Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar kichu information clear na. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke shothik vabe structure korte, ar unnecessary repetition avoid korte. Apnar answer ke 3-4 sentence er moddhe rakhun, ar specific details clear vabe bolun.

Exemplo: I am from Cheers Gong, a small town in Bangladesh. It is located beside the Jamuna River, which is one of the largest rivers in the country. The town is also known for having the largest breeze in Bangladesh.

Sugestão: Apnar answer e kichu grammar mistake ache, ar kichu sentence incomplete mone hoy. Apni chesta korun direct question er uttor dite, ar supporting details clear vabe dite linking words use kore. Apnar feelings ar reasons specific vabe bolun.

Exemplo: I like my hometown because it is very beautiful and peaceful. Moreover, I have many friends and relatives there, so I miss it a lot since I now live in Dhaka.

Sugestão: Apnar answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar sentence gulo onek bar repeat hocche. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke shothik vabe structure korte, ar information ke clear vabe organize korte. Linking words use kore answer ke coherent korun.

Exemplo: I was brought up in my hometown and lived there for about 10 to 15 years. I completed my ACC, and both my school and college are located there, so I spent a long time in my hometown.

Sugestão: Apnar answer e kichu grammar mistake ache, ar kichu sentence structure bhalo na. Apni chesta korun linking words use korte, ar sentence gulo ke shothik vabe organize korte. Specific examples diye apnar kotha ke aro bhalo vabe express korun.

Exemplo: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because the market, banks, schools, and hospitals are all well organized and located close to each other. Therefore, young people can live peacefully there.

× It's a small town but I we have a very big river in the beside of our city that called Jamuna River and we also have a largest breeze in Bangladesh that called.

✓ It's a small town but we have a very big river beside our city called the Jamuna River and we also have the largest breeze in Bangladesh called.

The phrase 'in the beside of' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'beside'. Also, 'that called' should be 'called' or 'which is called'. 'I we' is a typo and should be 'we'. 'a largest' is incorrect; 'largest' is a superlative adjective and should be preceded by 'the'.

× My hometown is a very small, but my hometown is very beautiful.

✓ My hometown is very small, but it is very beautiful.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'very small' because 'small' is an adjective describing 'hometown' which is singular; 'a very small' is acceptable but the sentence is awkward. Also, repeating 'my hometown' is redundant; using 'it' improves sentence flow.

× All of the site I have so many friends and relatives so that I miss my city because now I I live in Dhaka, the capital of Bangladesh.

✓ In all the sites, I have so many friends and relatives, so I miss my city because now I live in Dhaka, the capital of Bangladesh.

The phrase 'All of the site' is incorrect; it should be 'In all the sites' or 'At all the sites'. Also, 'so that I miss' is incorrect; 'so I miss' is appropriate here. The repeated 'I' is a typo.

× I brought up in my hometown, I lived there almost 10 to 15 years.

✓ I was brought up in my hometown; I lived there for almost 10 to 15 years.

The verb 'brought' is past tense but the correct passive form is 'was brought up'. Also, 'almost 10 to 15 years' is awkward; 'for almost 10 to 15 years' is better.

× I complete my ACC from my hometown, my school, college, both are in my hometown so that I live in so long time in my hometown.

✓ I completed my ACC in my hometown; my school and college are both in my hometown, so I lived there for a long time.

The verb tense should be past tense 'completed' to match the time frame. 'From my hometown' is better as 'in my hometown'. 'So that I live in so long time' is incorrect; 'so I lived there for a long time' is correct.

× Yes, my hometown is very good place for young people because because the market and the all things are very organized, the bank, the school, the hospitals are very close to on to other, so that young people live in very peaceful.

✓ Yes, my hometown is a very good place for young people because the market and all things are very organized; the bank, the school, and the hospitals are very close to one another, so young people live very peacefully.

Missing article 'a' before 'very good place'. 'Because because' is a repetition error. 'The all things' should be 'all things'. 'Close to on to other' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'close to one another'. 'Live in very peaceful' is incorrect; correct adverb form is 'live very peacefully'.