Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some confusing phrases. Try to be more precise and avoid unnecessary or unclear information. Also, keep your answer natural and straightforward.

Exemplo: My hometown is E Jibboo, which is located in the Ogun State of Nigeria, specifically in the Boone local government area.

Sugestão: Your answer shows good intention but needs to be clearer and more natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, try to use more specific vocabulary to describe the welcoming nature of your hometown.

Exemplo: I like that my hometown is very welcoming to everyone. For example, when visitors come, people treat them as if they are already part of the community, which makes the place very friendly.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct answer with clear time reference and avoid confusing phrases. Keep your sentences simple and correct.

Exemplo: I have lived in my hometown since I was born, so it has been about 25 years.

Sugestão: Your answer repeats ideas and has some unclear parts. Try to organize your answer with linking words and avoid repetition. Use specific examples to support your points.

Exemplo: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because there are many schools for those who want to study. Additionally, there are plenty of job opportunities for young people who want to work and learn new skills.

× My hometown is E Jibboo in Ogun State, Nigeria. It's the quota of Egypt. Boone N local government area.

✓ My hometown is E Jibboo in Ogun State, Nigeria. It's the quota of Egba, in the Obafemi Owode local government area.

The phrase 'quota of Egypt' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the student meant 'quota of Egba' or a local area name. Also, 'Boone N local government area' is likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'Obafemi Owode local government area'. Using the correct local government area name and prepositions improves clarity and correctness.

× What I like about my hometown is ready to welcome anybody, for instance, if you are, if there is a visitor for us. So welcome them like they already part of us.

✓ What I like about my hometown is that it is ready to welcome anybody; for instance, if there is a visitor, we welcome them as if they are already part of us.

The original sentence lacks a subject in the first clause and misuses pronouns. Adding 'that it is' clarifies the subject. Also, 'like they already part of us' should be 'as if they are already part of us' to correctly use pronouns and verb forms.

× Have been staying there since I was born. There will be of that will be 25 years ago. 'Cause my parents are a bit I'm brought up from each other.

✓ I have been staying there since I was born. That will be 25 years ago because my parents are separated, so I was brought up by each of them.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Adding the subject 'I' and auxiliary verb 'have' corrects the tense. 'There will be of that will be 25 years ago' is incorrect; it should be 'That will be 25 years ago'. The phrase about parents is unclear; 'my parents are separated, so I was brought up by each of them' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because there a lot of job opportunities for them and a lot of schools for, from this phone, young people that wants to go to school and a lot of job opportunities for young people that wants to learn.

✓ Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because there are a lot of job opportunities for them and many schools for young people who want to go to school, as well as many job opportunities for young people who want to learn.

The phrase 'there a lot of job opportunities' is missing the verb 'are'. Also, 'young people that wants' should be 'young people who want' to agree in number and use correct relative pronouns. The phrase 'from this phone' is unclear and likely an error, so it was omitted for clarity.