities such as Internet access, shopping center or entertainment options such as cinemas or restaurants.

✓ I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people nowadays since they only prefer modern amenities such as Internet access, shopping centers, or entertainment options such as cinemas or restaurants.

'Shopping center' should be plural 'shopping centers' to match the list and quantifier 'such as'.